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Reviews for Broken

By : arora1

From ANON - kyuubigirl on June 25, 2006
First off... ;;;: Hugs Redwitch because (she?) seems like she's going to have a melt down ;:: Ugh, i couldn't even read that review all the way through it was so damn heartfelt. Bah, I haven't put in a review for this story either and i've been reading it all along. I want to be supportive here, I would hate for anyone to intrude on my ideas and tell me how my fanfic characters should be, when obviously, you come up with an idea and it grows in your head, and the characters grow along with you, and they might talk to you and yada yada, you rarely meet an author who actually takes pleasure in inflicting pain on characters (save maybe Flannery O'Connor?), usually doesn't it just happen... ? Anyway, ok I was looking at the updated stories for tonight, some of which I'd been waiting for, and I saved this one for last... I don't know if it was because of the large amount of angst, or how much has gone on in this chapter that it deserved more time.. or that I knew it would be hard to deal with emotionally? Guh, I don't know. If you did say you would try to end it happy, then that's fine, but it's still your story, and you'll probably give it an ending that it's supposed to have. I agree with Redwitch in that OMFG it was so agonizing to see poor Naruto tortured over and over and over, and then I think OK, some people would say give the boy a break and it would be light-hearted, but at this point, that would be pretty preposterous the way the story's going, so I don't except them to suddenly be chasing the ice cream truck with ribbons in their hair or anything, and I'm not going to beg for happier times... I think it's actually going to get more sadistic, ne? But all in all, I don't really give a damn about the grammar, I can still read it and everything, and I love a lot of your imagery and think it's actually quite brilliant. The latest chapter, the way you were talking about the memories as shards and how the ones related to Sasuke merged together faster than others, holy crap, there are slivers of brilliance in this work, like a very deep psychological tremor that underlies this very dark, uh much more than angsty story (which makes me wonder, do you need a hug as well? :::hugs:::) But damn it, I like it because you're following what you must be seeing in your head, and i will totally read on as the next chapters come out. It seems like the stories come too far and they've gone through too much to just kill either one of the boy's off anyway, Although it's not implausible. Anywho, hope Redwitch is a little less traumatized by now. Ah, so much hugging... :::hugs your catatonic Naruto and half-dead Sasuke if you won't:::
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From ANON - Neko-Chan on June 25, 2006
waaa.....Kyubbi took over Naruto's body..and nobody noticed....quite a twist ^_^ you are one hell of a writer ^^ Cant wait for more!!
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From ANON - Emma on June 24, 2006
Wow, this was amazing.
Five more chapters to go, eh? I don't want this story to end!!!! :(
Will you start a new story when Broken is done? (please say yes!!! i love your Naruto fics!!)
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From ANON - Emma on June 23, 2006
YAY!!!! UPDATES!!! I LOVE YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *glomps you*
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From ANON - kirafics on June 23, 2006
this is the best stroy that i have ever read. its just... so ... good, no other way to explain it.keep up the good work and when you are done with this fic please keep writing!!!!!!
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From ANON - Jess on June 22, 2006
Arora, this is the best Naruto fanfiction I have ever read; and believe me I have read many.
Your portrayle of the paths the character's psychies would take if in these situations is believable, your writting of unchanged characters in awesome (I love your Shino), your story-line is gripping, and your grammer and editing are near perfect.
I really admire you for writting a story this long and PLEASE, PLEASE update soon.

Enjoy you trip.
Jess

(When I couldn't find this story on AFF for several months I nearly panicked thinking that you had removed it or something and I would never get to finish it.)
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From ANON - lonelylulaby on June 19, 2006
Poor Naruto-kun he must of been scared really bad to comit mental suicide. The next chapters title makes me wonder about who's demons you'll be writting about. Personal demons of the characters or Kyuubi. Oh and i wanted to know that if kyuubi doesn't have naruto to stop him from getting loose will he just break free. I liked this chapter it was different most authors wouldn't kill off one of their main characters, but i think this just means there's something better in store. Just wanna say i enjoyed reading this new addition and cant wait till you update again.

ja ne till next time
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From ANON - DevilLived on June 18, 2006
I liked it, loved it, liiiiiked it.

