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By : KeairaxSeiaa
  • From ANON - Shiin on November 06, 2005
    "Also, I’ve always been a little confused by the way yaoi fans tend to like one character in a couple to be the seme all the time, and the other to be the uke all the time. That’s not usually how real homosexual relationships work, and so that’s not how Sasuke and Naruto are going to be portrayed in my story. At the moment, I guess you could say that Naruto is acting more “uke-ish”, but that’s only because he’s just discovering his sexuality, while Sasuke accepted his own long ago. That will change. I plan for Sasuke and Naruto’s relationship to be an equal partnership, so I just thought I’d warn you about that now."

    OMG YAY!!!! FINALLY someone who agrees! (OK, there are tonnes who agree, but there are sooo many more who don't.) This fic just jumped another ten places higher on my 'favourite fics' list *grin*

    "It must not be true about all cars, though, because my cousin has locked me INSIDE mine once, at a gas station."

    I think it's only true for the front-seat doors in cars, and the child-minder lock can be activated on the back seats. It may not be true for older models, I guess, but I very much doubt Sasuke's car is anything but the height of fashion *grins* But I think it's some sort of safety regulation that you have to be ably to open the front-seat doors in cars from the inside regardless of whether it's locked or not, in case of an accident...

    As for the Itachi call thing, I realize that was your intent, but I feel that in that case Sasuke is probably used to Itachi calling and worrying and should therefore seem more exhasperated and annoyed from the beginning rather than patiently explaining before becoming pissed off. But then, what Sasuke said could have been said in many ways and it could be that I just didn't read it in a way that conveyed said emotions... maybe you could use more adjectives describing how the characters talk / say things? Or course that has it's downsides too, as it interferes a bit with the readers' imagination of how things happen, as we all have our own little films playing in our heads fuelled by your words, but so long as it's only used sparingly I think it might be beneficial. And sometimes it's good to make sure people see things your way - they don't have to agree with what they see, but it gets a point your trying to make across more effectively. If you're trying to make a point, that is...
    Oops, I'm rambling.

    Another great chapter - saved by the bell, eh Naruto? *grins*
    I love how Naruto and Sasuke are on different wavelengths a lot of the time, though they do frequantly overlap. Because relationships are like that, and you always think you're the only one with doubts, worries or possibly heartache when really your partner thinks the very same, and it's all down to communication, and when you do finally communicate and realize what's going on you often feel stupid for worrying about it later. Erm, getting off topic again.
    I like how Naruto-the-ever-obnoxious-and-loud-and-you-will-hear-my-opinion-whether-you-want-to-or-not is really very self-conscious and aware of what other people might think, but tends to get caught up in the heat of the moment and forget that he cares until it's too late. Of course public displays of affection, especially when concerning homosexual couples (and especially when you're not even sure you're homo or bisexual or neither) is a HUGE step, especially for someone with frequantly attacked (if not necessarily low) self-esteem, so good call on Naru-chan being hugely nervous about Sasuke's proximity and the thought of kissing him in a public place.

    Oh, and as for ItaSasu... I don't usually like it, mainly because everyone always portrays Sasuke as the poor abused UBER-UKE little borther, or else the haunted (by brother and past), addicted (to brother), completely OOC individual with a perverse fixation for his older brother. I've yet to come across a convincing story with said pairing as the main one, and though I don't doubt that there are good ones that make a convincing case for the relationship, there's too much trash that's put me off trying to sift to find it. It's not worth it, and I much prefer NaruSasuNaru anyway, so why bother.
    But that aside, I don't object to the idea of one or both brothers having some sort of fixation with the other that could be sexual or possibly some perverse form of love. I don't want to discourage you from writing with hints of ItaSasu (or even blatant ItaSasu) (and you undoubtably will write it whatever I think *grins*) but I think it's a tentative subject that's hard to get right. Good luck with it!!

    Neways, great fic, I'm looking forward to reading the rest of it!

