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Reviews for Teamwork 2

By : Askerian

From Tigerlily7prb on November 20, 2005
Thou art evil...for you create readable crack! My whole day's been runnin' late b/c I keep comin' back for more.

I have no complaints, and will wait rather (im)patiently for updates.
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From ANON - Stephanie on November 09, 2005
YAY!! I just got done with Teamwork and jumped into the sequel. I love your style of writing and have read all of your Gundam Wing fics. Your totally awsome!!!

P.S. Is Garou ever going to be continued? I love that story.
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From ANON - Shizukesa Amaya on November 09, 2005
You have to finish this! You have me hooked...don't leave me lingering!
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From ANON - kuramasbluegurl on October 24, 2005
Hey, like I said I'm back to post a better review.

I was going through the earlier posts that people typed and I really didn't like a certain one.
I think it's funny how people read stuff they don't like. They read it and then bitch about it. Then they keep reading it and bitch more. It's like WTF no one cares what you have to say. Especially if the reasons you have are crap. It's not like these characters are real.
It's fanfiction, artists take an idea and put alil twist on it, when it comes to writing a fanfiction. That's pretty much the point. You are the creator, you get to pick and choose what you like and want to change. It's not like they claim that the stories is theirs. (geez)
I believe the creator (of any anime) is the only person who should be anal about the way the character's personalities should be. But, I'm sure that the creator of Naruto doesn't go around reading people's fanfiction and saying "This, This and THIS is wrong! Fix it!" Ugh, some people really need to get over it. It's a story, fanFICTION!!!
If you don't like what your reading scroll down and click the purple font that says "Go Elsewhere" and find something you do like and know you wont bitch about. Geez talk about common sense.

ANYWAY...
I really do enjoy your writing, it's fun and creative. The jokes you put in there crack me up. LOL :D
You made me like Sasuke again. ~_^
I can't wait for your next post. I hope it's soon.
Thanks for the great read.

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From ANON - Kuramasbluegurl on October 24, 2005
I love this fanfic. It's cute.
I seriously can't wait for the update!!!

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From ANON - Tokitoh on October 15, 2005
"I dare hope he won't be that sugary."

Yeah. Right. I hope so, too.
Actually, I don't particularly like this sequel. Maybe it's because I am not into heterosexual anime fanfiction, and I don't really like Sakura... and, ungh, when you compared her to Sasuke (fighting her reminds Naruto of Sasuke), I really wanted to vomit. Because it's just ridiculous. There is no way Sakura would match Sasuke or Naruto. Yeah, I agree, she's not totally lame, but matching an Uchiha or the Kyuubi... ungh, I really want to vomit again. In my own eyes, it really degrades the boys. I am sorry if it offends you, but that's why reviews are, eh? To share an opinion.
Besides, I don't really understand the Kyuubi. Is he obsessed with Sasuke? Does he even... uh, "like" Sakura? Or does he treat her like she's a... um, "The-mother-of-his-cubs"? And if Sasuke is that cool and powerful, HOW can you still say that his strength equals to Sakura's? Yack. Besides, this thing is way too Sakura-centered... and Naruto is too annoying. Actually, the fic doesn't seem to be NaruSasuSaku anymore. It's more like NaruSaku (eeek), and a little bit of SasuSaku *vomits*... uh. Um. I feel really sick. +____+ Okay. I DO like the universe and the characterization is nice. And I really like the way you write... well, I am really not into het anime fics. And you seem to transform the story into het. It's not like I am demanding you to write fluffy NaruSasu scenes... it's just that, Kyuubi in the Fox Play sequel (or Naruto as well, in the original Teamwork) seemed to actually care about Sasuke and treat Sakura the way I would treat her if I were him. ^^' I mean, Naruto, especially in the last chapter, treats Sakura as a loving sappy idiot and treats Sasuke like he's furniture or something. And I wonder... maybe you are going Mary Sue on this fic? ^^' Well, regardless, I still hope you will update. Eventually.
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From ANON - Goth Child of Zyon on October 02, 2005
w00t! update! [ i wuv joo diiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiis much! ]
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From ANON - Buras_Mew on October 01, 2005
Alright!
Sakura's dad is kool. *thumbs up*
I just kept thinking, don't be like sakura's mom, don't be like sakura's mom, etc, etc.
You can allways count on your daddy. X3

