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Reviews for Teamwork 2

By : Askerian

From ANON - animeaddict666 on August 19, 2006
hehehehehhe.. I almost choked laughing during the first scene. Your characterization of Naruto is so perfect. I am green with envy. Gods, that was sooooo funny! I read it like 5 times! Thank you so much for all your hard work and effort. This kind of writing takes a lot of time and it is greatly appreciated!
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From ANON - zookitty79 on August 19, 2006
oh my god!!! i love this freakin' story so very very much and each chapter gets better and better *fangirly squeal* yeah for hot threesomes and for smart writing - i really appreciate that naru sasu and saku are not chariactures of themselves. i also really like that the chappies are divided into pov's, i like knowing all the different perspectives. and there are so many cute giggly bits that made me laugh and it has enough angst to make it real and not fluff (thank you thank you thank you) your characterization of the fox just kills me ded - i love how snarky and pervy he is *hugs fox* pervy is good, very very good, i like that naru is pervy too, very appropriate in mho. i'll stop fangirling now *blushes* i look forward to more awesome nekkid action *coughs*
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From ANON - barby on August 19, 2006
don't lose your inspiration!!! please!!
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From ANON - beccapattytwo on August 18, 2006
ahh i forgot a little bout what i was gonna write.. but i just remembered.. is it possible for both sasuke and naruto to have gotten pregnant? like the child be a little boy with black and blonde hair with 1 sharingan eye and fox whiskers and sakuras compassionate heart and green eyes(cept when his sharingan is activated) now that would be totally awesome.. i know ive read one fanfiction(inuyasha) where 2 demons were able to... soo thought maybe the kyubbi could be a part of it and have the child actually be both.. ...

just a curiousness of mine.. and a interesting idea.. haha or even Sakura could have twins.. thats why its takin so much chakra.. one sasukes and one narutos.. nother idea.. ever since i started teamwork ive been dying to kno what the babys gonna look like and be like and whos its gonna be.. I LOVE THIS STORY!!

oo yea just also wanted to let u kno.. that u portray the characters soo well.. so if anyone thinks that they are outta character .. its quite obvious they have never seen nor read naruto! hehe ^_^

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From ANON - beccapattytwo on August 18, 2006
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh i absolutely love this storyy.. i was wondering when u were gonna update.. and i was thrilled to see that ya did.. its just sooo perfect.. i mean this story is seriously something ud kind of expect to see or hope a ton to see in the actual show. u have the characters down so well.. and all the extra's u throw in are awesome..(extras.. meaning all the sexual tension, kawaii moments, make out sessions, arguments, insults, dominance issue, and i absolutely love the way u have the kyuubi! its perfect.. )

this has got to be the best Naruto fanfiction ive ever ever read.. (and ive read a ton) ExCELLENT JOB!

and keep up the good work
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From ANON - Anon on August 18, 2006
I love this story. Really. Love it. It's bloody perfect. To hell with the critisism, don't ever change. Wait, you can change, you could update more often (ha ha), but other than that, perfection.
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From ANON - morwen re on August 17, 2006
great job! i had almost thought that this fic was dead, but i'm glad i was wrong! and don't listen to those fools who say that you're taking naruto and any of the others out of character! you're so totally not! sic evil plot bunnies on them next time they do something like that! you're really doing a good job keeping everything real and to the anime and mangas that i've read and seen. i can't wait to see the next installment of this fic and if you do so soon, i'll give you a cookie! ja ne for now!
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From ANON - Yami Umi on August 17, 2006
woooaaahh, you updated!!! see, you can do it! Now, if only you did it sooner... well, we can't always have everything, can we?
Way too good of a chapter, especially the making out scene with sakura and Naruto. XD I'm a narusaku fan and usually don't do sasunaru, or any yaoi pairing at all, or sasusaku, but this one is so very well writen that's kinda difficult not to like. Especially when the characters are so well fit in their personalities, differently form these naruto fanfics I've seen scattered around... oh well.
Well, I must be going now, see you next update, be here or be at ff.net. Buh bye!
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From ANON - Anon on August 17, 2006
Zwow. Ok, well, yes, even though I'd been reading the scenes as they came out on your LJ, just seeing them altogether makes it so very wonderful. I just know you write the best IC Team 7 ever, and I especially die when it's a Naruto POV, because, of course, you are the master of an in-character Naruto even when it hurts. See, because (and I am not a Sakura basher, I respect her, especially after the time jump) but the scene where Sasuke is observing Naruto's seal is lovely, and when Sakura sees them I guess I always thought she made a big deal out of it so she could get attention and have them chase after her. Which she got. And when I first read it, I felt bad for Naruto. I did like that you were insinuating up until then that Naruto felt like the third wheel, and with that scene in the stall, why shouldn't he? BUT, the fact that Naruto doesn't get completely jealous, but would rather see the two of them share a moment is SO Naruto, no matter how angry/sad/angsty I get about the situation. Naruto has always been rather self-sacrificing, but I also don't think he would ever feel sorry for himself but could still believe that it wasn't personal, that he wasn't forgotten enitrely, but acknowledged the very real feelings Sakura has for Sasuke.

