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By : mehmeh

From ANON - Hitomi No Ryu on January 21, 2005
Manipulation on BOTH ends of the leash?! *drumming fingers against each other* Eeeeexcellent. UPDATE SOON!!
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From ANON - Mavi on January 21, 2005
kyaagh, I can't help leaking a few emotions just by reading this. The first chapter almost made me cry. I was at the edge of my seat on the second and now, I'm shuddering at the third. It's as though I can hear the Kyuubi's voice itself. You write great, well, at elast this fic is great. Keep it up, I'm sure I'll be in anticipation of the next chapters.
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From ANON - fuyuki on January 21, 2005
this is sooooooooooooooooo... yummy... i cant wait for the next part!!!
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From ANON - Vampia Zee on January 21, 2005
w00t! More yay!

Sadly I actually yelled out 'w00t' when I saw you had anouther chapter up :P I love you :3

Anyways, this chapter was very interesting. I like the thought of Kyuubi getting Naruto to do his evil bidding. (that's sorta what it sounds like...after what he said a Demon did with it's shapshifting powers.) I also can't wait to see what Naruto will do to Sasuke. (like you know...strut around him showing leg *cackles*) Ah, ignore me! I just...really can't wait to see all the smutty things that are going to happen. *eyes twinkle* And I was wondering...is this going to stay SasuNaru or is it going to venture into narusasu as well? (you know the whole seme uke thing) Just curious! *big Naru-uke supporter*

*is shot in the face repeatedly*
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From ANON - DarkSetoKaiba on January 21, 2005
Ooh.. Now *THIS* is more like it. The psycho-analysis I meant on both of them. It seems like, you're delving more into those untouched personalities that you see in the series/manga... But, at a different angle. Oh, I don't have my fictions up on here.. I get um.. embarassed, when others read my works no a-days.. they're not what they used to be when I first started off. some of my earlier fics are on fanfiction.net under my account: DarkHybridChild. But the majority of my fics are mostly on the Hybrid-Child user fourms.. (Hybrid-Child is an IRC network.. but it has much more then that). So, it's only those people who mainly read them.. I *do* however, email some of my works out to people.. Lately, my fics aren't exactly what they used to be, since I had writers block for the longest time, and after I got out of it, my whole writing style changed. So i'm currently trying to get back into my normal writing-self.

Seira: You *really* love to talk, don't you?

*glares* Who asked you? you're always on the fone with Laika-kun anyways.

Seira: ...

Anyways, This chapter was good. I like it. And the Kyuubi's analysis on human emotions and stuff, was really great. If i was in my right mind (before I had my writers block) I could've written something like that.... It seems my little sister has rubbed off on me (in humor-wise and cheesy-parody fictions, that is) Plus, the ones that I *would've* put here in AFF.net.. well, I don't think they were effecient enough to be put on here.. >.
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From TenshiKaitou on January 21, 2005
eh heh heh, talking about the word 'ride'...

TenshiKaitou
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From ANON - Ruby Lee on January 21, 2005
Naaah, I love your interpretation of Kyuubi! This is a sexy fanfic, and it'll be even moreso if it doens't end happily. ^_^

--Ruby
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From ANON - Scottishfae on January 21, 2005
Omg that was another excellent, excellent chapter. I absolutely adored Kyuubi, which is kinda strange saying, but I think you did an awesome job with his character and the development of him. I think the set up you've done for him is very clever and gives him a background that is absent from the real Naruto saga. I really can't wait for the next chapter! I'm looking for more appearances from Kyuubi! Again, great job, keep up the brilliant work!

Until Next Time...

Sfae
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From ANON - Scottishfae on January 21, 2005
Absolutely wonderful! I love how you're disecting Sasuke into this perfectly pyschotic creature. You're the Dostoyevsky of Naruto Fanfiction! It's wonderful, really. I just can't put into words how brilliant all this is. I'm a bit surprised, however, that Kakashi didn't notice anything about Naruto's "change" or that he didn't say anything. It seems, to me at least, that Kakashi has the excellent ability to read everyone but then again, it probably fits better to not have him notice or say anything. Well I'll look forward to the next chapter, again.. Wonderful job.

