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By : megladon129

From ANON - MultifacetedTune on August 08, 2005
*is exstatic that you updated* Yippeeeeeeee!!! ^^;;;;; Okay, so as pathetic as it is, I will freely admit that I have been checking the site every day since the 30th of July to see if you'd updated yet. *figured that being a few days early wouldn't hurt anything* So needless to say, you just made my day...erm......week. Yeah. ^^ But I really am sooooo glad that you're back, 'cause it's just so hard to find a fic like this one now-a-days. So here is the expected "welcome home" gift *throws chocolates at you* and now, you simply must tell me all about your trip! *reeeeeeeally wants to go to Japan someday* Oh, and don't forget to keep up the good work and update ASAP, as always!!! ^___~ Ja ne!!!
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From ANON - Kami Kaze on August 08, 2005
Waahh! I've waited so long for this chapter...you've made my day! ^___^ A fun chapter, as always... I liked how at the beginning Sasuke got a little (via the dream) hint on what it was that Naruto wants to hear from him. Gah...will the baka ever get it right? T_T Oh, and the hinted jealousy that Naruto tried to hide was great! Glad you're back with us!
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From ANON - AkaiTsume on August 08, 2005
Iii'm baaaaaaack!
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From ANON - Darkness-Consumer on July 30, 2005
Wowies, this is a really good fic! I'm sad that you're not gonna be updating for a while :(

I don't know what to put about how to help you improve or whatever, because I think you're writing style is really good. I didn't even notice any grammar mistakes either!
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From ANON - Anbu Captain on July 28, 2005
Huzzah! I finally found my way back to your uberly wonderful fic! *dances around stupidly* You have done such a wonderful job with the characters(especially Gaara). And thank you for not making Naruto into a completely clueless character. (Like, oh my gosh! *nasally valley girl accent*) Keep up the wonderful job!
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From ANON - Aerin on July 28, 2005
You asked for reviews, and although I've been lurking and reading this story for awhile, I haven't reviewed. Partially because I'm a lazy bum. So I apologize, because you deserve a good review. First of all, I'd like to say thanks for providing some decent reading. Your writing is incredibly witty and amusing. My favorite part so far was "in a doujinshi somewhere, a chibi-Gaara was flashing a victory sign..." heh. And I love how you jab in little things like "cue dramatic music."

Let's see...what can I say...as for improving, I would just say read books. Your writing can only get better from here on out.

Keep up the good work.

Aerin
http://www.fanfiction.net/~thataerin
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From ANON - kokoro no Kizu on July 28, 2005
Oh, so not fair! Stupid sasuke and naruto playing around it like that!

I know you wanted constructive critisism in a review, but for now I don't think my tired brain can come up with it. So, for now I will spout it was 'cute and I want you to update soon!'. don't worry if you really want it I'll look for something in the future.

Ah, I hope your having fun in Japan! I went in June and now all I want to do is go back!

any chance you could e-mail me when you update? 'cause I don't have an account on aff.net and don't really know how it works...
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From ANON - calpis on July 05, 2005
Seriously, I'm more of a sasunaru fan, but your fic has made me change my mind. I love your take on Naruto, how outgoing he is, how refreshingly not stupid he is. I've seen a lot of fanfics that have made him utterly dumb in the not so dense way, completely overriding the fact that he does have his own type of smarts. I'm not saying they're wrong on his take, but it's just so awesome to see this kind of take on him. Because as dense and oblivious as he is, he does know how to pick up on things [take that episode with Inari]. Thing is, I can't choose a favorite chapter because all of them rank high on my 'must read' list. Especially since most of the time, reading AU's, I've seen a lot of people break the OOC rule and ruin it. But even though you do push at it, you don't ruin it. You make it work for the story, the setting, and that's something I give you major props for. And by the way, I loved the little mention of Sasuke's past with the pendant; the little in depth part where it explained how he used to be before Naruto came in like a whirlwind and began to change him. Your fic is very well-written and it easily draws me into the story, the way the characters work, and makes me notice the little things. Like pieces of humor with Chibi Doujinshi Gaara. I honestly cannot find a fault in your story. If I searched for little grammatical errors or misspellings, I might find them, but those are things you can change and fix so I don't judge a story based on them. [unless it's like totally blatant] Seriously, I can't wait till August for another chapter. I'm literally checking everyday 'just in case'.
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From ANON - Mint on June 30, 2005
Well, this is the first time I've ever commented here and I'm so glad I found it too [celebrates] ^^!
Anyways, firstly I hope you enjoy your trip and come back soon with lots of new chapters and such -- I absolutely enjoy your writing and this wonderful Naru/Sas-ness XD!
Man, you sure are lucky to go to Japan, I can't go back [or even leave the country], because of summer school. Boo. Any specifically wonderful places you're going to visit. Shibuya, babeh, lucky lucky lucky bum.

Now, to the fic I somehow really loved the comments the horses made X3;; Your humor rocks my boat, heh, and the insight you provide for each character is amazingly well thought out and rounded.

Wooo -- I suck at being a critique, and you rock.
Come back safe and update soon, please and thank you!