Okay, but then as the scenes all melded together and I read the part where Naruto and Sakura share their date--and it feels genuine. It doesn't feel like you're trying to push them together so the threesome feels balanced. It's very easy for Naruto to love both Sasuke and Sakura it seems, but it's not so easy for the other two (not that they don't all have feelings for each other, but it's more complicated for those other two). Anyway, it just works. Rain always makes a story so sweet. No worries about the timing on updates (although who can complain when you post them on LJ)? I think I might die otherwise. I look forward to reading about the plan, and I love that the recent manga fit so well with what Sakura was talking about splitting chakra. And that was even after you had written this scene! Well, I don't need to offer much input since I know you have lots of people that provide knowledgable and astute comments. But why not review when someone works so hard and creates such a wonderfully written story that have like the exact personification of the characters. They're just so easy to see. Gosh, and I love your art for the story (and your art in general). *GUSHES*
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From animeaddict666 on August 13, 2006
OI! I just wanted to say that this fic inspired my writing. I am just starting to really like Sakura, and I love your portrayal of her. The interactions between these characters is wonderful! I hope you get a chance to check out my fic sometime and offer critique. You're one of my fanfic idols! Thank you so much for the wonderful writing and hard work.
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From ANON - j_narusasu_c on July 17, 2006
hey! i like your fic... is the story continued? or there will be a sequel to the teamwork 2? thanks...
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From ANON - Sam on July 08, 2006
Omg, all of your stories are just so gosh-darned cute!...And hot...But I read all the Teamwork drabbles on your site and was 'aww'-ing for a good 10 minutes.
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From ANON - kyuubigirl on June 24, 2006
Gah. Ch. 4. Had to fan self a bit when the boys kissed. And I'm going to beat the crap out of anyone who's pissing you off. Unless they can write like you do, they better shut the hell up because even an idiot can regurgitate something they've read on the Web, but it takes another kind of person to put it into play, make it their own and then actually make it as great as this. *sticks tongue out at jerk offs* Carry on with your kick ass self. :::silently requests more kissing between boys but is ok with how it is and is not forcing it:::
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From ANON - kyuubigirl on June 24, 2006
I should probably wait until I finish the last two chapters but I know they're going to be great anyway. I am so freaking in love with your Naruto. Usually I just want him to be squished to death by Sasuke, but now I'm the jealous one. He's so well written: He's sweet and caring and sympathetic but he's still like a responsible man who's always putting everyone else before him (which breaks my heart sometimes). The only thing that could crush me is if he somehow gets left alone at the end. You wouldn't do that to me?? Woo, taking a break and then finishing up this story. I LOVE THIS!
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From ANON - barby on June 22, 2006
finally!!!!!!!!!!!!! OMG I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS FOR SOOOOOOOOOOOOO LONG! THIS IS THE STORY I'VE LIKED THE BEST, REALLY... I LOVE NARUSAKUSASU AS A THREESOME, AND YOU'RE AN AWESOME WRITER... KEEP LIKE THIS! DON'T EVER DIE!!
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