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From ANON - mimi on January 08, 2006
I am sooo glad that you added another chapter. Before my computer got fries I was always checkin to see if you wrote more. I like how you describe the Naruto/Sasuke action -grin- I can just picture it as I read. Keep up the great work...I can't wait for more.... is it ready yeeettt????? - wink-.I will patiently wait for more -though the wait is killing mee!!!!- just kidding. Until next time-bye
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From ANON - Insane Vampire Maru on January 08, 2006
AH>< Oh lord oh lord, I just positively am in love with your story~loveness~ seriously!! And whatever anyone says about your story or about the fact that you answer your reviews well....its not dumb>< I do it too!! They can all go eat bananas ~lmao~ bananas>>....sorry...thats my 16 year old showing:p
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From Shinda on January 07, 2006
HIYA!!

Just wanted to say that I EXTREMELY love your fic!! =^^= SasukexNaruto fics are my fav *blushes*. Anyway, I totally understand how some readers review only to whine about your author notes and review reponses. The first time I posted up a fic of Inuyasha and Kagome, I got this review saying that I was a bad author and that I shouldn't consider writing a fanfic; because of that review, I deleted the story and I never posted anything up ever again for a whole year. I was seriously depressed about it but now I dont really care anymore. And I totally agree if some critism is allowed becasue it improves your writing style, just the hardcore flaming I can't accept. But enoguh about that, the minute I started reading your story, I couldn't stop. I even luaghed at the part where Naruto was asking Iruka what makes a man gay and Iruka mistaken that for someting else. Anyway, continue your story and ignore the people that complain about the littlelest things, becasue fanfictions are to pursue an author's imagination, not kill them. So keep up the inspiring and great work you have going on.

Shinda
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From ANON - krickets on January 07, 2006
yea!
im finally reading up on all the sasu/naru
au goodness
i have to take these in categories
and your story is very entertaining!

i would leave a longer review if i wasnt late for work already trying to finish the last chapter!

i eagerly await your updates

and i do the reviewer response too
but i just use a whole chapter at the end and mark it as the author note page
just check out one of my stories if you want to see
it makes things alot easier

but i dont mind alot of times i like the things you have to say
if i wernt speed reading then i would have read them more thoroughly

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From ANON - powder07blossom on January 07, 2006
I've just started reading your fic...You've got a very interesting story going on here...I was actually rather surprised that you turned the supposedly Gondaime into a murderer...He's usually a hero in naruto fics...It's actually a good explanation as to why Naruto is hated by people...Is the ItaSasu gonna be a rape?..'Coz from the stroy line, I have the impression that Sasuke is only interested in Naruto... :D
I'm gonna comment on your review responses...Now don't be mad, I'm just curious as to how you find the energy to respond to so many reviews...I mean, I tried responding to reviews once, but found it quite tedious, so I only respond to reviews now when I am in the mood...Maybe you have a secret you can share?..Because I'm pretty sure that readers like it when authors respond to their reviews...Where do you get the energy? :D
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From ANON - endless hope on January 06, 2006
this is such a great story please update soon
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From on January 05, 2006
Great story!! Update soon okie!!!

~adios~
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From ANON - Justajester on January 04, 2006
Yes. Lame jokes all around. XD

But not in your story. of which your brain's fiance is immensly pleased :)

