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Reviews for Reflections (Abandoned WIP)

By : Tsukineko9

From ANON - angel of darkness on June 14, 2005
-sniffs- naru gone insane!!!! -grinz evilly- its actually quite humorous how he reacts to them al and his fights with kyuubi those are priceless, great job on the story so far ^_^
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From ANON - Silver Star on June 11, 2005
This is a great story! I just totally love it.. and it's so sweet. But.. I suggest that when you switch POVs, do you think you could somehow.. I dunno, like put who's saying what, because once in a while, when you're totally into it, you kinda lose track of who's who, then you have to go back a bit to refresh your memory. ^^ But seriously, other than that, I can't think of anything wrong. Keep up the good work!
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From ANON - Luna on June 08, 2005
Hey, can this be one of the best stories I have ever read??? And HOW LONG have I been waiting for an update??? *tears stream down face* Dude it's been too long I gotta know what happens in the story.......keep up the good work though. I have read all your stories so far - well done!!! *big smiles*
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From ANON - liena on June 08, 2005
I really enjoy this story, it is incredibly well written! In my opinion, the structure and plot of _Reflections_ far surpasses that of the majority of the works of literature hosted on this site. The chapters are impressively long and engaging! The only thing I can think to say is "keep up the good work!" I anxiously await your next update.
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From ANON - Kittie on June 08, 2005
Well, I don't know if this counts as constructive, but I really like the way you've set the story up. It changes perspective enough that you always know what's going on from everyone's PoV, but it's still easy to tell who it is. I really hope to see another update soon, and once this is done, more stories. ^^
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From Siarra on May 29, 2005
I'll have stop for a second to decide how I should sing my praises... I only found this masterpiece of a fic...a few hours ago, but I simply had to read it through at one sitting, it is simply so amazing. It is quite possibly the best long Naruto fic I've ever read. Tch, who am I kidding? It is the best.
I absolutely love the long chapters and fully appreciate the trouble you must go through to get them written. They give the story such a good flow, it feels like I'm reading a very good book and not just clicking away with the mouse. Also your way of building the story and keeping it flowing so smoothly are just great, and along with your absolutely wonderful characterization they make this the perfect reading experience.
I don't think I've ever been this wholly absorbed in reading a fic. I swear that every exciting plot twist glued me even tighter to my seat as I was cheering them onwards, feverishly hoping that they'll get just that one more bit of happiness.
The only thing that bothers me is that...well, I don't know what I'll do if you don't get those 31 proper reviews. I can only wish and give you this to contribute to that. Honestly, I don't know if I would've reviewed otherwise. I tend to find myself at a loss for words after such a mind-blowing story. Sorry.
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From ANON - Luna on May 28, 2005
Wow.......I am a bit of a newbie in reading bishounen ai/yaoi stories, and I absolutely adore the Naruto manga and anime, so when I came across this site with so many Naruto stories I was a bit overwhelmed. I really like how this story is constructed, it's amazingly creative and descriptive...one of those stories where you keep reading and can't stop!!!

I am a big fan of SasNaru now, and I love the way this story has developed, the relationship between Sasuke and Naruto goes at a nice progressive pace rather than rushed. Actually, although the story is based on their relationship, there is plenty of decent ninja action on their mission setting the scene for a proper 'Naruto-type' (refering to the original anime/manga) feel. Naruto and Sasuke are very developed in character, with their immediate thoughts expressed, I really love how this story is coming about and how new events keep unravelling....the suspense!! It's not predictable at all and I can't wait till I can read the final conclusions to the story.

I highly highly recommend this story, 11 STARS OUT OF 10!!! ***********
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From ANON - Tina on May 23, 2005
I spent the almost the whole day reading this incredible fanfic, and I absolutely LOVE your story!! I was sooo drawn to it I couldn't stop reading it until there was no more chapters to read. I love it how your chapters are so long and the emotion is so well put. I actually felt like you had the real person by you telling you how they would feel. I felt the emotion of the characters thoughout the whole story. I felt the happy warm feeling when Sasuke and Naruto was cuddling each other, I felt the anger of Sakura when she was pissed off by lord baster, and I felt the depressed sad feeling when they found Sasuke's hitai-ate with blood splatered on it. THe plotline is soooo well put together. This story is absolutely wonderful and I can not tell how happy I am to read this heart-warming but also heart-aching story. I can't wait for the next chapter to come =3. *goes back and read the whole story again*