Until Next Time...

Sfae
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From ANON - tenohikari on January 20, 2005
Another awesome chapter - I love Kyubi! Yes, Naru-chan, you're eye candy, now go and give Sasuke cavities! mwaha! ^_^;; I'm also starting to believe NaruSasu just HAS to be a cannon couple for the fandom. I mean, they kiss in like episode 3! Yeah Sasuke needs to revive his clan, but isn't that why the writers gave Naruto the 'sexy no jitsu'? Or if Kyubi does manage to merge with Naruto (as the fic suggests they are) - he would be able to switch genders eventually??? Okay, maybe I just want to see what kind of insanely powerful offspring those two can produce.
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From ANON - ayonoi on January 20, 2005
Sorry I didn't review previously but I must admit to you I have been waiting with baited breath for chapter three and it didn't disappoint me. It was so good the way you portrayed the Kyuubi. It does play very well with the ancient belief of fox spirits being seducers and tricksters. My gleeful thought was "Sasuke won't know what hit him" and it totally made me insanely happy. While our Naruto is a little innocent and doesn't get the whole concept of what Kyuubi is telling him, I think he might actually follow some of the advice. Hehehe, I am evil, I know but I loved the thought of Kyuubi and Naruto getting the upper hand in this whole thing...as I said, poor Sasuke kun won't know what really happened.

You know that last stanza from The Police's "Wrapped around your Finger?" :
"Devil and the deep blue sea behind me
Vanish in the air you'll never find me
I will turn your face to alabaster
Then you'll find your servant is your master"

I can only think of it reading your fic. Excellent! Please continue!
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From ANON - Saki on January 20, 2005
*nods* I do understand your point about that. I used to do that a long time ago to calm my nerves and take stress out. but I also understand about the story reflecting yourself and when I read other stories like yours, they also reveal a persons self or personality in my opinion about how they feel or who they are..As far as the chapters has been, I've been really enjoying the story, and I can wait for the plans to unravel by Kyuubi sama but also Naruto I hope is going to get alittle better when he wants to be.. (btw,lol...you're right about Straight guys and yaoi..^^;; and I know what you mean about having to do that.)
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From ANON - KyuTails on January 20, 2005
This is the first time I'd ever be using this word to describe a Naruto fic, but, I think this was jut brilliant.

It's so smart, and well thought out. One thing about Naruto and Sasuke that many people tend to overlook is the fact the he really does need a girl to bring back the Uchiha Clan right? I'm glad you weaved that into the story so expertly.
Plus, SAsuke is extremely evil...in this fic. Although why is still blurry to me, I still anticipate the answer.

Great Job. Keep it Up.
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From ANON - Ryuukotsusei (but too lazy to log in) on January 19, 2005
I loveeeeeeee this fic! I was looking for it under the title "Mistakes" and I couldn't find it. Then I noticed it under a new name! This is so very good! Keep it up (and keep dodging that rotten veggies!) O.o

Keep it up!

I'd love to see Sasuke take advantage of Naruto!
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From ANON - Emily on January 19, 2005
YAY! You are going to make this a multi chapter story! I love you! ANd I can't believe you made it all up spur of the moment! That is real talent in it's self. I am thoroughly impressed! This chapter was nicely written just as the first was.

It was really great insight to get into Sasuke's head and know his postion on the whole matter. Those are the kinds of things that capture a readers attention and make the story interesting. By switching into Sasuke's POV, you are giving the reader insight as to what he is thinking and how he feels. Where as when you switch to maybe more of NAruto's thoughts, you are giving that same insight about him. It is a great way to keep people interested and not become bored with the story.

Oh, GOd, I'm so sorry! I just analyzed your writing like I had to for my English final today! Forgive me! That's almost exactly how we had to do it and I am stuck on that train of thought...along with Dimensional analysis, Planck's theory, Dalton's theory, Whether the Supreme Ct. can rule a law unconstitutional or not and other junk. FORGIVE ME!

But really, your story is excellent and very nice written I can't wait to read more so please update as soon as possible though I know you can't rush great things!

Adios!
EMILY!

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