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By : mehmeh

From ANON - Vampia Zee on January 25, 2005
Eek! Anouther wonderful chapter! I hope it wasn't me who made your head explode with wheather this is SasuNaru or narusasu. SO SORRY! ;__; Forgive-ness?

This chapter was muchly hot. Anybody could fall for a dirty Naruto. *sits there re-imagining Naruto licking Sasuke's hand* hehehehe *melts* But was that really Naruto? I mean the whole leer and stuff...had me thinking Kyuubi o__o I will find out inthe next chapter!

*duck tapes self to your back untill then*
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From ANON - Ezj on January 25, 2005
MMMmmm this fic definetly good written =^_^=
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From ANON - kayoko on January 24, 2005
that was so cool *starry wobbly eyed*

thank you!
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From ANON - ayonoi on January 24, 2005
Wow, excellent chapter. It seems Kyuubi and Naruto have started their plan. I thank you for the "blowing up" scene, I think sometimes we need to see something like that. Naruto is so sweet to everyone that he swallows all the hurt and just goes on. But he sometimes deserves to let the steam out and the scene was good. And wow, that scene was amazonig, SM at its best. You don't need tie someone down or to call him slave, just the right show of power play is good. And Naruto played his submissive part so well, I congratulate you on the whole set up, it was amazing and you can see how things will start to unravel. Will Naruto try to flirt with others to make Sasuke more insanely jealous. I know the evil in me wants to see a Kakahi seduction scene...hehehe, that would be fun. Regardless of that, your fic is awesome and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Ohh, yes, "Wrapped Around Your Finger" is a perfect song for this fic. You can find the rest of the lyrics here: http://stingetc.com/lyrics/ go to W and click on the title.

*hugs*
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From ANON - Scottishfae on January 24, 2005
Yay great chapter! I loved it! Oh and by the way, the two reviews from last time was one for each chapter. I felt such a great piece deserved to be reviewed after each update, or rather, for each update. I assume that when you have Naruto debating with himself while Sasuke is pinning him up that he is talking to the Kyuubi? Quite clever. I love how Naruto finally told team 7 what's what. That whole group pisses me off sometimes with their behavior. Especially Kakashi. Like I know, he's a pretty hot and awesome character but he gets on my nerves because he so plays the favorites and yeah, I hate that. I think that is what makes Naruto a likeable character, because everyone devaules him because he is a nobody really. I mean, everyone basically except like Sakura and Lee are from a ninja family/clan that has something special about them (and maybe Tenten, we never really find out about her). But Tenten is awesome with her weapons and gets credit for that and Lee for his determination and such and Sakura for her brains but Naruto gets nothing. I would so love me some Naruto because I feel that when he grows up he would so totally be hot. And that just goes to show you how much of a loser I am. But again, great chapter. I loved it. The insight into Sasuke's mind is awesome and is really beginning to build him as a character more than even the series is doing. Well, that's all for now, I can't wait until the next chapter!

Until Next Time...

Sfae

P.S. Oh, just in case someone hasn't told you, but I bet they have, the NaruSaru or SaruNaru (which I only found out recently) shows who is seme and who is uke (dominant and submissive), so the person who is listed first would be the seme/dominant figure and the one penetrating, and the second one is the submissive person who would be penetrated. If it's NaruSaruNaru (or change the names around some), it means the seme and uke changes within the fic and so each character plays both seme and uke at some point during the fic. Yeah, someone had to explain that one to me. (To tell you the truth, I just love the words Seme and Uke. I'm going to name my dogs--when I get them--Uke and Seme, just for kicks. I actually have this awesome picture on my desktop that is made to look like an ad for cologne that says Seme "dominance" and has a picture of Urahara from Bleach on it lookin' sexy and edible! Oh yeah! It's great.) Bye again!
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From ANON - tenohikari on January 24, 2005
::drools:: looks like Kyubi's plan is working. Finally, Naruto gets to tell Sakura off and makes Sasuke jealous and horny.
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From ANON - Emily on January 23, 2005
Glad to know you enjoy my reviews. I try to make them fair and complementing since you go through such trouble to write an excellent story for others to enjoy. Really, I think it is important for people to tell others when they enjoy a story. Hence the reason I review.

