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Reviews for Reflections (Abandoned WIP)

By : Tsukineko9

From ANON - Caciquegoddes on June 21, 2005
AHHHHHHHH! could Mitani possibly Sasuke?! oh please say he's still alive! oh i love this story! it's beautifully written and i can picture it sooo well in my head! the imagery is wonderful and the structure makes the story impossible to become bored with! please bring Sasuke back soon! i miss him and Naruto needs to be happy again!
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From ANON - Anamarie on June 21, 2005
It..e
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From ANON - Nark on June 21, 2005
Now that I've calmed down... I want you to know that I still really hate you!!
This is torture. How could you do this? You two are mean!
If someone asked what a good book is, I wouldn't hesitate in the answer, which is: sth that actually makes you live things without living them, sth that triggers a lot of different emotions in you like real life would do, a new wonderful esperience... Which is just a tiny part of what I think of your story.
How could you have more than 20 reviews in just 3 days? It's just amazing.
The plot is so well-woven, so deep... This last chapter is brilliant, you can't possibly imaging how I felt whenI saw you had updated...

I did never imagine that Sasuke was gonna be found in that way, but since so many months has gone buy, was probably one of the few solutions. I'm not yet sure whether I like it. I'm just looking foward to knowing what you plotted. But of course he would've returned if he hadn't lost his memory, which is the main reason why I think that blind boy is Sasuke, not to mention the emblem of the Uchiha,of course. I had to re-read everything that was said about him in the chapter to track any hidden clue to his real identity.Tanned? He must've sun-bathed...

The text is really fluid and astonishingly expressive, though I miss your unique double-POVed style (means-->miss Sasuke with Naruto together, ^___^) You really made me hate Kyubi, I suppose I prefer him just as a horny inside-voice, but he is priceless altogether. Sakura keeps being much better than the Sakura of the anime, I love all the weight that you put on her in the story. About Naruto, god it was time for him to recover!! Perfect was the "dialogue" between him & Sakura, and even better was how you chose to right it, first Sakura saying everything like she actually did & not actually having response, this isone ofthe things of your story that I like the most: you show with complete detail the feelings your main characters, in this case, first how Sakura felt about his speech, just sayin it, and then the view of Naruto, analysing and reacting to it in his insides.

Maybe the only bad thing is that too few things happen in the chapter, which can be forgiven because it is that, just one chapter in a story. It leaves you there with a very long face thinking: what then? It's a total cliff-hanger! This works here because you post it chapter by chapter, leaving us where you want, and it really gets to your point. But I'm not sure what I would have thought if I read the story from the beginning to the very end (when you had finished it)... Maybe I would think that it takes too long for things to happen, and the cliff-hangers woulb be "shallower".I don't know...

Anyway, I'm sure I would love your story, and your characters the same. So please keep up the excellent and professional work and update as soon as possible. Pleeeeeeeeeeeeease

((By the way, I read Spartan Ninjas in the meantime, between updates... it's excellent as well, even being set in a different timeline, Naruto and Sasuke seem so much real, so much... them!! Are you updating it soon??))

cya after next chapter!!((==soon(I hope)))
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From ANON - Nark on June 20, 2005
I hate you two far more than rationally possible!
Update now!
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From ANON - AzraelII on June 20, 2005
omg!omg!omg! Please udate soon!!! Im gonna die if you don't!!!
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From ANON - Hawk on June 19, 2005
Well as blatently obvious as I feel all that with "Mitani" was I still hate you. >.< Your chapters are amazingly long and I don't know how you do it but how could you possible leave it there!? *screams* You are a really good writter, I can definatly say that without pause, I started reading this month's ago but when you stopped updating I stopped looking for updates, but when I saw it up with two more chapters I jumped on it, I don't think I've picked up a story I've dropped before this one. As for constructive criticism (Because you said you wanted it) I don't think it's nessisary to put breaks when you just change points of view in the same scene, I think it's only nessisary when you change scene's completely. That's just my opinion though, I can't really offer up anything on the writting itself because it's by far the best I've read on AFF. Anyway, a review wouldn't be complete without an, "Update soon!!!"

