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By : mehmeh

From ANON - Rika on March 31, 2005
I absolutely love you!
Well, not really...
But I am now your fan, forever more!!
You are number one in my list.

Like you, I absolutely adore Kyuubi.
How can I not...
Anyway..
YOU RULE!!!!!! GO YOU AND PWP STORY
GO YOOOOUUUUU!!!!
*hands you a Kyuubi plushie*
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From ANON - MultifacetedTune on March 31, 2005
Yay!!! You updated!!! Sorry that I didn't review for the last chapter -- my life has been so hectic lately that I never have any...ummm...."down time" anymore, if you know what I mean........... (heh......actually, my Mom has been overbearing that last few weeks....erm, months, lol.....and so I have to be careful. She hates it when I do nothing but read on my laptop......therefore, I do "homework". Damn that homework, ne? Just soooo troublesome........) ^___~ Oh, here, I got you something: *gives you a bag of "sugar free, low fat" chocolates* ........I hate those things, sooooooo......... *insert mischevious wink here* *has secretly replaced all of the "fake" (lol) chocolates with real ones* There ya' go!!! Mind games!!! What do you need to feel guily for? .....after all, they -are- low fat......... ^___~ Thanks so much for updating, once again. I can't wait to find out where you take this......as I of right now, I'm completely stumped!!! ^___^ Ja ne!!!

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(P.S. As for my name, I'll try to make a long story short: I have a friend who is.......well, kinda' schitzo (or however you spell it.....heh.....) ^^ She claims to be around 7 or 8 different "people", but I've only ever seem 1......then again, this is the same friend who seriously wants to take over the world, soooo......... ^___^ Back to the point (if there ever really was one........gods, do I need coffee..........) As a joke, I came up with several different "personas" of my own......not seperate people, mind you, but different specific aspects of my existing personality......am I making any sense? Okay, didn't think so....... *shrugs* Anyway, they all have different "colors", etc., but no names, and when I'm sugar high, on a lot of caffine, sleep deprived, etc. (which, surprisingly, doesn't happen as often as many think it would), I tend to lean more towards a certain fragment of my persona, rather than being in "balance". Got it? ...hope so....... now then, as for my name: I do have one main persona who controls the others; she is essentially perfect and everything I am not...... *sigh* In short, as an author, I call her my "muse", and she is the only one with a name: Melody. Therefore....... (just watch, this will suddenly all fall into place.....I think......I hope.............) ^^ ........I have many parts of my personality, or many "facets", and my muse's name is Melody, or a "tune", so there you have it: "MultifacetedTune"!!! *sigh* Thank god that's over........hope it made sense............. oh, and sorry that this was actually longer than the review....... I didn't mean to do that, it's just the way it turned out, so.......yeah. ^^ Let me know if you're completely confused, and I'll try to help......as for right now, though, I'm going to go get some caffine into my system before I make an ever bigger idiot of myself........... ^___~ Ja ne!!!)
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From ANON - Ghonchi on March 31, 2005
Yay! another chapter! *huggies*
that thing in the middel of the story, something about 'a mother is not like this' and that big horse cock thing reminded me 'bout
a dream I had. ^_^;; well, let say my dreams are pretty screwed up (like Rock Lee and me in a mad house, Lee gets crused under
a falling bathtub with a wet Neji in. and something about submarines and barbie dolls).
And I say like this, Me want lemon! now! -.- gimme lemon!
anygate, It's a good chapter, even tho' the lack of smut.

ever read Gantz? I have been reading it straigth of in two days now. there is about 192 chapters and I read 100 of them yesterday
and remining today #_#, man, I gotta get a life!

C'ya! n_n

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From ANON - Gitona on March 31, 2005
Yay.Update!That was an..odd one. XD Loved it.
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From ANON - macy on March 31, 2005
hwaaaaa!!! sooo good!!!! I was literally running out of the house this morning, coz I couldn't stop reading the fic even though I knew that my class was starting in less than an hour and I was not even dressed up for school yet! Sooo...I rushed back home after school to continue reading this ^^ Hehehehe... I love the Kyuubi/Naruto talks...they're so hot, hehehe ^^;; This fic is developing really well!! Very interesting movement, can't wait what happens next now that Naruto's letting kyuubi play the game. I get all excited when Naruto's in seduction mode, it's suuuper hot. XD
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From ANON - kai on March 30, 2005
yay, an update!!! i love the ending!! so funny, i could just imagine sasuke's face when naruto said that!!! update soon!!
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From ANON - gothic_marshmallow on March 30, 2005
hahaha i loved the "i want to fuck you in front of old geezer's shrine"! XD hilarious. dude, the sex chapter is next, yeah?? :D

but seriously, you're a very good writer. i love the way you write descriptions and the story's great. dialogue's yummy too. XD so keep it up i love this story. wooooo...
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From ANON - jadetiger on March 30, 2005
wow evil demon....

becoming evil naruto.
this is go good!!
and ya i found a stedy suply of naruto anime so i'm good now.
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From ANON - Editor\'s Crawl on March 30, 2005
Man...this is just a sadistic story (I love it)....I pity Naruto.....that boy has been though too much....

