Adult-FanFiction.org : Naruto

Reviews for Watching

By : KeairaxSeiaa

From RyuuOokami on November 30, 2010
I've really enjoyed reading this fic. I like your flow of language, I like the snippets of Naruto-speech in the beginning of each chapter and I love how you wrote characters and interactions. All from Naruto (who I adore in this story!) and Sasuke, to Shikamaru and Sakura. *smile* Itachi is lovingly creepy, Kakashi is great, Iruka is so nice and I like the way you've added Chouji and Kiba into all of it.
I like the plot (it doesn't matter if it's "clich�" as you say *smile* clich� doesn't have to mean bad ^^ And I think you're doing it very well) and as I said; I really enjoy your writing.

I'm well aware that you might nver finish this story but I still wanted to say thanks for the entertainment so far and if you ever get around to update I would love to know! If you could send me an e-mail on ookami-ryuu@hotmail.com I would be very grateful.

Another thing I wanted to mention is that you shouldn't care so much about people complaining about your review-replies and/or author's notes. *warm smile* If they don't like it it's not exactly hard to simply skip over and it's entirely your choice what you want to write in your chapters. *smile*
I just kinda noticed that you apologized for something in practically every chapter and I don't think you deserve that. ^^ Sometimes for short chapters (you're the author and you know yourself when you feel it's the right time to "stop"! Seriously) and sometimes for taking long to update (inspiration isn't something that can be forced and sometimes real life gets in the way, or other things... people needs to learn some patience *rolls eyes*).

Anyway. I hope that you pick this up one day if you ever get your inspiration back for it. *smile*
//Dragonwolf
Report Review
From GudenMulle on September 12, 2009
Aw! Don't stop please, I'll be your muse, I'll give you inspiration!
Just write this!
I'm sorry so many people have given you so much grief about the responses to review, I must admit that I skipped them all myself, since none were for me, since I've only just now discovered this story, but I think it's very sweet and nice of you to respond to your readers!
It's like, you appreciate us appreciating your fic, and we appreciate your appreciation back.. vicious circle ;)
Please tell me that Itachi murdered the family, and Minato is innocent, because I can't imagine him a crazy murdere. Minato is one of the figures in my head that could never do something like that.. naive and childish thinking, I know..
If you ever decide to continue this, I would love to get an email saying so because I really love this!
I don't know when you posted this, because for some reason I haven't looked at the dates, -palmface-, but if it has any sort of chance for being updated, then I would send you lots of mental love, rainbows, chocolate and ramen!
Maybe the saving-naruto-in-the-hallway was a bit too sweet, but it was needed. I hate it when Naruto dosen't stand up for himself, and just accepts the hits and blows to his pride. I love the guy way too much :P
And Sasuke is awesome! Love a pushy Sasuke, else we would get nowhere :P
Sakura is good. I have had problems with her, but after Shippuuden, I can accept her. And in this fic, she's good too. I don't condemn Sakura-bashing too much, because she isn't evil, just.. a bit self-centered ;)
Itachi creeps the hell out of me! But I love him anyway, freaky, ne? XD

Anyway, suma sumarum: I love this, please send me an email if you update or find time to respond to all this blabber :D

