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By : megladon129

From ANON - MultifacetedTune on May 04, 2005
LMAO!!! OMG, that was sooooooo funny!!! I'm a horse person, so I know exactly what you're talking about. *snickers* Poor, poor Sasu-kun....... *evil grin* ^___~ I can't -wait- to find out what happens next!!! Oh, and about that...... you mentioned that you're willing to e-mail people when you update? *gives you puppy dog eyes* Please, do!!! That way, I'll know exactly when you update after your "little trip" to Japan. *sigh* Honestly, I don't know whether to strangle you for "abandoning" us or beg you to take me with you. Or both..... ^^ You lucky duck!!! Do you know Japanese? And is this for school/work, or just for fun? Oh, and promise me that you'll try to keep writing while you're there so that you'll have several chapters to post once you get back, kk? *insert longing look here* I reeeeeally want to visit Japan......and I will, right after I travel Europe and win the lottery. ^___^ Ah, well, it's late and I have a project that I need to be working on, sooooo.......... A always, keep up the good work, and update ASAP!!! ^___^ Ja ne!!!
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From ANON - ghostninja85 on May 04, 2005
What an interesting chapter. You really had me fooled when you mentioned kids. I thought that we'd get to see Konohamaru or Inari.

You are evil to Sasuke, but this gives us the perfect opportunity for Sasuke to fall from his horse and have Naruto swoop in and save him... (and finally KISS HIM).

I've already told you this, but I can't wait for it to happen. The suspense is killing me, especially since we readers already know that Naruto likes him.

Update as soon as you can. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - The Empress on May 04, 2005
I'm really, really enjoying this story. It's just too awesome. ^_^ I can't wait till the next chappie. =)
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From megladon129 on May 04, 2005
Lol, Naruto had a fangirl moment. Anyway, I hope you enjoy, and stay tuned. Poor Sasuke's going on the ride of his life. ^_^
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From ANON - Sam on May 04, 2005
Hey first off you said you wanted something along the lines of constructive criticism right? So here goes...I'm more of an artist than a writer, so you're oging to have to bear with me hehehe (btw I talk to bishihuntress - she got me hooked on Yaoi etc, and I think I might do a picture inspired by your story... :) ) Ok - you have very good visuals - I like your choice of words, and the structure of your sentences - reading the story never gets boring...(gosh i hope you update soon!!!)...The one thing that got to me was the part where Naruto talks about going home to see the kids. I know that they're in college and all, but I immediately got the idea that he actually had kids lol...I know you dont want to give the surprise away, but if you could somehow clarify that a bit more (or perhaps I'm just a dumb blonde after all) that would be great...It really started to bother me up until they got to his apt. and there werent any kids...I was like whew! Heh it just distracted me a bit. Otherwise i definitely give your story an A+++! You are a very talented writer.
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From ANON - dark_Angel on May 03, 2005
Awesome story with a really interesting plot....maybe have Neji or Gaara show up at wherever they're going and freak Sasuke out? XP update soon!
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From ANON - Rachel Dracon on May 02, 2005
Nice truck, very nice. Thank you for including a link to the picture, it's really the little things that make the difference. Naruto teasing Sasuke was funny, but also a little confusing, seems like perhaps he really is just leading the other on. Can't really make a judgement on that until I read more though, so perhaps my saying so is useless...

The Neji thing was HILARIOUS! A sea of flowers, and poor Kiba is allergic to them. Also a good ending for Neji, really makes me wonder what he plans to do to make Naruto notice and want him back. All in all, an awesome update, and I can't wait for the next one! ^.^
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From ANON - Kelly on May 02, 2005
I've read 3 times./ WAHAHAH!
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From ANON - blisblop on May 01, 2005
I like sasuke in this.I am confused why Naruto has chosen sasuke but is playing the field and being quite the tease,this would be sluttish if he was a girl in alot of peoples eyes,I do not believe in sluts (it gets the point across of sexual unethicalness)but it,Naruto's behaviour does strike me as slightly cruel,I hope he stops the games soon and starts playing good ones.He is hiding something ,some activity too so there is a mystery here,perhaps that will explain the less than cool behavior. Thank You.
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From ANON - Nathaniel on May 01, 2005
Mhh... Great story, love it.
I won't propose any story changes because on the one hand you won't pick them and on the other hand I somewhat like being surprised. Furthermore I cannot really comment on your style, because I'm not a native English speaker.

