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Reviews for Reflections (Abandoned WIP)

By : Tsukineko9

From ANON - kenshinjunkie03 (too lazy to log in) on April 27, 2005
hey! welcome back! thought you went and died on me...but you came back with this story. when i saw it was updated, my mouth hung open for a little bit. i was so happy and surprised to see you back. yay!

as for the story, it's as good as it was back then. it's sad what happened to sasuke and naruto, but i'm still rooting for them. i hope next chapter tell us if they find sasuke so we can all live happily ever after...or something like that^_^V
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From ANON - Ishi Tatsu on April 27, 2005
Fare warning I cannot spell.
I love the flow that you have going. It is nice to see what each side is thinking as they grow closer. I'm not sure why you have the nine tail's actual words, unless it is to express tha growing control/influence he has. I like how the only reson Sakura is able to get close is because he does not trust her. Building back lost grownd like this os going to be hard, but she has a good approch. I wonder if the rokie nine will brake Naruto out once they hear about the exicution orders.
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From ANON - Houseki on April 27, 2005
Man, how long has it been since you up'd last? I started from the very beginning just to refresh my memory on everything *has a really bad memory anyways:p* but everything came back quick enough and i was so engrossed by re-reading it i continued all the way through to the new up'd. my eyes are very unhappy with me ^__~ and it's no wonder w/ ch 5 being 31 pages long! your page lengths rival w/ ladygizarme's!!! *find her on ff and mm, soon to be appearing on aff*

anyway, wow...just wow. and poor naru! they totally have him locked up like the animal they think he is which is so unfair. sakura who finally came to terms over the way she treated him in the past is great and i can see you're gonna take a long time gettin him to trust her again.

when you had sakura say 'she'd take care of it' about the girl ninja when she looked at the horse, i was really hopin you were going to drag her not put her on the horse...would've served her right. that was a noble thing sasuke did savin her life, but heart-renching knowing he would fall. And all the stabs to the stomach! He's no Naru, he can't heal like him...I wasn't going to be surprised if this was the last chap, but thankfully it's not :D

gotta love how you always have 'my lord bastard' pissin his pants everytime Naru gets pissed off and taps into Kyuubi. i think the way he is portrayed more people hate him than kyuubi or orochimaru.

i'm very happy to hear you're going to dedicate your time to finishing this fic up first before you move on to your others. how many more chaps do you think are left to Reflections? Hopefully quite a few more! You're writing abilities are spectacular and you've got a great imagination. major kudos! get that next chap up soon so i don't die of boredom!

~Houseki
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From ANON - vampchic on April 27, 2005
arrgh!!! i wish that you would just kill off that stupid noble son of a $%#!!!!!!
naruto doesnt deserve that kind of treatment! sakura should just set him free so he could search for sasuke for himself.
and sasuke cant be dead!!! he cant!! please let them find him so they could take him back to naruto!! naruto needs him!!
waaaa!!!! this story really is breaking my heart! i sooo need to find out what happens next. will the stupid nobles realize what they are doing to naruto??
will they let him go?? are they going to still demand his death?? nooo!! i dont want to know that last one! i want i happy story!! a happy ending!!
you have me so caught up in this story that you have me ranting!! that hardly ever happens with me. okay i'll let you go before i ramble on more.
update soon!!!!
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From ANON - pixiequeen on April 27, 2005
I almost cried reading chapter 5, its so horrible the way they are treating Naruto, they have no right at all. And poor Shika being burned for wanting to help. And I really hope that Sasuke is still holding on to life somehow, Naruto needs him. Stupid brat bastard should die for what he's doing to Naruto
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From ANON - akuma_river on April 26, 2005
Wow. It took me HOURS (about five) to read this fic to the ending you left it. I love the fic. Keep up the most awesome work. Coolsa.
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From ANON - Cryssy-Chan on April 26, 2005
HEY!!! Omg I like freakishly love this story! it's kinda sad about Naru-chan going insane!!! (IF YOU HURT SASUKE I WILL KILL YOU!!!)^.^ yay-ness, do update soon! this thing was 31 freggin pages? my story isn't even that long and its in like chapter7 *Cries* anyways. Plz don't let Naru-chan be hurt anymore, i already wanna cry! *cuddles Naru-chan... walks away burnt to a crisp*it was worth it^.^
~Ja Nae
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From ANON - vashta on April 26, 2005
I really like the fact that your chaps are long, but not the time between update's. When are we going to see how the search is going? Please, don't make us wait forever for them to find Sas and bring him back, and please don't let Oro have him! I can't stand to see Nar so down, you are doing a very good job, but the sooner you get rid of the little jerky prick the better, maybe let him be totally humiliated first though!
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From ANON - addisonjade on April 26, 2005
Woooah. Um, just give me a sec to properly digest that... wooooah. Heh, I'll be a little more explicit now. I read the whole thing in one go... (both a good idea and a bad idea. Bad cause I was totally supposed to be working, and good cause it's soooo good I couldn't stop...) and wow. Seriously, I'm really really really liking this story.

I like how you've structured it so far, it starts out in Konoha, with the festival and how badly everyone treats Naruto, and progresses to the mission. And now.. man, shit has totally hit the fan. I enjoy it cause it seems so very realistic. It seems so likely that the canon could turn into something like this, you have all sorts of elements that really make it like this could actually happen. I particularly like the interaction between Sasuke and Naruto, they are really such a good pair.. specially for each other. Not mushy, and yet they feel so strongly for one another. You seriously have me believing what you're writing, I'm very impressed.

