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Reviews for Reflections (Abandoned WIP)

By : Tsukineko9

From ANON - Artemid on May 08, 2005
Well, I really don't know what to say. I enjoy this story a great deal so far. The characters are mostly believeable, though I'm a tiny bit miffed that Gaara was just a plot device (though, I can understand the reasoning, he doesn't really matter in the story lol) The Kitsune's attempts to poison Naruto's mind are very interesting. Preying on his shattered reality after building to the zenith with all the stress he'd been through recently is something it would do in a heart-beat. The suspense that's being built up by dancing around Sasuke's condition is intriguing. The ending of the latest chapter (the nobles and Tsunade's lil mini speech) is a nice touch, very good, though it seems to be missing something. I can't quite put my finger on it though, it just seems a lil short on detail. Oh, and having Ibiki there was pretty cool, since it would make sense, though no one really thinks about the nut all that much lmao. Moegi? That was....odd. And where's Lee anyway? Oh well. I enjoy this tale bunches, so please continue as you have been. I can't wait for the next chapter, I'm bursting to see what happens, esp. to that lil prick of a lordling >.>
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From ANON - xyubi on May 07, 2005
Finally ch5 up? still not 31 reviews?? add one more!!
The story is great, although I missed the change of POV between Nauto & Sasuke.
Anyway, and despite this, the chapter is just great. The character of Naruto is very well developed in this last chapter, & also Sakura's. The chapter was so catchy I couldn't stop till I read it all!!
I'm glad the noble didn't turn up much, I really hated him, he was so annoying & irritating!! (although, maybe, a little bit "not-real")
It's a little cruel making us wait for next chapter!!
I'll keep checking every day for an update!
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From ANON - Chiyu on May 06, 2005
I have to tell you that I really do love this story. At first, the constant change of viewpoint threw me, but after I got used to it, I found myself liking it because it gives me more insight into each of the characters than in fics where we really only get one side of the story. It's a good change of pace I think.

The turn the story has taken has really engaged me. I can't wait to see what happens. You guys are very good at writing things that make me want to keep reading. I don't lose interest and decide that I'll come back later and finish it or anything. It's like..."I must read this now, oh my goodness!" (Sorry, I'm a nerd^^ ) But anyway, um...I'm not sure what else to add in here^^ You have to forgive me if this was all really random; I blame sleep deprivation XD Keep up the excellent work : )
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From ANON - marita~ on May 05, 2005
I commend you on your amazing writing skills. You have such patience and self-discipline to write such long chapters, to make everything realistic as opposed to everything happening in one day and chapter, and you have a great writing ability. You write the long chapters, yet you still keep them interesting. I am in love with this story. It's one of the best I've read, and I mean that seriously. There is no doubt in my mind that the rest of the story will be as interesting as the first few chapters. I am glad I came across it. It's one of the few fics that have managed to keep my interest so strongly. So thank you for writing it! And thank you for not losing interest and letting it hang!
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From ANON - Ayasha Kitsune on May 05, 2005
Hello...I LOVE THIS FIC!!! Just as I loved Spartan Ninjas....yeah...well...I wanted to go to MSU for so long that..once I read the fic...I wanted to go even more...yeah..thanks to you.. Anyhoo. I applaude. *claps* I don't see many people who can write as well as you. Smut is your middle name when it comes to SasuNaru huh? I'm planning to write a fic but..I'm not sure how it will turn out.././ I don't think many people will read it...but there is hope..I think...^.^;
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From ANON - Ipwnzj00 on May 04, 2005
This is my first review ever, and man, I love how long you make these. You could split it into at least 3 chapters and have them all end in a cliffhanger, but I prefer it this way. T_T And Poor Naruto. He's just too lost in his self-pity to think that others might actually care for him. Even if Sasuke comes back, he might not be the same... he might still believe the things his mind made up. *shoots the Kyuubi* Bastard. >O Hopefully Naruto will come to accept Sakura, somehow? :/