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From ANON - Caciquegoddess on June 23, 2005
Yay!!!! i love NaruSasu! yay! Sasuke gets love from Naruto! what's with Naruto's weirdness? have a great trip! i wish i could go to Japan! Cant wait till you get back!
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From ANON - Yaoi Fan on June 22, 2005
Author�s note: ...I am SO mean to that boy...but it�s his fault for being such a Author�s note: ...I am SO mean to that boy...but it�s his fault for being such a self-centered bastard in the anime. By the way, if anyone wants me to email them to give a heads up when I�m updating, feel free to either say so in the reviews or email me.

that your note from chapter 10.sasuke has reason's to be like that.he would to be like him if one of my older brother went crazy killed everyone but me and left me to get stronger then kill him.but anyway's the story is really nice i am on the last chapter.and it look's good so far keep up the good work
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From ANON - samiam on June 22, 2005
After seaching for a really good Naruto/Sasuke story (which doesn't happen all too often--at least not any well-written ones) I was pleasantly surprised to happen upon yours. It's funny, amusing, endearing, hot, and would you know? It actually has a plot! Imagine that! I know I'm late to jump on the "Chasing Naruto" band wagon, but there's just something about your story that draws people to it. Even the smut-hounds out there love this story (even though, as of yet, there hasn't even been one kiss). I'm saddened, though, to learn that you won't be updating until you come back from Japan. So, on that issue, I hope you have a wonderful time.

Now back to your story. I'm really excited to see where you'll be taking the relationship between Naruto and Sasuke. (By the way, out of curiosity, do you already know how long this story will be, or are you writing as it comes to you?) But, while I do find this story extremely entertaining and very nicely written, there is just something that confuses me. I just don't understand Naruto. He's unsure of how Sasuke feels about him, so when the opportunity arose for something to happen between them, he pulled away. Fine. I can get that. But what really bugs me is in the last chapter (14) when Gaara basically tries jumping Naruto, and Naruto was letting him. Sure he was resisting, but he wasn't really putting up much of a fight. And if Sasuke hadn't barrelled in, who knows how far it would have gone?

So even if Naruto had decided to not pursue anything with Sasuke, he still has feelings for him, and he's still aware that Sasuke has (some sort of) feelings for him. Then why was it OK for him to (almost) give in to Gaara, but push Sasuke away? His resolve around Sasuke is firm (but slowly cracking), but when Gaara steps in, he was willing to make out with him. Honestly, was he thinking about how Gaara felt about him at that moment? I don't suppose he was.

I understand that things between Naruto and Sasuke are a little bit complicated. Naruto, if he ever lets himself give in, doesn't want to be some cheap, meaningless fling to Sasuke. That's understandable. But still! I can't help siding with Sasuke in his frustration. I just wish something would happen to allow Naruto to open up to Sasuke. Of course, getting Sasuke to admit how he feels about the blonde is going to be equally as hard. Instead of Sasuke always getting pissy when Neji or Gaara show up and Naruto acting unconcerned, I wish Naruto would start actively pursuing Sasuke--instead of just teasing. It's so easy to see that Naruto has a huge effect on the Uchiha, but what about Naruto? I mean, look at the reason he was sick! He won't even allow himself to indulge...he has to push his desires away. Why is that? Can't he just loosen his guard a little bit and see where it leads?

But I'm ranting. I don't mean to sound like I'm flaming your story. In fact, the reason why I'm writing is because I like your story so much. Any story that can get me this fired up, I'd continue reading. I'm anxious to see how you further develop the burgeoning relationship between those two (instead of just throwing them in bed together). So, yes, I love this story. I don't mean to seem like I'm coming down hard on it, but I had to vent a little. Hope you don't mind. Write away while you're in Japan, and I'll be looking forward to reading more fabulous chapters.

(Also, I like how there's competition to stop Sasuke from getting Naruto. But will there be anything to stop Naruto from getting Sasuke (other than his own conflicting emotions)? Like say, a psycho family member or a jealous ex-lover? Will you be writing more on Sasuke's background?)

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From ANON - blisblop on June 20, 2005
Well I for one am relieved,however I must say I am a little sad on Gaara ,heck ,and Nejis' behalf,they make a good rebound pairing!Gaara is sooo intense.Sigh.Naruto has all the luck in these fan fics,wait there are some hard core S/M ones where he gets dissected so maybe not so lucky all the time.All this tension, jeez.Anyway Naruto is old enough to know that you are never going to be in love with most of the people you have a physical reaction to,you can hate someone and there can still be a buzz.There would be alot more happiness if people knew and believed that.
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From ANON - KuraResa on June 19, 2005
Chapter 14 was just really awesome. You can really write good fics. You're very creative, descriptive and you don't rush your work. I really enjoy reading it. Keep up the great work and I can't wait to see how things turn out in the next chapter. Enjoy your trip and be safe. ^_^
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From ANON - ladygizarme on June 13, 2005
waaaaaaaaahhhhh!!!!!! i finally had time to read it!! i had like 4 chapters to catch up!!! omgoddess, you know i love ya right? you get me crackin' up girl! but the sexual tension is perfect, too, as always ^__~ but now there's still like 6 weeks til you're back and it suuuuuuuxxxx!! i need mooooooooooooore!! motto motto onegai!! ahh, well i know you're busy, what with having triple the fun to make up for me and houseki not bein there lol, so i guess i'll be patient.... heheh... damn, even though i'm glad this is narusasu, i feel kinda bad for gaara and neji lol.... oh what a tangled web you weave... anyway, yknow i'd write more, and praise and worship you for pages lol, but i'm tired and i'll get sicker prob if i don't go now... huh.. funny, me and naru are sick at the same time it seems..... anyway, can't wait til you're back! *glomps*
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