(pst, my email..) --> egf_tas@hotmail.com

Love Mulle
Report Review
From ANON - rin on December 20, 2008
aww mannn ;___; dont discontinuuue, arent you potentially really close to an ending? -crycry- maybe find some inspiration like read doujinshi or look at fanart or something? -clings tenaciously-
Report Review
From ANON - Niki on February 13, 2008
I really like it and im sorry you had to end it like this.
Report Review
From ANON - Shadow on February 11, 2008
I really think you should continue this story, but i understand about college D:.
Report Review
From ANON - Drgonmanga on February 09, 2008
Yo. Love this fic! Although I probably shouldn't be here. I'm under-aged...*shifty eyes* shhhhhh! Ignoring that fact. Naruto's dad's name is Minato Namikaze. Uzukami is Naruto's mom's family name. Naruto's mom's name is Kushina. Said so in the manga. Chap 367. Moving on, I absoloutly LOVE the Naruto POV at the beginning of th chapters. I always laugh when I read them. ^^ Oh and Naruto's mom, you can see what she looks like in chapter 382. So anyways, love the fic. I think you're doing a really good job. Hope your studies are getting better. Can't wait for your next update... ^^... it's been a year... ^^' that's not good... ��... Oh, and DON'T DROP THIS FIC!!! Pretty please! I love it and hope you find the notes soon!
Report Review
From ANON - Person on January 10, 2008
Please update I can't wait to see how naruto annoys Sasuke into dating him. PLEASE~
Report Review
From ANON - Sarah on January 04, 2008
I love what your writting I cant wait for Naruto to annoy Sasuke into being with him! please update soon!!!!!!!
Report Review
From Sinslayer on December 24, 2007
*.*
Report Review
From Sinslayer on December 24, 2007
i've read this story twice and loved it both times i've read it...can't wait for the update!!
Report Review
From Gwyllion on November 28, 2007
*squees* Though the chappies are short, I'm completely addicted! What a great fic! Despite the hatred towards Naruto from the students *cries*, I'm really glad that Sasuke pursued him. Can't wait to read more from you! And thanks so much for sharing.....hope the relationship will come out ok. It's so hard to believe that Arashi killed his family tho... :(
Report Review
From on November 24, 2007
the yondaime's name is Minato it says so in the manga
also, i personally hate incest of any kind. so naturally i hated the hints of ita/sasu, but thankyou. i appreciated the fact that you kept it on the DL. it's a great fic. congrats
Report Review
From sasquatchsnake on November 18, 2007
Wow, what a curve ball! You said you had a twist up your sleeve, but I was almost expecting something benign. Man, you blew it out of the park! Awesome fic. I look forward to more - don't you dare drop it! I'll flick toothpicks at you if you do. Nice minty ones, not the nasty nibbled kind. My logic never fails.
Report Review
From ANON - Dicey on October 25, 2007
Well I have no idea when the last time this was updated because AFF don't really have dates and stuff.. Or do they?? Can't remember... I don't think I looked actually.. Ahh well it just probably mean that you'll need to update. And soon! :P

Am enjoying this tonnes! At first I could've sworn I'd read this fic somewhere before (the start anyway) you never posted on FF.N or anything did you??

Or mayhap your writing style is just eerily like someone else.. Not really sure but all the first person pov at the start..

Anyway, just a note on all those long author notes and review responses and what not. Personally I don't care either way. As a reviewer I love getting replies because it means something I said actually mattered but I guess if you're not one of the recipients to said replies it can be a bit annoying. But if that really was such a case then just scroll past it. Sheesh that's what the things for anyway. But if people make such a big deal of it and ONLY it then pooey to them. There's more important things in life. Such as reading good fanfic. So please do not ever stop because of a number of imbecilic morons. It's not worth it.

But anyway, with this fic; can i say i really LOVE Sasuke! ^_^ Naruto's my favourite character full stop but I love your Sasuke! He's so suave and cool! XDXD And aggressive! The whole seme/uke thing, it's really a yaoi manga sorta thing. Cuz for Japanese it really is be all end all one sort of pairing only. With western slash its lots more reciprical. Either floats my boat although I probably do prefer Sasunaru. Well.. depends on the writing I suppose.

Itachi is.. freaky. In a cool way, I do like the over protectiveness thing. Quasi Itasasu is okay too, as long as the main pairing is Sasunarusasu etc.

Much love to Shikamaru! He's gorgeous as usual! Glad Naruto does have some friends to rely on. Too bad there isn't much Gaara or Lee or Neji though. Fancy them making an appearance??

The relationship between Sasunaru is really well written I think, I love how they come together and how it's still got the semi reluctance (well fake denial) from Naruto thing going.

Naruto saying he wanted to "See his father and that Sasuke should come" to me felt a bit non sequitar. Or perhaps it was the scene it was in, because Naruto hadn't seen his father for "Years" and then all of a sudden??

I can see the plot twist though what with falling in love with your family murderer's son but still. Hmmmmm. Poor Naruto baby though. Just when he was starting to accept Sasuke properly. Hope this works out soon. Then we can get onto the proper smexing.

Payback for all the bullies would be a happy thing to see too I think. If it happens. Cuz Naruto deserves retribution! Even if say done on his behalf?? *cough* ;)

Hope RL is going well, do keep writing though cuz this fic rocks! ^_^;;
Report Review
From ANON - B.B. on August 26, 2007
Hey, I'm really liking this story. I hope you'll update soon, but I haven't in almost a year, so I can't talk... but you know, things happen. Anyway, your story rocks. I know updating is troublesome, but please?
Report Review