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Reviews for Just another day in paradise

By : arora1

From ANON - tiffany on November 15, 2006
*close eyes* alright i would to say i wanted to cry a lot. I also was really upset about what happed with naruto and sasuke but i wanted to read all of before i jumped to any thing i hafe to say the ending was fitting for it im glad that Itachi killed that sank basted as if i hated him as it was danm also i have a lil more recsctp for saukra now it touched me how she helped him with out a sec thought and as for hatina she just kicks ass and i loved it how she yelled at that lady to help naruto and also when she stole that guys keys and kissed saukra yeah that was shocker would have never thougt of that one. i would also like to add that i almost went nuts when sasuke found out about his famliy it was very shocking and it had me very lost but it made since to me as some part of the story and it also drew me in on how sasuke was trying to help naruto i must say i was drawn in but more upset it was good story yes but some fo it just upset me some but that�s aright i mean it all ending good right? and for the 2nd prat i would like to see how there relship goes on for on in the story i also would to add it had a lot of feeling to it and i just was not sure how i would reacked to all of it but after ending it seems to have some feeling to it made want to cry and after much loss of sleep and ranting at my net i would say it was wroth reading when it all end good to were they was self and ok. i also look frowed to more of your fan fic in the over time even thow this one had me very sad i steel like how they found well to surive and be to gather tell the end also Itachi letter was sad but touching how he was willing to do all of that for sasuke to pertaked him from the same hurbble fate he had to go thow at first i was kind annoyed that he killed every one but i fully unstained now and why he did it and i would say that if i was him i would hafe to do something to im just glad it was not him that hurt naruto after all i mean he done some things but i didn�t think he would go that low ether so its relief that it was not like i thought i also want to add that you had me very surprised some of the time and shocked to you seems to very good at that heh well any ways that�s all i have to say hope to read more of your story�s soon.
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From kitana on November 12, 2006
I really, really liked this. :3 There were some grammatical errors that threw me off a few times, but not enough to detract from the sheer need-based relationship that you set up between Sasuke and Naruto. I'm looking forward to reading more of your work, and hopefully you'll write something just as good as this. It absorbed me for the better part of last night, and although I had to turn away for a moment from some of the more brutal parts, I still enjoyed this immensely. Maybe more than I should have. XD

Keep writing, because you rock at it,

Kit
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From promise2003 on November 01, 2006
A sequel please, or perhaps just an epilogue...one where Sasuke goes and sees Itachi...and Sasuke and Naruto are, well, together. PLEASE! I would really like to see it. I loved this story, especially the parts with Tsunade and Jiraiya. You should really write a story that stars those two since you write them so well. Thanks for taking the time to write this, I MUST go read broken soon (its been in my 'stories to read' bookmark folder forever.
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From ANON - innerchild on October 17, 2006
damn, the whole time i've been reading this story, my eyes would tear up and i'd have to stop reading. i love this story, so much. i like how sakura and hinata got together, since they're a cute but unlikely couple. and who doesn't like sasuke and naruto? and good job with making itachi the good guy in this. if you ever make a sequel, which i would totally read, then i would hope that he be in it. it would be sad though if sasuke visited him when he's about to die... poor kid, he just can't get a break from the angst. and i love how tsunade and jiriaya are getting married and adopting naruto. i hope everything works out for them :)

now to go check out ur other fics!

-inc
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From ANON - Jane_Lane on October 16, 2006
You are one awsome fucking writer! Woot!
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From ANON - Kimra on October 12, 2006
I've just read this story and although it was brilliant and I did enjoy reading it throughout the way, I am a little disapointed. I had hoped, after all of the graphic rape scenes that you would appease the readers with a consensual sex scene between the mains. I'm not saying your story wasn't good. It was good. I was quite intrigued by it and read the whole thing through, despite the fact that I tend to avoid stories involving rape. I honestly would not have started reading your story had I been aware there was any rape in it. But being dutifully hooked by the time that came about (yes that was very early in the story) and not getting to any graphic details I was happy to continue reading. I did skim past the rape scenes (very difficult in that shower scene) as quickly as I could and continued to read despite my dislike of the subject. You treated it well and despite a few moments (Shino's dad telling them that they'd never be able to press any charges) which I found absolutly beyond belief (which you settled with that wonderful law jargon later) I loved this story.

Abject missery does not often sit well with me, either, but the building of a realistic realtionship in the midst of the tragedy was well worth my time and entranced me. Now I'm fully aware that Sasu and Naru couldn't just jump in the sack after that whole lot of stuff... that would have been distasteful considering the quality of the rest of the story... but I would have loved and I mean absolutly loved if you had an epilogue or something set a long while later. Not for the smut value of a good sex scene... or even a half decent one. But... erg I can't phrase it. It just would have been good. Especially since you put so much effort into explaining the bad things, a nice things scene. Full of hugs and kisses and whatever, would ahve been the pinicle of a great story.