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From ANON - Esmy-chan on May 16, 2005
31 reviews?! That's cheating! T-T I've got big finals today, starting at 7:30 am (*sobsob* too early!) and instead of reviewing my notes I'm reading/reviewing your story! This is a great story. You want something constructive? The switching POV is frustrating. It was so in that you don't tell us who you are switching too and we have to figure it out and since you do it so often it gets confusing. It takes away from the story if I have to sit back and figure out who's talking. Naruto's fairly easy because you got kyuubi in his head, but when its sasuke/kakashi/sakura/Stupid Bastard Prince Dude...its just a headache.
That is my ownly complaint. This is a great story. One of the few Sasu/Naru I've read, mostly because I'm a huge fan of sasUKE^^;;. But I've read this story and am continueally coming back for more. Hope you get those reviews soon! Can't wait to see what happens!
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From ANON - miya on May 14, 2005
ahhhhhhhh! love your ff! Please update soon! Im beging you*grovels at feet*
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From ANON - Sam on May 14, 2005
First of all, I just want to start off by saying wow...This story is absolutely amazing...I just started reading Yaoi, and i never thought that id be reading such explicit stuff, you know? So first of all, it kinda caught me by surprise...But then I realized that I kinda like it hehe...It's reeeally sensual and emotional..It made me think of my first kiss and some of the other "first time" experiences Ive had hehe...I truly felt what they were going through as they were experiencing it and that is something a true writer should be capable of - and you are! So bravo! Man I can't stop thinking about it haha. I was listening to Keane ("Your eyes open"), during this one part, and now whenever I listen to that song, I can't stop thinking about that one part - I'm a dork I know...The only suggestion I would make for you is to double check your spelling and some of your sentence structures - I noticed there are some fragments, or a sentence that isn't clear here and there...Other than that, keep on writing!! I'm HOOKED! Hehee
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From ANON - NaruSasuLover on May 14, 2005
Tihs is one of the sweetest fanfic I have ever read!!! When I read it, I felt like crying. It was filled with the right words and emotions to stir one's own soul. It was filled with the perfect mix of all the things I want in my own life but alas, this IS just a fanfic but A BLOODY BRILLIANT ONE AT THAT!!! Both of you really pulled all the actions and words at the right time. It really has made me REALLY jealous of Sasuke!!! I want that Naruto too!!! LOLZ. Apart from that, keep up the good job!!! ^^
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From ANON - may on May 12, 2005

Kirei, my pleasure to greet you. I wish i had found you and your fics sooner. As it is now, i've been some good three hours in front of the screen reading your stories. They are all beautifully written -the sense of angs is just perfect- therefore they all deserve their own reviews. I'll make sure to come back this week to leave you the reviews you deserve. My apologies for hurrying it now, but i must get going before the guys here close the shop. Anyway, i really love what you have done with this fic. While this chapter has left me with a hollow sense of emptiness in my gut, the tragedy-like aura of it is marvelous. Nothing best than a little drama, hm? The sole idea of a life without a Sasuke, a Naruto without a Sasuke is traumatzing. Can you tell the young Uchiha Heir is my hands down favorite ninja ever?
I'm also surprised, in a good way, with how Sakura turned out in this chapter. i don't like or dislike her, even if the 99% of authors pictures her like a spoiled brat most of the time. Which, actually, yeah, she is. Kinda. But the strong type attitude you gifted her with this time was very well depicted, a very professional thing. Congrats!
Oh, just to break the serious mood, the guys should stop looking for Sasuke over there. I've got him, and i am not accepting any ramson to give him back. I could consider lending it again, for purposes of a -slight but well done steamy reencounter with certain Kyuubi boy there.
Hope you got the 31 reviews you want. I could always come again and give you another, if you think that's not cheating.
Oh, i also need to go and review the vampires fic you got here. Dammit, what a potential for a sequel, Kirei!! I really have to make some time to mail you and ask you -plead and beg if you promise to consider it- to write a sequel for Of Sacrfices and Love.
Ja ne,
May aka thanatos

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From ANON - EscagirlUK on May 09, 2005
Write more! Will Sasuke be found! I bet snake-bastard has hime. Or, maybe he's got amnesia and is living in a little village as a carpentar or something. *^^* And poor Naruto! ::pets Naruto's head:: Poor baby. Write more!
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From ANON - unii-hime on May 09, 2005
ummmmmm this isnt really for just this chapter but for all of your chapters up to this one. its very indepth, youve basically created your own little world to go along with your plot. its a lot darker than that of the anime. i dont mind it but it seems just a little too much. also many of the anime fans know what all of the little japanese words/common phrases mean but for those of us who love fabulous stories but arent psycotic rabid fangirls are mainly lost. you do however use little hintings as to what some of them mean which helps but it would be more helpful if youd make a little list of meanings and whatnot. another thing i saw which seemed peculiar was the throwing of the headbands(i can never remember how to spell that ///_^U) you did mention of its symbolism but other than that it wasnt stressed upon. in story telling it is important to stress symbolism especially if it means the world to a character(be it your own or someone elses) although naruto loved sasuke you made it seem that his headband meant nothing to him when in actuality it meant everything to him. and another thing(isnt this fun) where were the rabid fangirls? there was one in the first chapter but none in the following chapters? seems suspicous. maybe their planning the ultimate fangirlish strike......one more thing what happened to the prisoner girl. there was like a silent period where she wasnt mentioned at all. which i was suprised because shes an enemy, she attempted to kill sasuke. youd think sakura would ask about whats happened or is going to happen to her. and what about gaara? i wanted to read about the fight *pouts* also i thought that in the anime it was established that the sand and the sound had ties together. wouldnt the leaf be suspicous of that seeing as though they had(have) ties with him? its almost fun review peoples stories....///_^= dont beat yourself up about what ive said(wrote) just know that your story was good enough for me to review and give pointers! now that i think ive covered everything feel free to send me a mail or two.
adorable nekoneko
uniison
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