    -Shiin

    PS. Can't remember if I already said this last time, but I think it's great that you respond to reviews! It's good for both you as the author as explaining reasons for doing certain things often makes it clearer in your own mind (it does for me at least- not that I've ever written anything I'd consider posting anywhere) and it's good for the reader by as it both helps them to understand the characters and the plot as well giving them assurance that their doubts, critisisms and praises are heard and acknowledged in some way, which is always nice. Yay!
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  • From ANON - debz on November 06, 2005
    Yattaaaaaaa!
    So good OMG this is soo funny!
    Sasuke is soo well in character!
    and I just love Naruto! !
    And this couple!
    Keep writing!
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  • From ANON - mieaki on November 06, 2005
    heya! really cute fic, love the make out scene! its so sweet, something i prefer rather than kiss-and-fuck ^^ neways, it kinda struck me weird about those few ppl who complained bout ur review responses and stuff, i mean, other authors do it too, and some even longer than yours! eheh ^^! fans should appreciate the fanfiction itself rather than fussing about on itty bitty stuff, and just be cool. Right? Hee.. I mean, we're all fans here, we should respect other ppl's preferences. Dats what me thinks *peace sign*

    Please don't get discourage by these ppl, its not worth it. *shakes head* U write for ur love of the series, and for the love of writing! GO GO!! XD --hey check out my collab fic "Capturing Naruto's Heart - The Musical!" XD corny title, but it needs some lurvin'. XD author name is mieaki ^^--
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  • From ANON - Carrot on November 06, 2005
    Hey first of all I gotta ask if you're a boy or a girl. You're probably a girl but hey you never know eh?
    Second...HURRY UP WITH YOUR NEXT FREAKEN CHAPTER THIS IS TOO FREAKEN CUTE!! eeeekkkkk!! I loooove the fact that Naruto and Sasuke are datying and stuff.
    I'm gonna put a link to this story on my desk top and check it everyday so hurry the bloody hell up damn-it!!! *shakes fist*
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  • From ANON - kagome5778 on November 06, 2005
    no you did not just end it right there i can't believe you just did that jeesh making me wait all this time (and believe me i came here everyday to see if you updated) for you to update what do u update every saturday? Anyway this story is awsome the best:)
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  • From ANON - Trekiael on November 06, 2005
    Well, I have to tell that I don't like very much the prospect of Sasuke being a possible uke, I mean, equal relationship are ok, but a moaning, flushing, arching Sasuke is just, eww. I dully prefer him being like he is now, a real pervert, and Naruto not agreeing with all his pervertness. If you know the story "falling spiral" by Becca Amon, you see the kind of equal relationship I see bearable between them.I love SasuNaru stories with one-sided ItaSasu (more than ItaNaru), even if we love him, we all know Itachi's a sick pervert with one hell of a fucked up relationship with his little brother. In my stories (I never writed them, maybe one day), either Itachi has the hots for his bro or for the human version of Kyuubi, I can't see him wanting someone else. Anyway good luck, oh and don't disontinue your story cause you're kind enought to answer to your dear reviewers and some think it's really difficult to skip them, it's using theirs poor little hands of them! Ja ne!
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  • From ANON - chi no hana on November 06, 2005
    muahahaha... this is so cruel...
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  • From ANON - fyredevyl on November 06, 2005
    I was scrolling through the reviews, trying to see if I had reviewed before, but couldn't find my name so "oops!" And wow, over 200 reviews with only 5 chapters. This story has way too many hits for you to even think about stopping.
    About the reviews: As you've probably noticed, you won't be able to please everyone here...that's the way it is throughout the entire world. So to get so upset that some reviewers complained about your long reviews and threaten to not continue the story is a little....well, not quite sure what to say, except don't be so sensitive. Continue doing what you want to do and ignore the things you don't like. And if you didn't expect some criticism, then you shouldn't post. I think most of them were mostly complaining because the chapter was over--they wanted to read more of your story. Needless to say, I was upset when I read your note at the beginning of ch. 5. I didn't think a writer as good as you, would be so upset over a few reviews. Considering how many hits you have, this shouldn't be an issue.
