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Reviews for Closer to God

By : UbakeNeko
  • From Blysse on November 16, 2008
    Wow. I really have to commend you on this one! The only word I have to describe it is... well, beautiful.

    The way you interjected the song lyrics between paragraphs really lifted this story high above any other SasuNaru that I've ever read. Indeed, it was lifted much higher than any literature I've come across online for quite a long time.

    I was drawn in right away by your wonderfully descriptive imagery, and use of formatting (italics and such).

    And from the very first line, I knew that it was a song I'd heard before, though it took me quite a while [until the "I wanna fuck you like an animal" line came up] to realize that it was "Closer" by NIN. And then, I could hear the song in my head as I read on, the sultry beat keeping pace with Sasuke's ravenous hips. At times, I imagined Sasuke leaning in to Naruto and whispering those lyrics to him passionately, garnering yet another blush from his lover.

    And as for your insistence that it doesn't feel right... I can see nothing amiss, really. The only thing that caught my attention was the fact that at the end there are two new paragraphs without any song lyrics in between. But I'm not sure if the song itself would permit you to add lyrics there without repeating something.

    Thank you so much for the wonderful read! I hope to see more from you in the future!

    --B
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  • From ANON - losthimagain on June 17, 2006
    T-T This is sad! ^^ But I love it! Thank you!
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  • From ladygizarme on June 13, 2006
    Well, IDK, but I liked it. It felt frenzied, desperate, brutal, dark, and HOT and the song was the perfect choice for the mood.
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  • From ANON - dakara on August 09, 2005
    wow great haha damn you uchihas grrrrrrr anyway wonder what naru chan thinks
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  • From ANON - FlamesEmbrace on July 19, 2005
    Too lazy to login.... :P I love that song! Best band ever... ^_^ The fic was good, too; I generally don't like songfics and I generally don't like Uchihacest, but the lyrics and the words went together well, and the fic was generally well written, too. Kudos~
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  • From kawaiikitsunethief on July 19, 2005
    Awesome in a chilling manner, poor Naru-chan.
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  • From ANON - MultifacetedTune on July 19, 2005
    Very interesting and well done -- keep up the good work!!!
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  • From ANON - blisblop on July 18, 2005
    I love that song ,very good choice in this case. The last two lines seemed to sum up Sasukes motive exactly.Ughh ,He has got it bad !While saying how much fucking Naruto helps him he seemed to be constantly aware of why he was doing it while he was doing it.Perhaps if his climax really gave him peace for even a minute then something brings him back to notice Naruto is not Itachi the contrast might prove the point more.The relief he gets is indeed only seconds long otherwise,thats scary, for him.The lines ..fracture the other boy as badly as he himself was.." "..pouring everything he had to give...""even if he had to taint...he wanted some of that." stood out to me as well done.Thanks!
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  • From ANON - Sasuke Fangirl #343 on July 17, 2005
    ::speechless:: This song...The fic...

    Wow.

    ::returns to speechless state::
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  • From ANON - Anon on July 17, 2005
    (bad faces kill posts here... sorry about the screwed up first post! Here is the rest.)

    ...choice. So please continue to feed your fast-food loving muse, and please try on a fic that extends a bit beyond the PWP genre (still not sure if I should use 'genre' for this... ah well ^^;;) Anyway, claps to you for writing this, and no worries about what you may feel is *missing*... it's supposed to be like that!

    You've obviously got ficcing talent, so it's all good. Thank you for being open to feedback... nothing irks me more than writers who are like give me crits, and as soon as you do they are bombing your mailbox with... waaaah! you flamed me, how could you?! messages ::rolls eyes::

    I'm interested in seeing your future non-PWP submissions.
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  • From ANON - ochiba on July 17, 2005
    This is a good PWP. Really, you incorporated the lyrics well in this fic, and your characterization of Sasuke was consistent with them.

    However, as it is nothing more than a PWP, I can't really give you constructive feedback other than saying that you did well adhering to the yama nashi ochi nashi imi nashi theme in BL fandom. It's a perfect fic... only it lacks plot, in depth characterization, and well... a point, and this is ironically 'the point'... Guess thems are the drawbacks of PWPs *sweatdrop*

    Gyaa! I realize this comes across as a severe backhanded compliment, but I honestly think you did a good job. But you asked for feedback, so I'm trying to be objective here.

    I don't fully agree that something is *not right* your fic but if by 'not right' you mean something is missing then that I will agree with, but I guess what I'm trying to say is that it's the fault of your writing abilities, but rather your genre (is this the right word >.
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  • From ANON - lala on July 16, 2005
    You probably won't believe this but I thought about doing a S/N story to this song it fits them really well and I liked the way you used the lyics
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