However, you say you don't have a plot for this....I think your lying. (hehehehe)

From what I can tell the point of the story is this: Not everyone gets a happy ending or purpose in their lives, even though they deserve it. Naruto fights to protect an illusion that keeps him from falling into the darkness. But Kyuubi keeps strips those illusions away, leaving Naruto with nothing but darkness to depend on. Sasuke and the others are unknowing helping the demon in this task.

From what I can tell, if Naruto is able to 'bring low Sasuke' he's his destroying the one thing that keeps him from becoming an evil that the world has never seen. The leash that keeps him from becoming evil is simply this- Naruto's ideals. But sadly, Naruto probably won't realized this until its too late....

But please.... I am begging you not to forget the "Hinata factor". Out off all the people in that damn village, Hinata was the only one who actually looked up to Naruto and respected him. (Yet, Naruto was so dense, he didn't see this...hehehe)

Is Hinata going to be in this story? Her presense could somehow be something that keeps Naruto from the darkness. Naruto wouldn't have to fallen in love with Hinata to accoplish this. (Remember there are different types of connections - parental, companionship, being....) Or it can simply be the realization that someone out there actually gives a damn about how he truly is.

However, if Kyuubi sees Hinata as a threat .....good by sweet, shy girl.

So basically, your plot is this....Kyuubi wants to live through Naruto (Maybe his trying to merge Naruto and his soul into one being...*hint,hint*) Naruto struggle to hold his ideals together (his ideals preventing that 'merging'), but slowly those dreams/ideals are stripping away. And everyone else is mainly helping the Kyuubi by slowly destorying Naruto's faith and trust in them. So what Naruto needs is something to trigger the alarm bells...*cough* Gaara *cough*...that will warn him of the path of darkness and evil he is unknowning falling into, thus completly locking away the demon being inside Naruto, but able to keep Kyuubi's power.

Or you could really screw with us and make Naruto fall into darkness and become a evil that even scares Kyuubi....

I don't buy that crap about him not knowing the notion of love and calling it useless. He is a living being...therefore capuble of emotion...besides the greatest downfall of any bad boy is not knowing the power and strengh of love....
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From ANON - celticfx on March 30, 2005
wow, that chapter was really intense! i loved it! you also gave a really nice description of kyuubi. please update soon and i'd really like to see some more sasunaru in the future (but don't worry, i won't throw anything at you) ^_~
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From ANON - evil on March 30, 2005
*Grins* Well, if he won't stay an innocent virgin any longer, then I say, GET THE CAMERA'S OUT! WE NEED SOME PICTURES!! *Sniggers* Well, keep up the fic, damnit!! It's damn good... And at the end, when Naruto tells Sasuke, "I want to fuck you, even in front of the old geezer's grave", that was hilarious!! Hahah, now Sasuke's gonna have that line stuck in his head... *Waggles eyebrows* Good for him though... ^___^ Update soon, ne? ^^
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From ANON - Ruby Lee on March 30, 2005
o_o
eep! That's a bad Naruto. A very bad Naruto. I cry.

And am, of course, eager to see what happens next. While part of me cheers for Kyuubi to have his wicked way, the other part of me is yelling for Naruto to come to his freaking senses. I'm quite looking forward to the next part. =]

--Ruby
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From ANON - Ryuukotsusei on March 30, 2005
RAHHHHHHHHHHH! You just did it! This fic has
become my favorite Naruto story! At first it was
"I Bleed Black" but by making Naruto evil you
have done even better! Although, I had never
seen an evil Naruto before, so I was working on
a fic where Kyuubi give him a simular speech
about the village and Naruto finally gives the fox
full control, then he reaks havock upon everyne!
Now I'm worried that people will think I've copied
from you! Oh well.

Anyway, your talent as a writer truly makes you
shine! And don't worry, I love Naruto's talks with
Kyuubi just as much as I do smutt - I can wait
for the lemon! And it seems that niether Sasuke
nor Naruto will win this battle for control, but our
beloved FOX! *Starts to cheer*

Oh the violence and drama in this chapter! And
the last thing Naruto said to Sasuke, "I want to
fuck you..." It was the perfect way to end this
chapter! And how will Sasuke react to it now?!
And wow, you got this chapter out so fast! Nice
job! God, I luv you.

Kyuubi: -_- Ignore that fool

Welp, gotta run! Update soon!
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From ANON - Ayako on March 30, 2005
I was ashamed of myself too! ;~; (Although I found it funny how you updated a few hours later XD)

>:D Evil Naruto... It really makes me wonder how this story will end, considering you have a plot now despite you calling it a PWP. XD Will we see a sparkling, happy Naruto or a wicked, cruel Naruto? So far, I see the second one being plausible. I can just imagine Naruto on a throne with girls or boys chained up aklongside it. XD
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From ANON - kayoko on March 30, 2005
*laughs*
*worships the great author in return*

I'm still waiting on that kakanaru side-fic that you started. *poke*

love the new line you added in the beginning about the house plant *laughs* oh..you also took out the big words. cools. I like this version a lot better than the original.

the ending is just..*laughs* so much better than the original. ^_^

thank you!

p.s. i just remember that you don't advertise your fic on lj communities. *poke* you should!
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