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Reviews for Prize: The Heart of Konoha

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From ANON - lo on October 03, 2005
Are you going to finish this. It is soooooooo goood. You are shaping this story into something great. well it you feel like doing anymore, great!!! If not, I really enjoyed reading this great story.
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From ANON - Sukara on October 03, 2005
Hey!! You updated!! I think...well...no..I think you put in a disclaimer xD
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From ANON - Hypnotic on October 03, 2005
Hey! great story, I hope to see what happen next! Are you going to say how Sasuke-kun got hurt so badly?! Cause I wanna know, please *puppy dog eyes* Yeah but I wuv this story!
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From ANON - Mochi~ on September 06, 2005
MORE! MOOOOOOOOOOOOOORE! Evil, EVIL HUMAN!
Write more.. or.. or I'm going to cry! AAAAAGH!

-loves fic to death-
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From ANON - One_Sick_Mind on September 05, 2005
I usually prefer uke Sasuke, but this fic is so fantastic, I just can't get enough of Sasuke playing his sexual mind games on Naruto. Why haven't you added more chapters yet?? Please keep writing!!! I keep checking back, and re-reading, but there are never more than 6 chapters! XO

Can I also request flashbacks to what Itachi did to Sasuke? (Showing what Sasuke did to Kabuto would also be fskin awesome, but I have a feeling it would sidetrack from your story too much... still, in all my love for this favorite pairing of mine, I'd love to see it!) I actually got a request from someone to write a "prequel" to this fic with Itachi and Sasuke, but 1. I have no right to and 2. I could not even begin to approach your skill in writing such a thing. Youre really masterful at this. Except... YOU NEED TO KEEP GOING! Why do all the best authors stop in the middle of these great fics???!!!!

Sigh... must I remind you of how wonderful each and every bit of this is? But I'm already late to dealing with all the RL stuff your fic distracted me from. Fine: one bit... umm, all of Chapter 6. The abused side of Sasuke coming out makes him sexier, fleshes out his character, and not only gives a more solid reason for him to be doing what he's been doing (as victims of abuse often copy their abusers, and I can definitely see Itachi treating him similarly. Only Itachi doesn't have the damage from having been raped influencing him... truly cold and cruel the whole way... unless you give him other aspects like certain feelings for his brother... oh I want to see you write this so much...), but also appears in just the right amount at just the right time for him to do that whole gentle comfort thing for Naruto after he calms down. We get to see more of Naruto's VERY 3D personality, too, very skillful with wanting to run but then feeling pity for him then getting all confused and letting Kyuubi comfort him. It's a surprise to see such a sudden shift from Sasuke when Naruto wakes up and he goes from being comforting to being a cruel prick as usual, but it is also very revealing of his personality/damage: yeah, he has his weak side, and Naruto did something that maybe even touched him, and he's capable of kindness, but for now at least this isn't going to change how he acts with AWAKE Naruto. Or even in any time other than his rare moments. He's still fucked up and sadistic. And it's good pacing... it's too early for him to start being NICE to Naruto. You've found a way to show his side that's hurt and wants to comfort, without needing to change the direction of the way he interacts with Naruto.

And umm yeah, the whole chapter was fucking HOT. The bleeding wounds were a great touch. And as always, the bondage, even to the point where Sasuke's pinning Naruto's wrists to the wall when he rubs him off towards the end. Paralyzing him was brilliant, and I feel like you could do a really hot lengthier scene with Naruto like that, but of course the bondage made me perfectly happy! And the way that through the fic, he doesn't just go tie him up and rape him, but does this whole insidious thing with feeding him, patiently twisitng Naruto to become his pet or something like that... So much more amazingly masterful and sexy than if you'd just written Sasuke shoving Naruto in and out of a cage and tieing him up, which I cannot possibly imagine in this fic. It's just so good the way you're doing it. I LOVE YOU! In a really sick way.

Now KEEP GOING! We're going to find out what this whole meeting is about, right? Maybe it has something to do with what attacked Sasuke. I wanna see how Naruto feels and how others react to him at the meeting. Ooh, what will each of their friends think?? Will Sakura flip out? Will inner Sakura think "I wanna be Sasuke's whore"? Will they just stare in uncomfortable silence? How will it change things, if it does? And, of course, hot dominating SasuNaru when they get back home. Ooh, and they haven't had anal yet, I can't wait to see how you approach that... and of course, it would be nice if the cat people show up again. And flashbacks to SasuKabu *whine* or maybe just mentioning thing he did to him... :/ Looking forward to any hints you drop about what Itachi did. And umm yeah more of Sasuke making Naruto his bitch. RAR! *flees to do everything I've been putting off*
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From ANON - lo on August 31, 2005
this story was so well written. I hope that one day you will continue. It is great. I love how the characters and the plot are developed. This is one of the top pieces of fiction that I have read. Keepup the great work.
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From akiravadel on August 21, 2005
So far I love it to death! It's very well done, plus it looks like your having fun with it by adding in characters. I hope you are! ^-^ Keep up the good work! I hope to see more from you in the future! (Meaning i can't wait to read the next chapter!^-^)