Awesome chapter, I really really enjoyed it. Gah there's so much to say but I've got to go eat before my dad comes and kills me! (cries). I loved how you wrote that Naruto's soul was dead but his body wasn't and how Sasuke got his new Sharingan.

Update soon!
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From ANON - Reemu-Chan (not signed in) on June 18, 2006
Okay. I don�t really know where to begin because I don�t think that I�ve commented this story ONCE. But it�s not because I�m not supportive or appreciative of the chapters. It�s because your angst is so high of the charts that I could NEVER get myself into reviewing my thoughts on the story. After reader chapter 23: Not according to Plan, I feel that I have to say something before I die. I�ve been reading your other story, Just another day in paradise, and have been going over your grammatical mistakes and spelling errors and what not. Anyways, I�ve come to the conclusion that you love to torture Naruto-kun, and that doesn�t make me happy. It makes me EXTREMELY SAD. So sad that it has kept me from commenting on your work. Btw, I still have two more chapters for �Just another day in paradise� before I�m done. I stopped when I read your Author�s note stating a warning and that there was rape and death in that chapter. I could NOT get myself to see what happens, so I took a break. A break, may I add, that�s been more than two months ago. I went over numerous mistakes and have fixed them for you, but I�m not sure if you�d like for me to email the corrections to you or what. I WILL finish the story . . . I�m just not sure when. I mean, a person can only cry so much. I can�t take in any more angst. And after reading your 23rd chapter about that fight in Konoha with Naruto�*shakes head*. When he closed his self off from everyone, I just broke down and started crying. At first, when he was at Sound, I seriously could WAIT for him to do something and end his life. It was driving me over the edge crazy with all that crap that Orochimaru and that psychotic Doctor was putting him through. With all those experiments and torturing being done to him, I came to the point that I was anticipating his death. But when Sasuke was finally able to get him out. . . It made me have some hope for my lil Naru-chan. And it still pained me that you haven�t done anything to give the guy a break. Now, FINALLY when he�s on his way to Konoha, I begin to crumble. Naruto becomes suicidal again and breaks his mental wall as Kisame hauls him away JUST so he won�t be aware of the crap that he�d be enduring. It broke my heart. And there�s Sasuke, lying on the ground and fading out into his own half dead state from the massive loss of blood, staring off at his dobe. And he has Mangekou Sharingan? You have no idea how hard it was to try and calm myself after reading that. It takes A LOT to get me emotional, but that just takes the prize as the most emotional writing material in the world. It doesn�t even compare to that story off FF.net where this girl was butchered to pieces by an assassin. I�m depressed right now. I�m thoroughly, utterly, ridiculously soaked in my depressing pool of sorrow. If Naruto is indeed a vegetable. . . .if he is dead. . . I swear that I�m going to lose it. Let me tell you something. A very long time ago, while web searching for some Naruto pics, I came across this story. At the time, I had no idea what a fan fiction was. Anyways, it took me straight to the 8th chapter, and that�s where I started. My first thoughts, �HOLY CRAP THIS IS VIOLENT SEX.� I closed out of it when I was done, not even thinking to see what the title was. The next week after, something told me to check the story out again. But I couldn�t find it. About 5 months later, after I started to get into fan fiction, most popular one being Naruto, that same fan fiction came to mind. But I could NEVER find it. Then after 3 months, I find it. It was ALWAYS under my nose, but the title kept me off for some strange reason. BROKEN. That was the name of the story. And I remember, right when I started reading it, your Authors note attracted my attention. �I really like Naruto and will try to give the story a happy ending.� You have to PLEASE follow by that. I don�t think I�ve ever been so serious about a story in my life. And I�m deeply sorry that this is my first comment to you, but you have to understand that every time I read a chapter, I was overwhelmed with nothing but tears and horrid cursing. Yes, I admit, there were countless times that I wanted to review and give you nothing but threats because I could not handle what was happening to Naruto. So I decided, as a Author myself, that that wouldn�t be the greatest idea, and that I needed patience. Also, I wasn�t even sure if I was even going to stick to the story due to the pain that constantly poured from Naruto�s abuse. So here I am, pleading with all my heart for you NOT to kill Naruto. To bring sunshine back into his drop dead gorgeous eyes. To bring him back to his self. Please, I beg of you, I�m on my hand and knees, don�t make him a vegetable. Throughout this whole story he�s been miserable. I think that�s part of the reason why so many readers couldn�t bear reading your story. And I don�t mean to make you change what you have in mind for you story, or offend you by saying that the angst is overwhelming me 24/7, but I feel so weak right now. I think I�ve gone mad reading your story. I mean seriously mad. I�m losing it. I enjoy reading all kinds of stories as much as I love writing them. I do plan on majoring in English, so I don�t mind going over your chapters and double checking for mistakes. Just so you know, the offer is up. After all, the repetitive pleas in your Author�s note, �If you see any big errors, please, please, please tell me.�, makes me believe that you�d really accept. the offer for some help. I realize that I�ve been rambling for awhile, please excuse me. I can�t help it. In a way, I can�t wait for the next chapter, but then there�s that side that tells me you�re so unpredictable when writing that I have no idea what to expect of you. I don�t want Naruto to be broken. But that�s the name of your title, right? So I can�t seem to calm that quivering side of me that�s threatening to explode out of my chest. He�s suffered so much already, that I can�t help but to loathe the miscreants in your fanfic. So whether or not I�m looking forward for the things yet to come in you next chapters, you said that you still have about 5 more before you�re done, I�m anticipating and hoping for some happiness.

