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By : MistressofDragons
  • From ANON - reader on June 09, 2005
    Very good so far! The twist that you've added is very unique, and with it so far you have done an admirable job of keeping Naruto in-character. Because of that, I look forward to reading where you will take him next. Thank you for writing it!
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  • From ANON - yume on June 08, 2005
    *teary eyes* Poor Naruto! But I love how this fic was written not only very well but also very realistically and I daresay that it will be interesting to see how Naruto grows as a person and as a ninja without his trademark voice. This has been one of the most enjoyable fics I have ever read I truly look forward to reading more of it as it comes out. Hm, my only criticisms are as follows: in the prologue the dialogues are a little crammed in between sentences and grammatically all new dialogue should be a new paragraph, a few sentences where some commas would make the sentence sound better eg: "Naruto smiles more fully this time" would make more sense written like: "Naruto smiles, more fully this time", a slight tense thingy, most stories are written in past tense, but you are one of the few authors I have seen pull off present tense throughout the entire fic and do it well. All in all a very enjoyable read, keep up the good work!

    Random note: If you plan to have Naruto with a girl, can I implore you to 1) pair him with medic intrested Hinata 2) anyone besides Sakura or 3) change Sakura's personality. You can ignore the last part as you see fit since you are the omnipotent author, but that's just my request. Of course I have no problems with yaoi pairings either.
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  • From ANON - akuma_river on June 08, 2005
    While it is rare that I read M/F fics, if they are good. Really really good, I read them.

    I like this set up, I like it so far.

    Keep up the great work. Coolsa.
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  • From ANON - A person on June 08, 2005
    Damn, I feel sorry for Naruto, and i'd feel sorry for anyone else who went through that (they wouldn't require it as much though as they'd be dead). Anyways, I just wanted to say that this is an excellent story and your writing style is great. Keep up the good work and update a lot.
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  • From ANON - silverfox on June 07, 2005
    great chapter really loved it i really liked some of the words you used to make it sound more....complex when reading hope you update soon can't wait for the next chapter and keep up the good work
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 07, 2005
    really good
    update soon


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  • From ANON - Yum on June 07, 2005
    okay, I will wait for my answer but not too long !!! so you've better to update pretty soon !!!
    You'll make a M/F pairing ? Why not !!! But if you do a Naru/Saku, I'll become sick and MAYBE stop reading... I can't stand Sakura, she's such a useless weakling !! She gets on my nervs, always need to be saved and always screaming...
    I have a question on the line time, Did konohamaru and Naruto meet the day of Mizuki's attack ?
    An other question, will someone apart from Iruka, konohamaru & co and Sandaime visit Naruto ? I don't know, like his teammates (forced by Kakashi to creat and/or reinforce the link between teammates) or Hinata...
    Hope you'll update soon !! ^^
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  • From ANON - kijo kasumi on June 07, 2005
    WooW! Nice! I love the opening. You now have my interest. ^_^. I expect great chapters from you. till then. ja.
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  • From ANON - yoroshiku on June 07, 2005
    i can't believe it. i can't believe you just stopped here!!! how could you? that is so unfair! i wan' an update!!!
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  • From ANON - vampchic on June 07, 2005
    I seriously love this fic! Cant wait to learn more of how this will affect Naruto. Poor Naru! I wonder how the meeting will go? What will happen and all? How the others reaction will be? How will Sasuke and Sakura treat him? I want to know these things!! Update soon, kay! I sooo want to read more!
    Psst! *Nudges you* If ya do have any kind of pairings, make em m/m! XP
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  • From ANON - Kyouta on June 07, 2005
    Gaah... Wow. Your story is deep and truly touching. I myself--as all the other readers--am a HUGE Naruto fan. It was very interesting to see that you started this story from almost at the very beginning. Usually most of the fics I have read are either up-to-date with the animated (not manga) series or take place years later in their own view. It was very interesting to see that you started before Naruto became an official Genin. ^_^ Your story has touched me, gah, it made me cry. I myself LOVE to write stories and at times I can be pretty critical of other's work. But yours definitely moved me. I may just be over-emotional and a cry baby, but I really enjoyed reading your story and I definitely look forward to reading the next chapter! You've done an excellent job with the prologue and the first chapter; you captured the character's personalities perfectly.

    I also found it very interesting that you used Mizuki. My friends and I, while we were out at Disney, had huge discussions about our Naruto-theories. Mizuki happened to come up. We were all wondering what happened to him? He was there for the first and second chapter, but after that he completely vanished. There was nothing said about him afterward, so I was happy to read about him making another appearance.

    You've done a GREAT job so far, keep up the good work! Ganbatte! ^__^ I'll be keeping a look out for the other chapters!

    ~Kyouta-kun
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  • From ANON - Lique on June 07, 2005
    I really like this fic. I hope you continue it and find the time to update it as often as possible. I can't wait to see what Naruto's like with his team and with everybody else. His voice was one of the things that got him noticed the most and now that he doesn't have it, what will he do? Does he find another way to communicate? How's everyone else going to react to his silence?

    What about Mizuki? Does Naruto run in to him again? Does Iruka get the chance to kick his ass?

    Sigh. You're going to make me wait, aren't you? Meh. Can't you send me the story telepathically...? Guess not. I guess I'll have to check aff.net obsessively like everyone else. Meh again.
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  • From Sammei on June 07, 2005
    Oh, that's horrible! I know Naruto isn't exactly your most blood free anime, but wow. This is completely plausible though, which I really like. It'll be interesting to see how poor Naruto copes with not being able to talk, much less yell. So far you're also keeping the them very in-character, despite this being such horrible circumstances. I have a few questions, but most will probably be answered later, so I won't ask them. One question is: you wrote that his vocal chords are gone, so... Mizuki hacked so much that he tore them out? I suppose I'm not the best at anatomy. Another thing is the facemask: is that one of Kakashi's? That's all the questions I have; I'll just wait eagerly for the next update. ^_^

    Great job!
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  • From ANON - Erika on June 07, 2005
    that was a GREAT chapter and man oh man he's gonna kill himself if he isn't careful...Is he only going to wear the face mask from the neck down??? oh well thatw as a GREAT cahpter and its to DAMN bad that that A-hole got away...oh well, can't wait to see what you are going to do next:D THANKS:D
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  • From ANON - Shadow117 on June 07, 2005
    Absolutely wonderful story. This is definitely one of the better stories I've read that branch off from the main plot, especially so early and with a geat original plot. If you don't mind answering, I got two questions for you.

    1) How will Naruto communicate with his teammates later?
    and 2) Have you any idea of the pairiings yet?

    I'll be watching for future updates.
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