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Reviews for Just another day in paradise

By : arora1
  • From ANON - Leasan on September 22, 2005
    And yet another awesome chapter...You already know how I absolutely admire your work, don't you? :)
    Oh, and thanks for the introductory law info on rape etc commited on a minor. That sure was interesting and explained a lot.
    Excelent work, as always. Can't wait for the next update, oh!, the pain of waiting...
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  • From ANON - bookworm51485 on September 22, 2005
    I don't know, I think I took the chapter differently than Cadence. I'm not sure if this is how you meant it to be, but I assumed that most of the chapter was written from Sasuke's perspective. So basically the perspective of a teenage boy and having been around a lot of them that's how they talk. Actually they usually go a bit more vulgar than that but that might just be for effect. I can see a teenage boy talking to himself like this and it seems fine to me. But maybe that's just me and I interpreted it wrong. Even with all the laws I still can't see the law allowing a person to be beaten into consent, though truthfully I didn't read through all of the laws completely. I just skimmed. Now this has made me really curious and I'm tempted to find a lawyer to ask this question. Cause if this is true then that law seriously SERIOUSLY needs to be changed cause it's ridiculous. So Sasuke finally figured out what happened to Naruto, I can see why he wouldn't have figured it out sooner. He might be intelligent but he seems very self absorbed and it seems like it would take something shoving it in his face for him to get it. And that's pretty much what happened. I kinda wish more had happened in the chapter, but it's probably good that you didn't put more because then it probably would have seemed rushed. So I guess the solution to that would be to make the chapters longer:D I liked this new chapter, though I'd like to see what's going on with the people who attacked Naruto. I'm kinda curious what they're doing now and if they have further plans for Naruto or if they're going to leave him alone now. And with Sasuke talking about his brother, he seems too nice to do something bad like that to Naruto but you never know. He seemed nice in the series then he went crazy and killed his family. I would love to see Sasuke's family take Naruto in instead of him going back to the orphanage, though I don't see that happening since they seem like they barely want the kid that they do have. But I guess I'll just have to wait and see where the story ends up. It has so many directions that it can go in and it really makes me wonder where you're going to take it. Great job and update soon, can't wait:)
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  • From ANON - Cadence on September 21, 2005
    Not to be mean, but your story is going down hill. Seriously. I liked it at first, but you need to get your act together because this chapter wasn't good. I think it might have been the amount of times you said dick and butt. It was gross and unnecessary. I'm not sure I'll read any more chapters, but if I do, I hope they are better than this one.
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  • From ANON - Manda-Kun on September 20, 2005
    I love it. I nice refreshing storyline for a sasuke/naruto au fanfic. I think I'm scared of rats now though. o.o
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  • From ANON - bookworm51845 on September 17, 2005
    I was reading through your reviews and unsureinherseat said that you were wrong in saying that the DA would be the prosecutor but it is right. DA doesn't stand for Defense Attorney, it stands for District Attorney. Or ADA for Assistant District Attorney. You probably already know that I just wanted to say so you wouldn't think you were wrong.
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  • From ANON - Kori Nibiki on September 17, 2005
    Wow. ... I just read your story straight through chapters 1 thru 5... And I am speechless. This is .... *shakes head* Wonderful work. Looking forward to the next update. Ja.
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  • From ANON - unsureinherseat on September 17, 2005
    Also i dunno if you altered it for your fic but Naruto is a minor. Even if he constented the law says he isn't old enough to make that choice. Not until he is 18 years old. And Orochimaru could still get arrested for rape/sex with a minor/Phebophilia/and more that i am having issues remembering right now -_-;;

    I am never going to pass that stupid BAR exam T.T

    Anyways yeah, the DA is wrong, sex with a minor is sex with a minor, under the age of 18 the question of consent is null and void, by law they are unable to make that choice themselves.

    By the way DA is Defence Attourney(sp?) They would be the one defending the accused. I think you wanted a prosocuting attourney though i am not too clear on that one.
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  • From ANON - unsureinherseat on September 17, 2005
    i dunno if i have reviewed this story yet but i have been following it for a while, very nice XDD I enjoy it lots, poor Naruto though, i want Sasuke to be his knight-in-shiney-armour. XDDDD I look forward to another chapter from you (hopefully soon? *wink wink*)
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  • From ANON - dyingstar-elipsis on September 17, 2005
    oh my gosh that's really sick. i mean, i know it's adultff.net but isn't it a little extreme? i was wincing and cringing throughout the entire fic because i was feeling so painful for naruto. i hope he gets better soon. orochimaru is really so damn sick. sorry if i sound like a flamer but i'm not. i like your writing, just that, it's a little unconvincing, how abused naruto is. or maybe i'm just naive...
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  • From ANON - blisblop on September 17, 2005
    You can not consent to assult,anywhere! Minor or not.Thats why suicide is against the law,you can not leagaly harm or agree for someone else to harm you.Any sexual contact with a minor is statutory rape,the kid doesn't have to prove it hurt!There is no "just" sex with a minor....in real life.No adult can get in the personal space of a minor,18 inches I beleive,a teacher can not touch you,unwanted touching meaning its not to help you from harm,say a trainer spotting you ,is assult,yes,a touch is assult and sexual contact,esp,intercourse/penetration with anything is rape.Kida have rights.They don't have to prove shit also they can't refuse a rape test neither can their guardians,thats obstructing justice and if the hospital lets them go they are responsible. and cullable.In real life and in a perfect situation,we all know class and money have alot to do with how you are treated at a hospital and by the authorities. sighs.
    Sasuke is being dence,he must know whats up,come on....he is more concerned with females being flirted with then a raped boy...I am not impressed Sasuke.This fic is gripping and horribly sad.
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  • From ANON - redfox9t on September 17, 2005
    I hate what thoes bastards did to poor Naruto, I hope they die! please update soon, I can't wait for the next chapter, I hope Naruto doesn't get hurt again
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  • From ANON - Jiggy on September 17, 2005
    Very, Very good story
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  • From ANON - bookworm51485 on September 17, 2005
    It's 6am and I've been up all night trying to play catch up so I'm a little too tired to leave a good review but I just wanted to say that this is a good chapter. Makes me wanna cry and not too many things make me wanna cry these days. Life just isn't fair to Naruto:'( I'm happy to see that you seem to be working on this story regularly and not making it a backup story like you said. I think both of your stories are equally good and I'm excited about them both. I can't wait for the next chapter for either of your stories. Get really excited when I see a new update. Anyways that's all from me, goodnight I'm going to sleep now. Update soon:)
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  • From ANON - Leasan on September 17, 2005
    How is it possible that sasuke still haven't figured out that Naruto was raped?! He's not dense! Come on...
    Beside that, that's a good chapter, giving the feeling of silence before the storm.
    Keep up the great work!!
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  • From ANON - Lease on September 17, 2005
    Your writing is wonderful. I really hope you continue this story, you got me hooked!
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