Anyway, this chapter is an awesome installment. I give you cookies.
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From ANON - MORE on September 29, 2005
MORE! sorry to sound redundent.
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From ANON - Sarah on September 18, 2005
I cann't resist the urge to gush. I never read a threesome fic until I came upon your series and I have absolutely fallen in love. Your careful character portrail and painfully detailed dynamics have convinced me that this is perhaps the greatest pairing in the Naruto universe. I would also like to admit that I am in general very timid about m/m pairings, not a fan to say the least, but you have done a great job at making Naruto and Sasuke's relationship seem plausible and not-scary (and yes I have read the lemons too). I love the continued angst and lack of complete resolution within any one chapter and love that I can trust as an author to be intelligent enough to eventually resolve them all (something I can not say about a great many fan fic authors). I would also like to thank as a Sakura fan for not making her too pathetically weak or too ridiculously strong, two popular ways of destroying the beauty of her character I believe. I always wait with baited breath for your updates. You have an amazing talent for writing with these characters and I stand in awe of your imagination and literary art. You are flat out incredible and I hope you never lose the love and joy of writing these wonderful little stories for silly people like me to read.
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From ANON - Tohru on August 31, 2005
This is such a wonderfully written story. The situations and characters are believable. Keep up the wonderful work!
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From ANON - Dojomistressachan on August 30, 2005
First of all I want to say forget all the anal retentive ass-wipes who keep pissing you off. Writing a three-way relationship fic (I mean rellationship not just a one night or fuck buddie type thing) is DAMN HARD TO WRITE. It rarely works in real life so writing is no easier and I applaude you for the great work you've done so far. I'm more of a Naruto/Sakura fan, but then I read this and now have a taste for decent Sakura/Sasuke fics because of this, you're a really talented writer. Yes everyone is a bit more grown up but I think they're all very much in character, Sakura is insecure in many things (the whole reason why she trained her ass off after Sasuke left in the manga), Naruto likes to make things casual and just goes with the flow, and Sasuke is hell a hard to write, he is a really complex character but I think you did a damn good job with him even though he is difficult. I seriously love this fic (I just recently stumbled upon it and was happy when two days later I found an update), it's well written and fun but serious when it needs to be. I also liked in the last chapter or two how you brought out Sakura and Ino's odd friendship that helps give sakura support...in its own odd way ^^() Though I wonder how Naruto and Sasuke may take the news about 1) Sakura's father wanting to meet them and 2) Recent news about the pregnancy, those things are definitly floating around my mind. That and maybe eventually (right now the story actually has me more hooked them the prospects of physical ativities) have a repeat of that night that started it all. Anyway I felt the need to tell you how much I appreciate your writing since so many people who are extremely anal retentive about detail keep seeming to bum you out. Screw all of em, if they dont like it dont read, keep up the great writing!
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From ANON - Anon on August 30, 2005
You updated! *happy jump*

I love the wacky Yamanaka family, and Sakura's dad was a very believable character, nice job with him! And how you made Sasuke and Naruto's relationship a believable, realistic male/male. I like the direction this is moving in. You are doing a great job with the plot! I can't wait to see how the dinner with Sakura's parents goes, and the progression of the difficult pregnancy and what's going to happen next. Teamwork conquers all!

*thirty cheers for Asuka-sama!*
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From ANON - lijana on August 30, 2005
I am really enjoying this series!! I love what you have done with the characters, even though Naruto is still being treated unfairly.:)
I also liked your foxplay side story...are there any sequels in the works?
All in all I like reading this...please continue and don't let others distract or discourage you. It's all fanfiction anyway.
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From ANON - Tenacious D on August 29, 2005
YAY!! For the longest time I thought this story had died. Now I can read happily again. And a great rant at the start. Screw all those people who give ya shit.
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