~Akira~
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From ANON - nekotaro on August 08, 2005
oh... vamos actualiza.... ;__; porfavoooor?
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From ANON - Jodea Moondreamer on August 05, 2005
I must say, this is my favorite Naruto fanfiction. I love the storyline and the growth of the characters from where the series began. I don't know what more to say, except I love this story. It has every element I adore in both a slash lemon and a regular story. I hope you will conitune with this story.

Jodea Moondreamer
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From ANON - dakara on July 24, 2005
AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW *cries* T_T that's so mean you knowwwww I can only hope that sasuke cames back ti his own self T-T poor poor naru-chan
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From onesickmind on July 21, 2005
*wraps around leg and stays there*

This is a great fic, very well-written, and it's great that you're taking the time to create an in-depth, well-developed plotline and taking things slow but still having sex scenes. As much as I want to jump straight to gratuitous violent rape scenes, the pacing of this story is very good and you're really skillful in telling it so far. I'm anxiously anticipating what's going to happen next, and I can't wait till you get to heavier stuff with Naruto and all the waiting is gonna make it that much better when it finally comes around.

Compelling plot, not just with the promises of more sex between Sasuke and Naruto. I can't imagine who Sasuke's opponent that scratched him up like that was... I want to see more of the cat-girl and her "keepers"... and it's interesting how it's developing with Sasuke having been abused, and Naruto looking for the "old" Sasuke, and all the unexpected ways Sasuke acts, and how this might turn into a healthy healing relationship between them (or something of a twisted version of it) instead of making a beeline for degradation and heavy violent rape... and then Kyuubi getting involved is really interesting... OMG this is such a good fit! Yay! Of course I'm hoping for Sasuke to get really violent with Sasuke, but the way it is going it looks like he's mostly going to be gentle... either way, I'm going to enjoy reading it, because you're such a good writer!

Are you going to do any more with Kabuto? I'd like to see more of him. Is there going to be more plot involving the kitten and her keepers, or was the thing with Kabuto, Eriko, Mina and Miyu just to let the readers know what's going on?

Keep up the good work! SOON! I will stalk you and whisper perverted things into your ear as you sleep if you don't update with another chapter soon!
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From ANON - complexphoenix on July 18, 2005
Specific elements I liked: Naruto's willingness to sacrifice himself for Konoha, and that he has the chance to defeat Sasuke through endurance and love rather than brute fighting strength; Evil Overlord Sasuke (I never thought of that one before, but now that I do think about it it's really cool, and hot) especially since his evil is such that he's not REALLY evil like Itachi or Orochimaru (he doesn't randomly kill his servants!); the fact that Sasuke got raped by Itachi (maybe you could give us some flashbacks?) and its hardening effect on him, a second trauma to accomplish what killing the clan did not; his beautifully touching nightmare; the explicit hot sex XD

Overall: *speaks reverently and happily* This fic, I love. It reminds me very much of several of my favorite dark fics I read in another fandom. The captivity, ownership, and rape (or some combination of them), which are underlain ultimately not by real malice but by real love, is among my absolute favorite motifs, particularly when it transforms the participants higher, into something nobler and better. In the hands of a skilled writer the beauty of that motif is unmatched.

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From ANON - ^^ on July 17, 2005
*tugs at hair* AUUUGGGGH! PLEASE I'm BEGGING you, U-P-D-A-T-E!!!!!!!!! AAAAAAAAAUGGGGGH! It's toooooo GOOD to stop!!! >
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From ANON - bittersmiles2003 on July 15, 2005
Yaaaa!! please update soon... ive been waiting for an update for ages this is just WOW im in love :D
could u please email me when u update?? i treavel alot.. work and whatnot so i never know if i missed something, and this i really dont want to miss.. soo cool :D
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From ANON - Tricycle on July 04, 2005
I usually hate reading angsty fics such as these, but DAMN this was good! It drew me in the whole story, and you managed to make Sasuke and Naruto's characters believable. I'd love to see more! Don't keep your fans waiting :)
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