UPDATE SOONY!!!
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From ANON - fiberchick #7 on January 04, 2006
I really wish I'd found this sooner, only so I could have been enjoying it for a longer stretch of time. Seriously though, I think your writing style is nice. Maybe not my favorite, but it's easy to understand, well-done and I think you portray the characters' personalities clearly with an economy of words. I do wish the chapters were longer, but only so I'd have more to read. I do feel like each one says just what it means to say. Anyway, you should feel priveldged I'm reviewing. Priveldged, I say! (ha-ha, I'm kidding) Seriously, though, I read a ridiculous amount of fanfiction, a lot of which is Naruto, but only sometimes write reviews. Also, I tend to avoid certain genres before even starting. And by this I mean I usually avoid any AU stories like the plague. If I even try to read one, generally I get through about three paragraphs through before I just can't take it. It's just one of those things. But yours I started reading and was instantly pulled in. In fact, this is one of two (Spiral Falling, of course being the other) that I found myself reading despite myself. Something about it just sucked me in. I think it may be a mix of the pleasant pacing (I like stories that concentrate on the relationship aspect of the characters rather than just getting them together as soon as possible) as well as the humorous aspect. I actually laughed out loud a few times as I read this, and I can tell you, that's not something I normally do. I also really like the way you write Naruto. The thing I've always liked about him is that he's such a damn cute . . . BOY. And I think you've kept that personality well. The only thing that comes to mind to complain about, if that's what you want to call it, is the lack of other characters. I know this is a Sasunarusasu story, it's just that I feel like the other characters would be playing a bigger role. They are supposed to be friends/going to school together and all, right? And a lot of those that have been mentioned have only been done so only in passing. Except for Shikamaru, whom I really like, by the way. So, I guess I wish they were taking on a role somewhere on the level of what he has. It's a personal thing, so it's not like the story is suffering from it, I just think it could add another dimension. The other side of that is the Itachi issue. I keep reading the notes and expecting more from him, and then he's in the chapter for maybe two lines. But I assume he's going to play a bigger role later, I hope? Anyway, sorry for babbling on so long. I really just want to support you and let you know you're doing a good job. I'm just a freak that way!
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From ANON - Virgo's Kiss on January 03, 2006
Whoops, I guess I was a bit late to review the latest chapter.^_^; This chapter was extremely enjoyable, I think I smiled the whole way through. (Kinda weird for that to happen to me.) This was kinda funny/sweet.^^ Glad to see you managed to find your beta as well, I think i'll definatly be looking forward to the next chapters even more.(My review's a bit short but I have to get going and won't see a computer for a short while.^_^;; Hope you don't mind.)
-Anonymous reviewer a.k.a Virgo's Kiss
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From ANON - limey on January 02, 2006
This is the best Naruto fanfic I've ever read, AU or not.

Sakura is a character I generally dislike (hate if you'd like to get technical) but you've managed to make her not only tolerable, but likeable, and I'm actually looking forward to seeing more of her. Sasuke, while seeming a bit OC, is at the same time perfectly in character with all his wit, sarcasm, bluntness, and simple Sasuke sexiness. I think that your portrayal of Naruto's character has to be my favorite, though. If you could actually see inside his head, I believe his thoughts would read almost exactly as you wrote them: he's stubborn, denying, slightly rude, and awkward in his own charming way. You included everything that makes Uzumaki Naruto the blonde explosive he is, and it's pretty cute to watch him struggle with showing affection to Sasuke. x3

You've got amazing voice and I love your writing style, especially the descriptions and humor. This fic has made me laugh out loud, especially paragraph four of chapter one: "Not flamingly, limp-wristed, I-should-have-been-a-woman gay, but quiet, in the closet, I�m-so-sexy-I-could-turn-straight-guys gay." That's the best line I've heard in an extremely long time. Also, while you keep mentioning it, your fic really isn't that cliched - not like a good majority of the ones you find where Naruto's fallen in a deep state of depression and cuts himself, until an uncannily empathetic, worried, and angry Sasuke saves him from dying of attempted suicide at which point Naruto falls in love with him while continuing to have occasional bouts of hysteria. (And, even if the story's just a little cliched, your excellent writing makes up for it and allows it to stand apart from the other works like it.)

Oh, and to those complaining about the author's note and review responses: they need to get over it. It's as easy as scrolling down or clicking the next button, nobody's forcing them to read it. My only complaint about it is that it makes the chapter length a little deceiving, but, hey, cliffhangers keep you begging for more.

Thanks for such an awesome fanfic! Please keep writing! ^-^

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From ANON - Pic's Pixie on January 02, 2006
oh please oh please oh pleeeease update soon, this story is awesome, and so hot :P the scene in the car with the straddling hehe i've been in a very similar situation and its always fucking hot hehe please write more hotness and quick, hehe keep up the great work *can't stop...the giggling!* haha
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From ANON - Elaine on January 01, 2006
IT'S AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love this fic. I can't believe I didn't find it before now. Please update soon? Pretty please?
~Elaine
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From ANON - Gold Silk on January 01, 2006
I find myself stealing lines from your story, cause they make such cute quotes! In this chapter, it's

'The Uchiha�s dark eyes lit up with mischief, and Naruto glared at Shikamaru. �Aren�t you good for anything?!�

The response was instant. �No.� '

Anyways, I find myself loving your story. I'm also hoping that Itachi/Sasuke won't be *too* obvious (I'm just not a fan, but your work still rocks anyways) And since you squashed the chance of Itachi/Naruto, maybe you can add Gaara to the mix? Or some other character (I always liked people wanting Naruto. If Sasuke has his damn fanclub, Naruto should have more than one secret admired :D ) Also, any chance at seeing the Kakashi/Iruka pairing develope? I was laughing my ass off when I read the chapter where Naruto confronts Iruka.

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From ANON - Luka on January 01, 2006
I like this story. I can't wait for the next chapter.
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