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From ANON - Trekiael on November 22, 2005
are, hum, *scratch my head in wonder*, well, obviously, Sasuke will do be like that in sex, it's just, yeah, I don't like seing him weak, like, you now, begging and all. Well, don't mind me tough! Continue like this, you're doing great! So Naruto is trying to make Sasuke jealous? Tsss, that's so like him, bratty prankster! Good ItaSasu hints, as promise. Itachi will be so pissed when Sasuke will return home! You can definetly make more than overly protective brother hints (well, that's for me, I know you have to deal with other reader too). I wonder what they'll do in their date, jut hope it'll be fun, with some fooling around in public places (as we already know Sasuke has some exibitionist part in him). Thanks you so much for answearing my review! Good luck! Ja ne!
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From ANON - GS* on November 22, 2005
yay u updated! koolies!haha Naruto is being striped of his manlyness little by little, XD and the ending to the chappi was really sweet. and it did seem homly and have a sense of security. X3 i cant wait till the next chapii. heheh their 1st date....demanded by sasuke of course. XD
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From shada on November 22, 2005
Great story, I personaly would like to see Itachi and Sasuke a little, though, plus it would make it in a way a love triangle
it would be really cool, just my opion mind, but it's a great story and i really like how it is going
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From ANON - Vin on November 22, 2005
Aw. This makes me wiggle happy. (That's a good thing.) So you should write a nice long chapter next time, so a lot of other people will be wiggle happy too. :DDD
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From ANON - Nathaniel on November 22, 2005
Hello!

I was reading your story some time ago and stopped somewhere chapter 3 (because there wasn't anymore...). Now I've read the rest in one go. I really like it. Good and near the original characters and well described interactions between them. It feels like it could be real.

What makes it more precious is the prospect of an equal realitionship between Naruto and Sasuke. I inhale every story that does not follow the quizzically pattern of Sasuke jumping Naruto and Naruto beeing submissive (at least in bed). Because there are so many stories clinging to SasuNaru I often doubt that I watch the same anime as the authors of these stories does (then there have to be far more NaruSasu thingies...). Anyway, I'm looking forward for more chapters.

Two more things:
First, please does not let every review get near you. Whenever someone is presenting something they made to a broad audience there will be reactions that are not welcome. Often there are comments that lack a appropiate tone or are pointed at irrelevant issues but that's the normal thing. Even Beethoven oder Shakespeare have gotten good critic all the time :) I cannot pretend to really know what those comments could do to the author because I have never written a fanfic but I beg you to not stop because of some unqualified bunches of letters! :)

Second, what is a cootie(s) (or cooty)? Doesn't found it in a dictionary but I'm eager for knowledge :D

So, please keep us entertaining with more chapters (preferably soon),
Nathaniel
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From ANON - no name for now on November 22, 2005
I absolutely adore your story. It's cute and hot and I just want to hug naruto. And that thing with the pizza broke my heart. It's little things like that that make a story uber cute. I mean how can you give to a kid a burned pizza and he never got a good slice in his life. Not right at all. *hugs Naruto* (didn't know that he was born october 10. I'm born on october 8 and I feel so close to him now...The bonds of Libras)

Off topic: I can't believe that you've got a Sasuke�s curse seal tattoo. I am so jealous, you have no idea... I decided to weaks ago that when (yes, when) I'll get my first it would be a Sasuke�s curse seal one on my shoulder. But I might not get it because my friends (one who is very involved with Naruto) will freak out once they find out I got the idea with an anime. But it's too cool not to get it. *whine*