There are only two little things I was wondering about.
First you address Sasuke as "the brunette" then as "the raven-haired boy". I don't know any UK/US raven but here in good ol' Germany they are pitchblack (never saw a brunette raven).
Second Naruto needs more than half an hour to cook spaghettis? Even if I made a sauce from tomatoes alone I will manage it to eat and do the dishes in half an hour. But perhaps it was cooked with love ;)

So, I hope I was able to make myself understandable. What about an daily update? :D

So long,
Nathaniel
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From on May 01, 2005
hehe, great chapter! Naruto has all these tricks up his sleeve. Being able to cook... can't wait to see what else he can do.
I love your Sasuke. He's so cute. Hehe.
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From WhiteLiger on April 30, 2005
I like the way you are getting into Naruto a little bit more, as you did not really seem to touch on him that much in the beginning. I am eager to read more, what IS Naruto planning?

Love the cliff hanger at the end too. Man they make you scowl and then check back 5 minutes later they do.
Anyways, I can't think of anything good to critisize. I don't think I even spelled that right. 6 and a half ours of work on my first job is really killing my brain.

Ta ta for now.
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From ANON - Kel on April 30, 2005
Omg.. Love the story.. hoping to read just "more".. muahahha,, you know what I mean... Itz like Im waiting for the best part to come~
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From ANON - jesy on April 29, 2005
This is really good. I like your writing skill alot. Keep up the good work and don't forget to update. I would give you my email but someone i know might be on this website trying to hunt me down i swear *-_- but you most likey didn't want it anyway. Anyway good luck again.
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From Kusachu on April 29, 2005
i can't remember if i ever reviewed this or not, and i'm certainly not reading through your whole fucking mountain of reviews for my name, so i'll just pretend like i never did....

Anyway, i just have to say that this is one of my favorite fics right now! I just love it! I must admit, that the lack of Sasu/Naru*ahem* NARU /SASU-ness is frustrating, but i totally understand why it is absent thus far...DAMN THE FRUSTRATION! Ah, well, if you just made the boys hop on each other and start humping, the story would lose all of its respect and turn into a big easy whore... keep it going just like you are!

though, it is a sensational occurance that in this AU the 4 hottest friggin boys in the Naruto universe all happen to LIKE BOYS...well NARUTO anyway, but it makes for a fun time reading!!! LOL... Naruto Chan is sooo lucky!!! why can't those sexy boys chase ME like that!!!??? hahahaha! I'm okay really...

OMG! is Neji ever ANNOYING!!!!! GEEZ!!! I HATE HIM!!! and that says a lot coming from me! He makes me want to fucking slap him for being a goon! He's borderline CREEPY! Good work in using him to create tension! He makes my eye twitch! And i'm like "GRRRRR!!!!"

Gaara kind of freaks me out too, cuz i expect to see him all dark and spooky, but he's just kind of quiet and shy...which i guess IS spooky...um...yeah...hahahaha! *wants him to rub HER temples!*

Sasuke is the best! I just love him. he's all high strung and jealous, just like that bastard should be! Damn him for being stupid and not banging the shit out Naruto after that rub down!! well, i guess that wouldn't have worked storywise..hee hee GO SASUKE CHAN! MAKE NARUTO LOVE YOU!

Finally...your Naruto...OMG...So funny! He's like...this DORK...who in every other reality, should be picked on for being a big dork, but really happens to be the LUCKEST FRIGGIN GUY ON THE PLANET!!!! and he's so sweet! and cute! and lovable! And there is some mystery there too! What's going on with that??? AHHHH! You really bring out the qualities that shine in the current canon, like being naieve, but not stupid...and crafty! Such a plotting little tease! o.O

Kiba's character is also good. I like the defencivness he has over his roommate/best friend...and the fact that he isn't gay...that was needed badly! HAhaha! It's nice that he is so ambivalent to Naruto's awkward situation, like, he just wants what's best for him...(Which BTW happens to be SASUKE!!!! AAAAHHHH!!!!)

Sigh...that turned out longer than expected! well, i guess it was long over due though...since i've just been drooling over your chapters and not having the decency to let you know about it! *Glomp* Really, keep up the good work! I hope this story doesn't end up on the back burner because i would be really sad! I need so see them get together!! Damn it! COME ON!!!!! hahaha! Alright, i'm done now...Laters! d(^-^)b
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