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Reviews for Coming of Age

By : TsukiMorositey
  • From ANON - krickets on November 13, 2005
    very lovely! the lemon scenes are to die for!

    well i always like to have some somthing to add to these to help
    improve the story. not just pointing out mistakes but giving
    ways to fix them so here it goes.


    your sentence structure can use some work
    and there are quite a few typos in all the
    chapters but especially chapter two.
    also there were quite a few sentence problems in chapter two
    if i were you i would go back and re-read
    the first half of chapter two aloud. thats the best way
    to see if somthing makes sense....i.e. if it dosnt
    make sense when you read it out loud then
    it dosnt make sense when other people read it.

    its a trick i learned in creative writing...it always just
    seems silly to speak those things out loud somtimes
    ...hmmm, try muttering...yea muttering helps
    remember to spell check!
    thanks for a great fick!
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  • From ANON - xetha on October 28, 2005
    well... wow.. this is an interesting story i got to say.
    and I like that you let naruto l movie in with sasuke with his geen frogs and all ^__^
    hope you'll update soon
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  • From ANON - Mija on October 14, 2005
    oooh man you just have to update this fic soon, it is sooo good, not that its allll sex, which is really really good btw, lol, but it has a plot a reason for Kakashi to screw Naruto, even if niether have feelings for each other, I really like this plot line, I have read alot of Naruto in heat fics and although they are good, they are mostly sex with little to no plot, not that I am complaining, AT ALL..lol...but I like to read a plot every now and then and this is the first Naru in heat one that I can recall really enjoying emensly, anyhow I really hope you update soon, I know you cant do an email alert, but I will look back and hope to find an update for this fic, ty for the great read, much huggles and smiles Mija...:-)
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  • From ANON - sarahi on September 26, 2005
    i love it,this is sooo uncommon! great job i can't wait til you update!
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  • From ANON - bhodi li on August 29, 2005
    hi, just wanted to drop a line to say that "i like ur work" though the scenes with kakashi are very eye-riveting, i can't wait to see what the seals do to naruto later...until then..continue to wait for ur update.
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  • From ANON - Ruka on August 26, 2005
    wow this is such a hot story! Please update sooN!
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  • From ANON - Saske\'s Iris on August 24, 2005
    OOOOhhhhh good stuff, I so agree with the whole Kakashi really doesn't get enough love with Naruto in non perv setting. I like the way you are writing the story it is enjoyable and hopefully we will get to see alittle Naru sasu in the future wink wink nudge nudge.. hehe
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  • From ANON - Stormraven on August 24, 2005
    OMG! Great sex scenes....*feels light-headed* I love your characterizations and a strong seme Kakashi always pleases. Nice, clean writing style, very enjoyable to read. Can hardly wait to see what comes next!
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  • From ANON - EscagirlUK on August 23, 2005
    Promise me you will *never* use the word 'fluffy' in reference to a penis *ever* again! And other than that great fic. Sasuke better be on bottom when they finally get together!
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 23, 2005
    Hmm... good chapter, but ya gotta work on the sentence structure a bit >< Alot of things ya said made little sense ^^;
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  • From ANON - blisblop on August 23, 2005
    This is an absolute hoot.Very nice.Funny too.Gentile raunch,gotta love it.
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  • From ANON - Terry on August 23, 2005
    I like how you portray the Kyuubi. Very wild. Can't wait til the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Erika on August 23, 2005
    WHAT!?! Why the heck did he cut himself?? ohmant hat was GREAT and I like the idea that Kyuubi is finally giving Naruto a chance to enjoy himself and that Kakashi is being Nicer about it, Oh and let me guess Maybe Iruka would like to be the Boyfriend of out copy-nin? LOL...that was GREAT:D THANKS:d GOOD LUCK in School just started myself..SCARY!!! But oh well, beats the hell out of the summer sessions:D
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  • From ANON - Anon on August 23, 2005
    hee! This fic is great. You've got some interesting, varied sex, and it's tender without being all "we were forced to fuck, now we are in love" (although I have nothing against people having crushes on Naruto /bias) Dirty and sweet!
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  • From ANON - MeLaiya on August 19, 2005
    OMG, You have got to hurry and update, your killing me here. I absolutely love this, im not a very avid k/n fan but i fucking love this. it is the absolute best i have ever read in this category. please hurry and update soon, im begging you PLEASE!!!!
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