Bring on the uchihacest baby!!!(it might be sick to some but for me, it's incredebly fascinating and interesting. Sorry if the review has lots of mistakes, english is not my first language). Keep updating :).
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From ANON - MultifacetedTune on November 22, 2005
Sorry for the lack of reviews lately -- to quote a friend, "college is a bitch". ^^ I really enjoyed the last three chapters -- still engaging and well written, but with a thickening plot... and longer, too! (Yay! lol) ^__~ Soooo..... the "upside-down ANBU", huh? I gotta tell you, that's awesome! I actually think it's neater that way -- things are always more exciting it they have a story to go along with them! And as for the curse seal tatoo..... well, I can't wait, and I'm not even the one getting it!!! (Oh, and I'd love to see a pic, btw.) ^__^ GTG -- RL is nagging at me, lol, and I have this HUGE test tomorrow (erm...today) that I need to study for..... *sigh* ^^;; Keep up the good work!!!
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From Reyn on November 22, 2005
(sigh) another chapter without a review response to me...I'm starting to feel a little left out. Oh well. I'll keep reviewing anyways because I like your story so much ^_^
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From ANON - Sukara on November 22, 2005
-Squeals- x3 I can't wait until the next chapter. And I high disapprove of incest..well..Uchiha-incest. D: but I guess I can allow a jealous Itachi around. X3...just...no incest-smex!!! D:
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From ANON - Twistedneko on November 21, 2005
REally really good job, still...I think I've reviewed three times, and I'm still saying the same things. @_@ How uncreative of me.

But, again, really great job. You're a great writer. Naruto is just...adorable in this fic, and so is Sasuke,well...Sasuke's never "adorable" y'know, but, he just seems...I dunno, more...gentle, y'know? (I'm trying not to ramble though) Were you aiming for that? Coz, your characterizing of them(as well as everyone else) is REALLY REALLY great. Many a fic I've found myself asking "Would *insert name* REALLY do that?"
But not for this fic, (once again) KILLER job. You Go Girl!
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From ANON - Random on November 21, 2005
oooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I looooooove this story, it's so great and you're such a great writer!! I love you! *glomps* I especially like your writing style it's enrapturing! sorry bout' the other review I was overzealous and hit tab too many times *sweatdrop*
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From ANON - Kai22 on November 21, 2005
Hard to believe I used to be a writer of Inuyasha fics, but here I am, reading yours. Believe it or not, this is the very first time I've read a Naruto fic. The closest I've ever been was one called "The Great Ramen Day" that I found while searching for Hikaru no Go fics, where Hikaru and Naruto go around trying to see who can eat more ramen, and eventually end up having to call Sasuke and Akira to take them home.. Anyway!! I really like this fic, and I hope to see you updating it soon. Your grammar and spelling are much better than many of the fics I've read, and believe me, I've read a lot of them in my 3 or 4 years of being an author. This fic made me laugh a lot, and I can't help but wonder what their papers will be like... Sasuke: "I learned that Sakura is obsessed with me and imagines what my room is like in her spare time. I also learned that Naruto is a good kisser and that, while he can't keep his apartment clean to save his life, I like it that way." Sakura: "I learned that Naruto's father's in jail, and I decided to be rude to him less for other people's beliefs, and more for his own annoying habits. I also learned that Sasuke likes to go to the bathroom with Naruto, and he has a hot brother." Naruto: "I learned that Sakura can drool more than most dogs when in the presence of Sasuke's brother, and that Sasuke is a pervert. And that, oddly, I don't mind. BUT I'M NOT GAY!! Dammit, don't you dare think that, Kakashi!!" *laughs* anyway, I'll be checking this story often in hopes of seeing an update.
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From ANON - eve4mem on November 21, 2005
This was great. I am happy to tell you your fic is the first Sasuke/Naruto I've read; I'm mainly an Iruka fan. I really liked the last chapter it was nice to see what was going on in Sasuke's head. And the beginnings in each chapter is wonderful you stayed true to Naruto. I like how this fic has some depth it's not all sex sex sex; there is plot and it lives. I look forward to future chapters.
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From ANON - Kenz on November 21, 2005
Continue pretty pelase asap.....umm no pressure. ^.^;
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From ANON - Questofdreams on November 21, 2005
Hi ^_^ Wonderful chapter! I feel honored that my review prompted you to get writing ^__^ *HUGS back*

And you definitely transformed that bit of "uchihacest" into something easily interpretted in a number of ways. I'm sure your readers will be pleased. ^^ What I really like about this chapter is Naruto and Sasuke's ability to simply BE with each other without that sexual element (which is there, of course, hehee, just not prevalent). I was also rather endeared by Naruto's initial enthusiasm to show Sasuke his house and then suddenly his incredible self-consciousness about it.

One thing I REALLY love about this story is Naruto's little inner monologue/denial session (LOL) at the beginning of each chapter. They're hilarious and always makes me smile ^^
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