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By : xxdedxx
  • From ANON - yuki-chan on June 29, 2005
    heeheehee!!! that was good! can you do a sequel? make it kinkier this time! nyaahahahahah!!! where sasuke tortures naru-chan...sexually...hahahahah!!! not bad torture. you know, kind of like making the blonde beg and cry for it...heheheheheh!!! i just love naru-uke... he's soooo...innocent. (smirks) not anymore...you go sasuke!!! make naru-chan all yours!!! HELL YEAH!!!
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  • From ANON - fyredevyl on June 28, 2005
    Very nice. Some commas were seriously needed though. Without them, it made some sentences seem like run-ons and I had to reread the line to understand. That was really the only major thing that bugged me. The rest was great. Great smut, fairly original storyline (yeah I've gotten comments on my stories about them being similar to others) and very enjoyable.
    ^_^
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  • From ANON - MultifacetedTune on June 28, 2005
    Hehe! Very cute -- I liked this a lot!! ^___^ And you know what the funniest thing is? Sasuke is the type of person that really -could- still be desirable when they're sick. ^^ I dunno' about you, but I wouldn't want anyone kissing me when I'm sick -- I look (and feel) terrible, lol! ^___~ keep up the good work!!!
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  • From ANON - GS* on June 28, 2005
    lol hehe funny! i love this one line. " but ur a boy. thats y i'm on top. but i'm a boy! thats y ur on the bottom." lmao!!!!!! ahaha. poor naruto. hehe. is there gonna be a sequel? lol XP. write more!
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  • From ANON - shuchan on June 27, 2005
    *whistle* wow, one could almost imaginw a sequel!!! nice!!! >hehehe... pervy sasuchan for ****ing naruchan when he is sick.... khehehehehe...
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  • From ANON - blisblop on June 27, 2005
    Aghhh.so,those are "the three that must be written".i thought Sasukes "scoff"(love that word) and final conclusion that Naruto is a cute guy added a casual air (insousonce) to the genre "Sick".I like this Sasuke.I am assuming he does not use Tiger Balm on his sore muscles.Nice job,thanks!
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  • From ANON - Emina on June 27, 2005
    This fic was so amusing to read!
    I LOVED the ending, where Naruto had that feeling of 'impedening doom' XD

    Oh and the story name is adorable.

    Good work on this one, it was too cute ^^


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  • From AkumaKawa on June 27, 2005
    Kawaii.


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  • From ANON - MeLaiya on June 27, 2005
    lol, that was great. And hilarious, keep up the good work
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  • From ANON - Sukara on June 27, 2005
    “Cut it out! You’re a boy!”

    “That’s why I am on top.”

    “But I’m a boy!”

    “That’s why your on bottom.”

    “That doesn’t make sense!!”
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    Thats funny. xD More SasuNaru!!=3 I lub your fics. =O Their soo....juicy!! xD
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  • From ANON - Raphael Argai Thanatos on June 27, 2005
    YAY!!! GO UKE NARUTO!XD (gomen uzumaki-kun, demo!... ^^)
    luvd this story!!!
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  • From ANON - cilla on June 27, 2005
    Not a bad story, quite cute, but there were a couple of mistakes.

    "naked from the waste down" The word is spelled "waist." Waste means garbage, among other things.

    Your sentences tend to run on a bit too. I suggest inserting some commas at least.
    "Deepening the kiss enough that he was pretty sure he was choking Naruto he quickly undid his pants careful not to let him feel anything outside of the kiss though it was becoming pretty distracting for him too."
    Try "Deepening the kiss enough that he was pretty sure he was choking Naruto, he quickly undid his pants. He was careful not to let Naruto feel anything outside of the kiss, though it was becoming pretty distracting for him too." Something like that would make it easier to read.
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