This last chapter has completley thrown me for a loop. Definitely did not expect that to happen.. As you might expect, I am completely on edge with that cliffhanger, I kept watching the scroll bar and hoping it wouldn't reach the end before I found out more.. Specially since everythings so uncertain now. Wow.

Heh, sorry if this review isn't quite flowing all that well, I'm still totally thrown by this last chapter. Heh, very good, but obviously anticipation is now there for the next chapter. Don't let that make you think I want to rush you. I would never be rude enough to demand you hurry up, cause I know real life often interferes with writing. I just hope you'll get all 31 reviews sooner than later.. heh. Anyway, just wanted to drop a line and say really good story here.. even if it did take like 300 words to say it..
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From ANON - Yami-Hikari on April 26, 2005
Well, it's hard to give constructive critisism, becasue there isn't that much to critisise. Well, I'll try.
Naruto like this is making me depressed... is the seal weakening or something?
Oh, I have one little complaint. I miss the changing over of perspectives. This keeps one perspective almost throughout the whole chapter. I miss all the different inputs on one situation.
I'm afraid that's the best I can do for now. I really love this story, and I'm glad that you've got over the writers block. It's such a bitch.
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From ANON - Baka_Tsu on April 26, 2005
DUDE. YOU FINALLY UPDATED. o_o Okay. Ive been reading your fan fic for a while now, and Im totally obsessed with it as of now. That last chapter was just plain powerful :D Just know, Ive had your story bookmarked for a while hoping for your updated cause damn... the previous chapter was such a cliffhanger x_X Even this one is xD MUST FIND OUT WHAT NARUTO WILL SAY TO SASUKE.... Soooo update soon!
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From ANON - Jeans on April 26, 2005
The emotions are written out very well, and it really affects the reader. I know this because when Naruto was angry, I wanted to scream because I felt frustrated all of the sudden, and when Sakura wanted to help Naruto, I felt really stressed for some reason, sad. Weird weird..I know =_=''..But it's the feelings are explained very well and thoroughly. The description is really great, not that confusing. Each character's personality and the change over time with them is written cool too. When Junichiro's perspective is explained though, makes you just want to slap him, >_>''. I never thought that there would be such a dislikable character but I guess there is...I want to maim Junichiro >_>. One chapter is REALLY long, but it's nice cause you separate it with the different paragraphs and there are very good transitions. The thing I've noticed the most though was the changes in perspective and how it's split up like that :D, that's really cool. The only thing that might confuse people when they read this is when the dialogue is in the same paragraph; since one chapter is long, and the paragraphs are thick, it'll look cramped.

Overall, I think this is the best story ever and that's cool that you updated :]. Good luck with the next chapter ^^ *Gives full support on writing and continuation and hopes that she's somehow helped out* Sorry if my review was really long ^^;;.

P.S. I think I made a doujin page of one part in the story ._. it was when Naruto and Sasuke were having the pillow fight ^^''.
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From ANON - Anon on April 25, 2005
Though it pain's me to even think of Naruto in that state, i'm enjoying it. What was Sasuke's reason for saving the girl and not himself I dont really see him as the self sacrificing type except maybe with those he is closest to, also would'nt he be especially determined to survive now that he had Naruto?
I have to say you are doing a wonerful job with my lord bastard I truly hate him ,and consider any character that can inspire real emotions a success and
pleasurable to read

I know that you said not to but i'll ask anyway's
please update soon
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From ANON - Anon on April 25, 2005
I have to say, this is one of the most interesting stories I've read thus far in ths fandom. I'm sure what have been needed to be said, has already been said, but I'll just add that I was surprised at how the Kyuubi is acting. I had thought that he was getting along better with Naruto, not trying to make him fall over the cliff! The way you have Sakura acting is wonderful, from the beginning of the story to know, she seems to have done a lot of growing up. I'm not quite sure if I like how you've characterized Tsunade yet, but I suppose I'll have to wait until the next chapter to find out!
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From ANON - Lyn on April 25, 2005
As Naruto is a pretty large fandom, it can often be really hard to find any fanfictions of good quality. I consider this fic to be one of those select few. Its really deep and I think you have both Naruto and Sasuke down wonderfully. Though I do diagree a little with your high expectations of reviews just 'cause 31 does seem a lot to wait for before the next chapter for those that have reviewed and are waiting on edge for the next chapter. There's no gurantee for those waiting that there will be that many people reviewing so it makes one a bit nervous. But hey, its your story.

Anyways, the big inner turmoil that Naruto is going through in this chapter is really deep and emotional. I like the fact that you spent a lot of time focusing on just one part because it allows for a lot of development of Naruto's character here. And it also just makes the reader feel really sad for him and REALLY want to know what happened to poor Sasuke (which is why this chapter is so evil because we really have no idea, on the same page as Naruto at the time really). And Sakura definently deserved the reactions she got out of him considering how long she has acted so poorly towards him and now expects it to be different when obviously Naruto has not forgotten her previous behavior towards him. I certainly hope Sasuke comes back to save Naruto's sanity from Kyuubi. I worry about those two. You certainly like to torture them a lot in this fic. XP

I really do love this fic though its a bit disapointing that you put your expectations up so high. Makes you sound a tad bit on the snobby side which is unfortunate considering how wonderful your fic is. But I really think you should just write it for yourselves and not base it on other people's reactions and opinions because you should write it if you enjoy it, not because you want to get lots of reviews. Sometimes a few meaningful reviews are worth a lot more than a lot of people forcing a review because chances are they dont' really mean what they say and are just sucking up to you in order to get the next chapter out.
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