Can't wait for the next chapter!!
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From ANON - Saske\'s Iris on May 03, 2005
Wow that is a turn in the story i did not see coming i feel sooo bad for Naruto(sob) treated like an animal... karma needs to take a spin and bite some f'in nobles on the ass...I'm really glad ya'll have decided to focus on this story and finish, I as a reader absolutly appreciate that you are going to finish this story, since it is friggin awesome, it is the only thing making finals week in college bareable. Really can't wait to see how you are goin to rescue saske and get him where he belongs helpin Naruto outa that damned jail cell!!!! oohh so excited i hope you update soooon!! hugs to the awesome authors!!
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From ANON - Sen on May 03, 2005
Nyao! That was...was..so mean.....I almost started crying as I read how poor Naru was being treated...ish not his fault... ;.; I almost punched my laptop in anger at the nobles but then I remembered what happened the last time I did that and stoped myself. I don;t think anyother fic has gotten my so worked up. Or even a book really. j00 better not let them kill Naru!! ;.; Or I'll eat you. >:O *hugs* keep writing! Your work is wonderful!
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From ANON - Mike on May 01, 2005
after reading chapter 5 (4-1) I can't wait to read more!!!
I miss the double point of view pattern, so I want Sasuke back already!!
Maybe it's taking to long for Naruto to realize that Sakura is her friend.. Why doesn't he ever disagree with the bitch's (jeje) thoughts? I know he's lost but...
Anyway, it was great ans so much worth reading it! I really enjoyed it!
Keep up!
Update soon (I hope this counts 2 as a review)
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From ANON - exrxr on April 30, 2005
loved the storyline. but what ever happened to that sound ninja that they tied up?? did her view on oro change completely? and if sakura knew that naruto was arguing with the fox, why didn't she threaten the fox?? hehe, like a a pushie fox and beat it to a pulp in front of naruto or something (inner sakura taking over). lol. sakura needs to try more harder and let inner sakura out for naruto to see!!
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From ANON - Me on April 30, 2005
This is mean!
Looking every now & then to see whether u had updated the story and now, after reading it I just feel extremely angry!!!
How could you leave me like this? It's just not fair. I demand the next chap now!!!
Jokes apart (although in fact that's very true), the chapter is incredibly catchy & thrilling.
The only problem is that, maybe, it turns out too long without a continuation. I mean, it's a little uneventful. But I'm sure I feel this way because I can't read any further. I'm sure that if I had read the story to the very end (which I hope u write soon) I wouldn't have felt this way about it since everyth else is excellent. It was time Sakura got some protagonism!! I like her(yours) much more than in the anime!!
Hope u 2 update soon! (don't torture me with another long wait)

Keep at your good work!!
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From ANON - Natakamani on April 29, 2005
Woohoooo! *glomps* You started writing again!!!! insofar as constructive crit... Well, I dont have all that much to offer. Youre handling Naruto's personality exceptionally well, as well as Tsunade's. My only complaint MIGHT be Sakura, just because of the way the whole "caring" thing just came out of nowhere, but that in and of itself is understandable, so I dont think it counts as a complaint. Sakura's under a lot of stress. Not only has Sasuke disappeared, and is most likely dead, the teammate she has relied on, has been saved by, and has taken for granted has effectivly lost it. Thats enough to break a lot of paradigms. In short, good job! This better count as a real review!!! *laughs* Continue!

Much luv and many cookies,
Natakamani
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From ANON - MultifacetedTune on April 28, 2005
*blink* Wow....that went from totally amazing to soooooo depressing in about 15 seconds flat! ^^ I....ummm.....well, I scanned the last chapter you have posted, but I couldn't bring myself to read it because, to be quite frank, I really don't feel like being drepressed for the next coupla' days. And yeah, that would happen, because your story is so good that it would effect me like that..... ^^ Therefore, I will read the last chapter when you post the next one, k? Because I really do love this fic, and it is quite well done, so I'm gonna' have to finish it eventually!!! ^___~ Keep up the good work on this and on Spartan Ninjas, and update ASAP!!!
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From ANON - WildfiresVirtue on April 28, 2005
Your sentence construction and useage of words rocks. They capture the interest immediatly. I apologize for my innability to spell. You really had Sakura mature in this chapter too it's good to see. Naruto is really out of it but I like that fact that your showing Kyuubi and what he has to say. Not sure if this is what you wanted to hear but I enjoy your story.
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From ANON - BeautyChan on April 28, 2005
I thought you two quit writing. I'm glad you didn't, this
chapter rocked and the next part should be posted as
quickly as possible, long with your other stories.

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