I still like the story, but I leave it feeling not as happy as I wish I could. Thank you veyr much for writting such a great story and I apologise if you take offense from anything I have written. I also apologise for the horrible spelling / gramma / all other forms of English structure that I am failing to ues in this review.

On a final note. I do love, beyond explenation the conclussion behind Itachi. The plot bunnies for that where very very rare and highly worth clinging to.
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From ANON - frizzy197 on September 17, 2006
awsome! this is one of the best fanfics i've read in so long. that was so freakin' good.
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From ANON - Mija on July 21, 2006
ok I just have to say one thing, I WAS UP FOR TWO NIGHTS READING THIS FIC...but wow was it totally worth it, I mean when i started it I wasnt sure if I was going to get all into it, AU fics dont really get me all absorbed much, some do mind ya, just not many, but omg this had me hooked and I could not stop readiing it, last night I did because the sun had risen and I had been up for like 20 hours and I had to sleep, was sick and not sleeping is not good, and then I finished tonight and its like...ummmm, lemme check ok its 457am so ya I gotta sleep but I just have to say this was a fantastic fic, no wonder it was recommended on the LJ site, I had it bookmarked but never read it before, then I heard ya mention broken and im like OMG I love that fic and well I just had to check this one out as well, and it was totally worth every sleepless moment, I was addicted to it, it had LONG very detailed and wonderful chapters and there was no cliffy, I gotta read it all and I was soooooo happy bout that...anyhow, you have a wonderfull writing talent, as proven already by broken, but this one was fantastic as well, I soo hope to read more of your fics in the future, will have to book mark your bio to check for other fics and then check out your LJ if its open to the public and see what I find in there..anyway loved this, wonderful work, and sadly enough, there ARE sick people like that in the world..makes you wonder sometimes about..stuff...and why things happen and why we dont seem to care as much as we used to, its as if nothing fazez us anymore..its sad, so reading this and having it make me cry and wince and hurt was good, let me know I wasnt a cold hearted person yet and still had emotions and could react to things like that, ok ok, Im babbling need sleep, sorry for the babble, ty again for the totally wonderful and awesome read, huggles and smiles Mija..:-)
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From ANON - ello on July 15, 2006
You are an amazing writer. this story kept me glued from 11:30 pm to 1:42 am. I loved how is was lead to believe it was orginally Itachi in the rape videos but lead to be Fugaku. This AU story has got to have been one of the best I've read. I usually prefure to keep to the whole we're-ninja-people thing but this was great. Great story. I wish it almost didn't end but then I'd have to wait for more so it's a mixed feeling. I aplaude (sp?) you on your story. It was a fabulous read.
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From ANON - lone-lycan on July 14, 2006
OMG!!! Where did you learn to write like that! I was draw into the story that when I read it, which was on the 4th of July, I didn't bother to leave my home to see fireworks!!!! I would have cried so hard at Nauto's predicement if i wasn't so emotionally screwed up but when Naruto stopped breathing for that instance I went in to shock along with Sasuke. Holy crap! I was ready to curse your good screenname lol *blush* The ending I have saw coming because my mind bends that way some times but when Sasuke put the gun to his head and fired I was ready to curse your name, again *blush, cough, cough...* All and all that was a well written, eye catching, horribly tragic story and I enjoyed it to the fullest. Just this morning I saw it again and I told myself i was just going to read the first page. Next thing I knew i was reading it again even though I knew what was going to happen!
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From ANON - Malkloc on July 13, 2006
Holy shit. That was a good fic. I'm in awe. You're good at writing. The characters were believable. The twist at the end with Itachi and Fugaku was amazing, too. I'm feeling really disturbed by this and kinda half-wish I didn't read it. But it's rare to find this calibre of fic and I was assured of a happy ending. Great fic. I'm going to have to read a million well-written fluff fics now.

And here I was thinking that only Harry Potter had long, well-written mindfucks like this. Of course, I don't really go looking for them. They just happen. I think I have some mental scarring now from the angst.

Really, really, good fic. Amazing. It was really heart-wrenching. I better stop now before I repeat myself any more.

Ok. I better go find some fluff fics and maybe watch a few filler episodes. That'll make me happy again, right?
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From ANON - Inuki on July 11, 2006
lol i don't know when you posted this or whatever, but i just finished it
and that was INTENSE!!!
i loved it, it was such a great story and had a good ending too.
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From ANON - lo on July 02, 2006
Good job, but remember you want to use the word SHUDDER.
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From ANON - lo on July 02, 2006
Good, I like the progression of the story. Some times you confuse 'than' and 'then' they are not interchangable.
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From MsKeller on July 01, 2006
Pretty much all I want to do is applaud your ability to master the characters psychology. I've read many fics involving rape that go so far of base and yet you did a great job of showing their interanal struggles through exernal examples. This was both heart breaking and wonderful. I'm especially happy that you had Sasuke living in the orphange instead of having him magically emancipated. I would love to see the sequel but I honestly have a hard time imagining one since you have the perfect ending. There are so many great things that you did with this story that I could go on and on, but I'll leave it at a simple two thumbs up.
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