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By : Sukara
  • From ANON - Teeky on May 07, 2005
    Hey again! I didn't expect chapters two and three to be added today (yay). I can't wait for chapter 4 and I am enjoying this story very much. I noticed that Neiji mentioned being prepared for their tasks and since Naruto is going to be Sasuke's slave I can't wait to see what he's going to make the 'innocent' blonde do (snickers). Anyway, maybe Sasuke will make him wear a special outfit for the week...something very revealing. I like how you also have Neiji interested in Naruto. Will there be any challenges between Sasuke and Neiji in the future? Don't worry too much about the typos. I'm really feeling this story. It's simple yet good, so keep up the good work 'kay. See yah next chapter!
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  • From ANON - Sukara on May 07, 2005
    I write this fanfic for people to read and enjoy, I didn't write it so they could tell me that I aheva typo there and here >.< this continues I'm just gonna discontinue this fic T_T
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  • From ANON - Sukara on May 07, 2005
    I'm not sure about the way I type..and Hogo-chand idn't do the Beta, I did, I just downloaded some beta thing on the internet, and plus...I live in Canada, NWT O_O In a crappy town..and our school is purple...so I'm not sure how different my school is from others..
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  • From ANON - T.K-kun on May 07, 2005
    still interesting chapter. wonder what the tasks are going to be for naruto. poor him,
    knowing sasuke, they'll be horrible! welll... back to the grammar and stuff, not to be
    mean to hogo-chan, but there were still a bit of mistakes. sasuke was spelled "sauske"
    many times and there was a paragraph at teh beginning that ad way too many commas
    and one period that was in a middle of a sentence. there were still some letters missing
    from some wrods. if you'd like, and if hogo-chan doesn't mind, i'd like to give the beta reading
    a try. you can always try to find my story in the author directory and see how i type my stuff.
    if you don't like my beta reading, hogo-chan can do the rest. just a try out. =) you can either
    reach me at my sn, Spamanella, or my e-mail address should be under my name for this review.
    oh yeah, if this is just your style of using "thru" for through, tell me!
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  • From ANON - Germaine(dun wanna sign in) on May 07, 2005
    Um...you do know that you just put up chapter one....again...right?
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  • From ANON - Teeky on May 07, 2005
    Great chapter! I'm lovin' the potential of Sasuke as a leader of a gang. I would really love to read more of this. Just a question...when I clicked chapter two it was the same as chapter one. Did you change something in that chapter to read differently? Anyway, I'll be waiting for updates from you for sure!
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  • From ANON - Ann on May 07, 2005
    Luv it. Can't wait for more..
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  • From ANON - eternal on May 07, 2005
    It's a good fic. really Wonders what could be the tasks Sasuke would give Naruto. ^-^ Really hope that you will update soon ^-^
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  • From ANON - Inugami on May 07, 2005
    Finally, there is a potential of something "good" happening in the next chappie. Now that Sasuke has a hold of Naruto, I better not see any wussy, NON-R-rated stuff for the task. Hurry and update soon.
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  • From ANON - - on May 07, 2005
    lol Hi. Nice story, still. you have the talent :P spelling was much better than last time, but could still use some help ne. do go ahead and try to fix errors from the first chapter too - so that new readers don't abandon the fic due to presentation. after all, this fic is worth the reading. ;)
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  • From ANON - sizzle on May 05, 2005
    hmmm, nice set up you have so far. now we get to see where the story goes in regards to naru. he could be completely innocent and a happy child (prob with famous gang parents) or he could be looking for a job in the gang, having a slightly darker personality, or perhaps he could be dangerously familiar with all the dark happenings of the underworld and work under a famous alias and he could bring much to sasu's organization, much to sasu's surprise (my fav character development i supose). we'll see what happens, lol
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  • From ANON - silverfox on May 05, 2005
    update now now now now NOW DAMMIT
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  • From ANON - Setsu on May 04, 2005
    Kyaaaaa That was too cute at the end! XD I can't wait to see what happen's. What are they gona do to poor Naruto? Heh what is Naruto going to do to the poor gang is a better question :P Are people going to be after Naruto? Is their going to be an explination as to why Naruto wants to join the gang? Who was the other gang? ^.^ Kya I can't wait up date soon please! This is great so far you write well. Ja till next chap!
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  • From ANON - hogo-chan on May 04, 2005
    oooooh! sounds awesome! Please update fast! I can't wait to see what happens! If you would like a beta, I wouldn't mind helping out! If you're interested, please just email me at hogochan@yahoo.com.
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  • From Sukara on May 04, 2005
    I'm so sorry xD I really really need a beta-person @_@ Besides...those are my every day typo's and I don't know how to get rid of it xD!!
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