~Hawk
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From ANON - macy on June 19, 2005
Hi it's me again, LOL. Just one last note, is Mitani really blind?? If Mitani is really Sasuke, then I have a feeling he really isn't XD He may be suffering from hysterical blindness because of all the stuff he's been through but...actually blind?? Hmm..
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From ANON - macy on June 19, 2005
wooops, that last review was left by me. For some very, very strange reason, aff always puts "Anon" in the name field whenever I forget to put my name. Super weird indeed since I don't even know Anon, LOL.
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From ANON - Anon on June 19, 2005
Oh my gosssssssssssssssssssssssssssssshhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!! The moment you introduced the new "unknown male orphan" I was positively sure it was Sasuke, but then I wasn't sure if you'll actually let us in on that secret in this chapter. Well, whaddayaknow, you actually did give it to us! But did you really need to do that evil cliffhanger? That was pure evil!! To say that the last sentence made me kick and scream would be a huge understatement.

WAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This is sooooooooo good!!! That chapter was definitely worth the wait. It's good to see that Naruto's back although a bit on the negative side, but it's still better than before. Hweeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee.... I'm so excited! It's 2:30 in the morning and I'm all hyper and perky. Heehee... You really are my favorite Naruto fanfic author!!! Thank you sooooo much for sharing your talent. ^_______________________________^
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From ANON - Mint on June 19, 2005
Update please!
I miss Sasuke ;_;!

Eeeh, I must wonder if he's uke or seme though XD;; Me and my curiosities~ uke, please XD!
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From ANON - prussianblue1x2 on June 19, 2005
i have really enjoyed reading this story so far. ooohhhh!!!! and now iam curious about whats going to happen next. is the mystery guy sasuke and if so is he really blind? must have more soon, please :)
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From ANON - BloodAndChocolate on June 18, 2005
O.O I hate you, why did you have to stop there? gaahh! >.< nooo I bet Mitani is Sasuke, despite the fact that he couldn't get a tan in normal circumstances. He's not blind, he's hiding his sharingan! You MUST continue. Naruto and Sasuke MUST be together and live happily ever after! ~Blood
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From ANON - Houseki on June 18, 2005
Dooooooooooooooods! I am soooo glad you finally up'd!! I'm totally lovin this story and it has been months since u up'd last.

anyways, at the end, when u introduced the guy w/ the blindfold and u said he was tan...i totally ignored it. had my suspicions, but ignored it. THEN what was said about him...i was like YES!!!! but once i got to the TBC i was like NOOOO!! lol cuz i wanted more!!

will obachan go w/ ayame? i bet she will ^__^ and the good looking blind boy will tag along as well, ne? hehe omgoddess i am SO looking forward to their reunion!!

poor poor Naruto! i mean, wow. he has been through some serious hell w/ that damn kyuubi. and him tricking him and lying to him. and sakura has surely been a trooper! she's wearin thin day by day, but now that naruto finally fought the demon and won, she can surely relax a bit. but yeah so gotta love the castrate lines *smirks* and now naruto is merging more w/ the kitsune *sigh* u like to bring his spirits down don't u? lol

other than that, a terrific chap! i hope you don't take as long to put the next one out cuz i really really can't wait to see what happens next ^__~

Mata Ja!

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From ANON - Anon on June 18, 2005
Oh man, great chapter. This story flows so much better when written in third person. I decided to read this because it was recced by a friend, but initially I had not bothered to read it at all after the reading a third of the first chapter. Mostly because of the first person view that jumped from Sasuke to Naruto then back into third person for all other characters. Personally I think that's poor writing, but the depth of plot and description salvaged this story really. It was difficult plodding through this fic, but in the end I'm glad I did. It can definitely use a beta and I'm sure after it's been beta'ed it'll be an great read. Some inconsistencies with the manga but they weren't god-when-will-the-butchering-end sort of inconsistencies ^__^

I'm still impressed and look forward to the next chapter.
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From ANON - raven_bane on June 18, 2005
if you don't make another chapter i will find where you live and strangle you
but on a lighter note I LOVE YOUR STORY the kitsune is portrad so well but please don't let sasuke be dead
if he is i'll cry
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