Okay, now off to my routine. Do allow me to explain. every time I read a painful chapter from �Broken�, I have to go find something sappy or humorous just so I stop crying. But I have a feeling that it�s not going to help right now. That last chapter was just too sad and heart wrenching. You have a way for writing angst. I applaud you. Now, if I may, I have to find something super happy before my mom thinks that I�ve gone mad and have lost it due to my poorly hidden tears.

Ja ne

Redwitch05

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From ANON - Leasan on June 18, 2006
FINALLY!!! THE NEW CHAPTER!!!
While waiting for it I've read your whole story three times already!
And I was sure nothing could shock me anymore but you managed to do it again.
Great chapter, I'm glad you're not going to finish it like that, they went through too much to just end up defeated.
I hope maybe Kyuubi will have a try at saving naruto's mind? He's terriotorial, and Naruto's head was his playground for quite some time, right? :)
An it's so cool Sasuke finished Itachi off so quickly, the SOB wasn't worth more time/word count to waste for his death.
I'm waiting impatiently for the next chapter, I'm so, so happy you started posting the new ones. Great thing!

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From ANON - Hitomi No Ryu on June 18, 2006
*tears in eyes*

Naruto~! Please~! Come back~!

UPDATE SOON DAMMIT~!
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From ANON - Neko-Chan on June 18, 2006
NOOOO!! Naruto!!! Please!!! Update soon!!! The suspense is KiLLiNG ME!!!
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From ANON - dancingkitsune on June 17, 2006
I hope yer going to update soon, I miss reading this fic.......... ;_________;
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From ANON - Neko-Chan on June 16, 2006
note from Neko-Chan's friend Kat:

wow...that was hott!!!! (lol, sasuke definitely is nicer once he gets laid XDDD) ah! i want more!!!

thanx Katchan
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From ANON - Neko-Chan on June 16, 2006
wow....that was an amazing chapter!!! i cant wait for more!!!
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