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Reviews for Walking Corpse

By : suomynonakun

From ANON - Lady Kaiya on March 25, 2005
Ohhh good chapter. Old Orochimaru just can't seem to keep his grubby paws out of Konoha. I can't wait to read the next chapter, and see how the battles progress. I really love this story. Please get the next chapter out as soon as you can. Till then, ja ne!
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From ANON - lo on March 25, 2005
That was an exciting battle scene. YOu are a very talented writer, I can't wait to see more.
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From ANON - lo on March 24, 2005
You, you my dear are a wonderful all around writer. This is such a good tale. You have incorporated all of the characters beautifully, even the action scenes are fun to read through. You are a ver impressive writer.
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From ANON - me on March 24, 2005
my dream come true: a chapter-long battle scene O___O i doubt even a movie or an anime battle could have such an exhilarating effect on me, it was simply amazing ^___^ also, it was great that you added characterization for some of the invisible characters like hinata and tenten, thanks again for this story >.
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From ANON - Hitobito on March 23, 2005
Goodness... Gaara! what are you waiting for! unseal him! because they are defenetly going to need Naruto's chakra on this one. they've been fighting well until now, but will they all survive? they are all spreaded around the village. I think that will make them weak. (by the way, who would have thought that Hinata had that side of herself? she's really strong!) I hope Neji goes well with his fight. will Naruto alert the others of those other hundreds of ninjas with Orochimaru?
... I wonder...
please update soon!
I really wish to know!
great chapter!
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From ANON - animegirl on March 23, 2005
yyyyyyyyyyyyyeeeeeeeeeeeeessssssssssssssss an update, wahooooooo! i love you and i love this story, that chapter was totaly amazing, things are really starting to heat up, god i can't wait to see what happens next. keeo up the incredible writing and update as soon as humanly possible, ppppppppplllllllllleeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaasssssssssssseeeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Anon on March 23, 2005
Excellent fic - I can't wait to read the next one!
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From ANON - RavenWings on March 23, 2005
Ohhhh crap! That's *not* good! Not good at all! Meep! Oh, and I adore the kick-ass Hinata! ^^ That was just awesome... Jury duty, huh? Man that sucks... at least it was fairly short. But I'm really glad you're back and writing again! Post the next chapter soon? 'Cause that was a terrible place to leave it. *Glares half-heartedly* ...And if the snake-freak goes after Naruto again, there's gonna be sooooo much trouble... >< Crap.
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From ANON - rmai on March 23, 2005
UBER! It's very well written, intriguing, and angstily riveting ... *nods* the dark mood of the story is getting to me _> but i really like it! i hope there's a happy ending in sight ... it only seems right seeing all the angst they've been through you know? the story is balanced. it's got romance. it's got drama. it's got suspense/ it's definitely got plenty of action. it's just really good. i just wish i didn't have to read it with my hand over my face peeling my eyes open with my fingers. (it's late ... i'm sleepy ... reading addict.) but it was so good that even though i was looking to read a few pwp one shots ... i got drawn into the story. dammit lol. i really don't know what else to say other than it's really well written. it's just ... damn. xd; pretty good. it's got the naruto feel, but it's dark slashy naruto. ya know? and ya know ... i always interpretted sasuke's walking into the dark forest after the fight ... as him choosing his own path to power. (as opposed to going to ebil fugly snake bitch bastard.) i'm going to be sorely disappointed if he did go to orochimaru ... well, at least he didn't kill naruto. xd; i know what the girls are mad, but then he DIDN'T kill naruto. seeeee?!?!?! i mean he had the chance to ... but he walked away. i mean it would have been better if he had carried naruto back to konoha to marry him, but we don't always get what we want do we? =_= speaking of which ... HURRAH FOR NARUTO! he's finally hokage .... (ahah.... too bad he still needs to resolve the issue of the kyubi trying to take over his body to kill people, and also smex gaara raw ...) i've always seen naruto has a bottom ... have you seen how many times sasuke's saved his ass? i can see neijixnaru and gaaraxnaru (isn't gaara just uberly cool when he's kazekage???), but my favorite is definitely sasu x naru!!!! i'm obsessed. xd; i know. at any rate, i really enjoyed your story ... which is why i took the time to write a review. i liked it ... and i want you to write more dammit! *pauses* please. ^^; and um ... if you have a mailing list, i'd like to be added. eheh. i don't visit aff often. just occasionally when i can't seem to find stuff (like sasu x naru pairings and stuff or athrun x kira from GS / GSD) kk. gotta sleep now. don't want the gaara look. don't mind me eheh. i doubt i'll remember half the things i wrote. xd; *hugs and waves bye bye*
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From ANON - JJ on March 20, 2005
Aghh, BEAUTIFUL! I can't WAIT for the next chapter!! I'm on the edge of my seat, dear
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From ANON - lje on March 16, 2005
Your story is the best fan fic I have ever read. I must have read it at least a dozen times by now, and everytime I read I find something new I like about it. The way you have portrayed all the characters fits so well with the manga and anime, and your use of dialogue is fantastic. Your scenes are all very well thought out and nicely structured. I especially liked when Ino witnesses Naruto's memories. It felt as if the memory of Gaara and Naruto could have been taken right from the manga. Your use of detail is also very good as well as consistent. Since I've read it so often there are a few things I've picked up that you might want to fix, if you haven't done so already. In chapter two, Naruto addresses Ino by name, but she never introduced herself to him so that would be another thing for her to be suspicious about. In chapter 8 you wrote a line about shinobi never forming attatchments, but did so in present instead of past tense. In chapter 9 you say that the kunai flew by their target and thudded into him, but the target was naruto and the "him" was the other attacker. Also in chapter 9 you wrote "the cap obviously not on..." That's not necessary since you say right afterwards that sand is coming out of the gourd. In chapter 10 you have Sasuke "purposely striding" down the hospital hallway. I think you mean to say either purposefully or deliberately, and later on you say whickered man instead of whiskered man. In chapter 11 you say drug instead of dragged in reference to waking sakura and Ino. And I was wondering why Ino can't hear what Naruto and Sasuke are saying to each other in the memory of the battle. Is it because Naruto doesn't remember what they said? If he does it would make sense that she would hear it. In chapter 12 you wrote "everyone was assholes," but i think it's better if you say "everyone was an asshole" and later you wrote "the old team ten began" but i think the "began" was there by accident. Sorry, that was knit-picky. I can't wait for your next chapter!!! thank you so much for writing such a great story!
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From ANON - Seiaa on March 13, 2005
._________________. omfg this is one of the BEST fics I have ever read! >o< You must update soon! (XD Your priorities amuse me. And I do suppose school work has to come in there somewhere...) but... if you do not, I shall hunt you down and poke at you with a spork until you do!
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From ANON - blisblop on March 11, 2005
I'm starting to chew my fingernails.Glad you updated.
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From ANON - hogo-chan on March 09, 2005
wonderful! you are amazing as always! ^_^

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From ANON - blue 1/2 on March 09, 2005
Take as long as you need--this is one of my favorite stories. ^-^ I love the way this is written--really well. I can't stand not being able to write like you--you're awesome!
I love the romance between Naruto and Sasuke, and I usually don't support it because people warp it and kill their personalities but you keep it real and I salute that! ^u^ Yay! I'll try to keep up with you.
Oh, I wanna see more GaaNaru (if any) next chapter! I really support that. If it's not in your plans, 's ok. Anything with the two of them works for me, and it's almost a garentee they'll be working side by side next chapter. I just hope the horny demons don't cause any problems ...
OK, see you round AFF.N and FF.N! Ja!
--blue 1/2
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