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By : chy
  • From ANON - Heather on May 14, 2005
    yeah, that was pretty hot! it's true that i wouldn't expect that to happen in only the second chapter, but it works. i'm curious now as to what exactly their relationship will be like now that they've slept together. can't wait til you update!
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  • From ANON - Yami-Hikari on May 14, 2005
    I know. I always get all flustered whenever I write smut too.
    You just have to keep coming back and finish the story... and then re-read it and correct any little bits. You need to do this at least twice, and then you end up with a much better lemon.
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  • From ANON - chem chick on May 14, 2005
    Yeah, it was...(in reply to your A/N). Loved it...very hot. Please write more, as soon as you can!
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  • From ANON - Anon on May 14, 2005
    nummy
    update soon
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  • From ANON - Kativa-chan on May 14, 2005
    Sexy as hell...Lol, I can't wait for the GaaraNaru! GaaraNaru is so sexy! And uke Naruto is so cute.
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  • From ANON - macy on May 14, 2005
    it was pretty intense! *wipes drool* seriously, my mouth became watery (or drool-y?) while i was reading this! that was hot!! ooh...can't wait till the sand siblings enter the picture.
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  • From ANON - Kireii on May 14, 2005
    i have 3 words for you
    E
    RO
    TIC!!!!!!!
    great stuff, i had to stop in the middle of that and get some water to cool off. man there's nothing else i can say other than that. UPDATE SOON!!!!
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  • From ANON - eternal on May 13, 2005
    hi this my review!
    NICE ONE!
    Can't wait the gaanaru pairing and sasu naru it's really great!
    Pleaseeee update soon
    Ps: I love threesome too ^_~ just make sure naruto is the uke mwa ha ha love when he was the uke not seme ^-^
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  • From ANON - april on May 13, 2005
    ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh...huh,huh,huh...ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh WOW I LOVE IT JUST LOVE IT DO MORE NOW!!! email me ~-~
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  • From ANON - chem chick on May 13, 2005
    Wow! This was great! You have some amazingly funny lines in this one, so I can't wait for more! I especially can't wait to see what Sasuke's reaction is! Can I have some more, please? :)
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  • From ANON - shuchan on May 13, 2005
    oh come OHN!!! when is the next chapter comming?! mhmmm... comming... ARGH!! foret that! i wanna see the next chapter!
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  • From ANON - Jiro on May 13, 2005
    Mwuhaha: //“Yo. Sorry I’m late. There was this dolphin and I just couldn’t resist stroking him.” Kakashi said with a grin.

    LMAO

    Lovely inuendo right there. LoL. This looks really promising. I only wish you'd been a little more... *discriptive* with the masturbation/sex scene. What can I say? I'm a perv.


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  • From ANON - Sukara on May 13, 2005
    xD When Naruto started doing himself I started laughing, two reasons;

    1.I'm hyper

    2.I knew Sasuke heard him xD

    *Adds to fsvourties* Update soon,ne? ^_^
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  • From Kusachu on May 13, 2005
    'Look at the foliage of the green leafy trees and the nice strong and erect... His eyes widen.
    'Damn!!! Not again!!!' He wailed. 'And I was only looking at a tree! What the hell is wrong with me???'

    “Yo. Sorry I’m late. There was this dolphin and I just couldn’t resist stroking him.” Kakashi said with a grin.


    BWAHAHAHA!!!!!!! that's hilarious! This is a good start! Cum Cum...*snicker*

    I'll definately have to follow up on this one! hahaha! so yeah! keep it up! (((Man i'm feeling pervy...*sigh*))) And Sakura....sigh...*giggle* nasty in a bathing suit...hahahhahahha! why does she have to suck so bad? (((I'm mean in the real story...not in this...))) YAY! *claps for you*
    d(^-^)b

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  • From ANON - Etiole on May 13, 2005
    Good, good. I like so far. Please update soon!
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