    The story: I've been following this story from the beginning and I love it. I love the inner monologue you do at the beginning of each chapter. They're hilarious. The flow of your story is very fluid, and the plot is developing beautifully. I can't wait until you release more chapters. I hope you continue this story, it would be cruel to stop. As to the ItaSasu thing, I kind of already thought something would happen like that since Itachi glared out the window when Naruto and Sakura came to Sasuke's house. I guess it was the way you phrased it that made me think Itachi was a little possessive of Sasuke. I wonder if he'll try to interfere with Naruto and Sasuke's relationship. So many interesting possibiliities. I hope you update soon.
    Ja! ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anon on November 05, 2005
    An interesting story, I do like it. I think that a little ItaSasu could add to the plot nicely. As for the whole having one partner dominate in a relationship all the time in fanfics, well that's just how they are wrote. It's almost a tradition in yaoi fanfics. If you write your story to be more realistic in the sharing of dominate part I think that would be great, I would like to see more of that in fanfics. Also don't let complains in reviews get you down, if you want to response to your reviewers that's cool. Anyway, like I said you have a good story here. It seems to flow at a good pace and everything. So keep up the good work, I look forward to reading the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - hawkmun on November 05, 2005
    Thanks for the new chapter. ^^ I'm really enoying the story, which is surprising, I normally hate AU fics, I'm not sure why, but I do. You've kept pretty close to the characters, which I'm always grateful for. I'm reviewing because of what you said about doing ItsSasu... It squicks me, but if you're not gonna have anything hardcore I couldn't imagine it being a problem. Things like that do add to the dynamics of a story. Anyway, keep up the good work and post again soon. ^^
    ~Hawk
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  • From ANON - Ry on November 05, 2005
    Stupid people complaining about reviewers responces...Because this is a great, very awesome, story. And I hate for those annoying people to ruin it *flicks at them* Glad you you decided to continue it though! ^^ I love Naruto's little thoughts at the beginning of each chapter, of course he's not gay! He's just, uh, heterosexually-challenged! ^^
    I can't wait to see what happens as the plot 'thickens'. The onesided ItaSasu looks like it will make perfect sense the way you're protraying it! Very good job at keeping the characters personalities intact while still making them unpredictable enough to be interesting! A very good talent, that.
    With a little bit of fawning over and worshiping you, I'll eagerly await the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - rAiNwAtEr on November 05, 2005
    Wow. I am offically hooked on this story! The story line is really good and I like the fact that you are not pushing the characters together too quickly. I also really like the way you characterize Naruto and Sasuke in this story, it is very refressing. I was a little worried when you mentioned how you didn't think you were going to continue this wonderful story due to a few losers that sent retarded reviews. I'll get on my hands and knees to beg you to complete this story. I really can't wait to see where Naruto's and Sasuke's relationship will go. I hope to read more from you soon. If it is at all possible, could you possibly send me an e-mail when you update?

    Your fan,

    rAiNwAtEr

    I will be sure to review again as soon as you post another chapter.

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  • From ANON - AkaiChou on November 05, 2005
    First off, I like your story very much and I hope you continue to write it. Next, to all the reveiwers who are complaining about the feedback: Grow up! It is not difficult to skip over the stuff you do not want to read. It takes you more time to complain about the reviews than it would to skip over the whole thing. This author happens to mark things very clearly so that you are able to skip around the stuff you don't want to read. Stop being lazy. Finally please continue at least for the sake of my sanity. ^_^
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  • From ANON - The Dark Child[am a girl on November 05, 2005
    Soory be busy love it please pleas update a s p

    THANK!!!!!!!!
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  • From ANON - Bookworm51485 on November 05, 2005
    I didn't demand an apology, I'd just hoped that you would. No I don't know loser but I feel if people just let others get away with being rude without making comment then they will never learn to be polite. Loser comment wasn't written in a way that could be considered badgering, they just left a comment and to just say "bite me" but not acknowledge the fact that they did compliment your story is rude. I'm sorry but it is. I understand that you don't feel the need to apologize and I'm glad that you did acknowledge my compliment instead of just blowing me off like you did Loser
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