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Reviews for Teamwork 2

By : Askerian

From gypsybaby21 on February 23, 2007
Oh wow! Wow! This series is amazing! I absolutely LOVE Sasuke/Naruto/Sakura pairings...I can rarely find them, let along find any that are this awesome. Hurry up and update! Gees, what do you have a life or something? Well you shouldn't-all you should ever do is write, write, write, oh, and did I mention WRITE! If the both of us wouldn't get in trouble I'd pay you write faster. But then there�d be that whole lawsuit from the creators. *Sigh* it would get ugly, but then they�d probably read your stuff and think, �hey, we need to get this person writing on the Manga� or a novel or something.

And when the hell are all three of them finally going to have sex again--preferably not in a one-shot--though I wouldn't entirely object to another one short arc or whatever you'd call it for this series. You know what would be cute, a scene where Sakura is singing to the baby (with the baby still in her stomach [none of that in the future stuff, which I also read that future fic of the team-verse] so, nothing like that, even though it was very good) and Sasuke or Naruto or both see/hear her doing it. I could so see that as a moment where Sasuke really, really falls for Sakura.

Then all you'll have to do is make Sakura fall for Naruto, which is obviously happening. That's another thing I love about your writing. You didn't just 'let' it happen, there were convincing reasons...you made it real. It's like I'm watching a movie. I love watching them all fall in love with each other. Really terrific job! I�m glad I�m not the only one that just had a happy coronary over Sakura change in Manga/Anime. I was like hot damn she got a backbone. I love it. I also like that you�re trying to change it so that in your story Sakura will eventually be Canon. In my opinion the characterization is flawless. I think the Jealous!Saskue moments are hilariously cute.

I�m going to stop now, because I think I actually made a fan fic writer stop writing once because I gave them a complex or something. Like the author was afraid of not keeping up with expectations. I kid you not�I�m almost positive she stopped writing because of that. This is why I�m stopping (I assure you, I could go on�I could make an essay-oh, I could). I�ll be looking forward to the next chapter. (I already went to your journal and read everything on there, so I mean the NEXT chapter!)

~Aya
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From Decorinne on February 19, 2007
Awesome story!!!!!! I just read this and the first one straight. Addictive pure and simple. You are a really engaging writer. I can't wait to find out whose it is / what will happen / Naruto's grand Idea!!!!! mmm sasuke.... ;) Anywho keep up the fantastic work! Is there any way I can get on a list or be notified when you update because I would simply hate to miss it but life gets so hectic. Anywho I will try to keep checking back regardless :) Thankyou for being there to write these engaging storylines that make me so very happy. You have a definate gift!
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From Laurachan on February 12, 2007
I truly like your story! First of all, it has a GOOD and ORIGINAL plot, something not usually seen (especially in adult stories).
Second, you've got a great writing style, the grammar and the spelling are correct and it all flows nicely - being Italian I really, really appreciate this fact.
I must admit that I'm a SasuSaku fan and yaoi is really not my genre; I like threesomes and yours is one of the best out there - I actually like even the SasuNaru scenes!

Well, I'm addicted :)
I hope you write more!

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From Cynycyl on February 11, 2007
Took me a couple days worth of free-time but I've finally finished all your stories here. I can't even remember how I ended up at your story listing, a link somewhere I believe, but my heavens was it worth it. I've never been the type to review or feedback fanfics, not because I don't care but I figure y'all have plenty of feedback to deal with, you don't need more spam from me. But I created an account solely for the reason of sending you feedback that I hope like mad you get.
First, I love your stories. Perhaps because I feel you think about the members of team 7 much the same way I do, their 'voices' , characters, the personalities. I feel you have a really excellent feel for the characters as created by Kishimoto and I must say it makes me quite angry when I read that you've gotten negative feedback from people. I don't think there's a single instance, a word, a line, a 'look' anywhere in these stories where Team 7 members aren't 100% within character. And, despite where I think the manga might end up, story-wise, in my lil battered heart of hearts I've always dreamed of an ideal end with these 3 as a family, which is the vision you present here. Not sure why some readers have issues with the idea of a loving, familial threesome for these guys...it's such a *natural* evolution of their teamwork and the development of their bonds. And in the short, sharp life of a ninja I would imagine such things as gender are secondary when it comes to attraction...love who you are with, ya know? Perhaps the people that complain are solely here for some naughty materials and can't get their groove on without certain imagery, but they're missing out on a beautiful (and often extremely funny) story.