This chapter was so well done. Again, I didn't catch maistakes, maybe for a few but they were very small. So small, I do not recall them. Once again, you left great details that really helped the reader get into the story and understand how it must have felt for both Naruto and Kyuubi. Now we know some what of how that silly fox works and how he likes to manipulate Naruto, and help him.

I think it was interesting how Kyuubi said he would feel everythign as if it were real, then Naruto awoke with that hard on and the scratch marks. Kinda creepy, but insightful. But that also means that he can hurt Naruto! But we all know he wouldn't because he needs him. Hopefully.

This is getting so interesting. Now Naruto is supposed to act like how Sasuke wants him to and at the same time they are trying to win over. It is so simple yet so ingenious! Something intersting is bound to come out of it!

I really hope you will update soon and I look foreward to reading all those wonderful words that you put your time and effort into, making them so good. It is a daily pleasure reading your work!

Emily
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From DeviousLilDevil on January 23, 2005
wow. this is so good. oh i cant wait to read the next chapter. i love the way you've characterized your kyuubi. hopefullly the fox will be giving naruto s'more *coughs* "advice" on how to handle sasuke, that sexy bastard. keep up the good work!

Devious Lil Devil
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From ANON - hogo-chan on January 22, 2005
Gah! i love this chapter! thank god for Kyuubi. Now that mean old sasuke will get whats coming to him! *grumble grumble bastard grumble* thanks for updating so fast! keep up the good work!
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From ANON - dragonkitty on January 21, 2005
WOW, now this is getting more interesting. Both Naruto and Sasuke are going to try to control eachother.
The spin that you put on the Kyubi is very interesting too. I like that he is trying to convince Naruto that he can control Sasuke.
Even though I still don't think that he gets it very much. o.o hehe Oh Sasuke, what are you going to do now. XD I can't wait
to see this updated!!!
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From ANON - Rhenoah on January 21, 2005
First off let me congratulate you for your fic. It's really quite good, and one of my new regulars, I await for what unfolds patiently. Moveing on I must say that I wouldn't call what you did with Kyuubi's character so much liberty but creative. I love it when authors put their own spins on things in the Cannon. When writing about them in the future especially it's very interesting to see what people come up with to fill the plot holes. I like your Kyuubi and I definitely like your characters. As far as Ooc goes, I think it's a given that the characters are ooc, i mean when in the cannon do you think Sasuke's going to even consider sleeping with Naruto or vice versa? Either way I think your potrayal of them isn't too far from what they'd probably be doing in those kinds of situations. I myself have written a fic where Gaara's nice, and Sasuke's happy, hey it's your story so you call the shots right. Anyway this has become long and preachy but I just had to shout out and give you the power for writing very powerfully, and definitely very well. Ciao.
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From ANON - kenshinjunkie03 (too lazy to log in) on January 21, 2005
this story is too good and it's getting better. please update soon. plus, i know what kyuubi means. he's just saying get sasuke addicted to naruto so when he realize whats going on, it'd be too late. by that point, naruto would have sasuke wrapped around his finger and will be able to do whatever he wants with him. heck, naruto can make sasuke love him that way.

p.s. very good story;)
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From ANON - rainbird on January 21, 2005
whoa...who knew these stories could be so much fun...I need to know what Naruto does to Sasuke! Very good job too....keep it coming!! ^__^
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From ANON - hyperactivator on January 21, 2005
Yes!

You do angst right. ^_^
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From ANON - Ezj on January 21, 2005
^_^ good then I can count on reading some
funny 'eviiil' stuff for awhile ^-^
Continue on writing like this^^
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