Here's the main point of my fawning review to you: please finish this story. I notice your last updating was Nov 2006 and I write myself so I know sometimes the voices come easily and sometimes they don't talk to you for what feels like forever. I'm sure you have plenty on your plate in life but I assure you there must be others that think like I do about these stories, Teamwork specifically, and I need closure on this story. I just love love LOVE it. I want to see it come to fruition. And for what it's worth, if I can help at all, be a beta, spellchecker, or if you just want to ever vent ideas in my general direction or bitch that Sasuke is being a stand-offish he-bitch and not 'sharing' his thoughts with you, I officially place myself at your disposal.

Good luck to you, thankyou for this marvelous work, and here's hoping you continue these stories because I'm absolutely hooked and I just can't wait to see how everything ends up for my beloved Team 7
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From Chargos24 on January 29, 2007
Damned nice story regardless of what other reviewers have said. I cannot wait to see the next chapter posted.
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From conquerorsstar on January 23, 2007
noooooerzzz i thought you were done with the story. i cant believe i actually have to wait now *sobs. lol well i loved it ^_^ oh boy i hope its sasu P.O.V. next, he's my favorite
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From conquerorsstar on January 22, 2007
gyah!!! okay sorry i keep commenting its probably getting annoying by now but i keep forgetting to put things i wanted to say.

so yeah i really like narusasu relationship because its so refreshing and unique and yadayada... and definitely the most believable i've read so far ^_^ and damn you >.< lol your story keeps popping into my head at the most inconvenient times like when i'm supposed to be studying... or sleeping. it like haunts me lol. alright... i think i'm done now. but i'm going to finish the story tomorrow (hopefully) and so be prepared for a million more comments

NOW off to bed

Ja!
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From conquerorsstar on January 22, 2007
nyahhh i just finished chapter four and i have to say i absolutely am in love with the way you made sasuke and naruto's relationship ^_^ so believable. and i know i said it a million times...but I LOVE YOU :D lol screw all those flamers this story rawks unbelivably. just wanted you to know i adore it

ok...

off to bed now :)

...man that sounded kinda perverted. i meant the sleep kind of bed not the.."sleep" kind of bed.. okay i'll just shut up now. (:

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From conquerorsstar on January 22, 2007
OH! and i loved the way you portrayed shash-kay, it seemed to in character ^_^ toodles
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From conquerorsstar on January 22, 2007
grr i just read part of your rant on chap. 4 and that pissed me off SO MUCH >.< i haven't read any of the reviews where they bitch but this is definitely the best story EVER and people dont bitch about shitty stories, so why would they bitch for this?? GRRR

so yeah anyways, love the story. so sad it has to end *sobs hystarically love you, love you, LOVE YOU!! and umm just felt like showing my support ^_^ on to the rest of the storeh =)
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From ANON - rachael on January 07, 2007
I adore your ability to keep Kakashi in character for your Teamwork universe--aloof but caring. Awesome. I love the Teamwork universe and I'm anxious for an update. I'm super-excited for when you get to a chapter dealing with Itachi. Ooo! So much potential for awesomeness, and awesomeness already delivered. I'll be hoping for more (no matter how long it takes, to be quite honest). :3
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From ANON - NeeN on January 01, 2007
Please update SOON!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - NeeN on December 31, 2006
WHAT IS THE THE PLAN!??!?!?!?!?!?
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From ANON - NeeN on December 31, 2006
llllllloooooooooollllllllll lovvee ittt!!!
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From ANON - NeeN on December 30, 2006
lolll love Naruto, and love the chapy!!!!!!!
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