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Reviews for Variety Pack

By : Vermaxen

From ANON - Chelsey on November 20, 2005
It's been so long since you've been up. Nice stuff, I still love it! Hey feel free to check out RedSliver and my bible of lemons. The idea was definatly inspired by you. Update soon!

-Chelsey- AKA: HisBeautiful
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From ANON - Kireiko on November 20, 2005
Oh my. I've just finished reading your chapter with Kaka/Saku and I have to say... well, I'm rather breathless. I truly appreciated your author's note beforehand, seeing as I share as many misgiving's as you do, but you truly have done this pair such justice, that I'm in awe right now.

Truly, it was a moving piece to me, not only because you dealt with it quite beautifully, but in such a way so as to suffuse a lot of feeling and emotion into these two character's that I simply enjoyed this little piece to death. I can see what you mean about having to incorporate some angst into this piece; in short, I feel it would not have been so poignant or fulfilling without it. You have done an excellent job of conveying the complexities and misgiving's and consequences of such a pair interacting. Thank you for writing such a piece, it not only confirms that there are still truly gifted writer's out there, but that there is indeed such quality work to find and peruse.

This particular piece, the Kaka/Saku pairing, was quite nicely written. The pace and style of the piece, easy and flowing and enjoyable to read and follow. Aside from a few typo's, I didn't see any blaring grammatical mistakes, but truly when a piece is this good who cares ne? (Yes, I realize I sound like a gushing idiot, but really I only do that when I've enjoyed a piece that really merits my attention... not that I'm anyone of great importance in any matter, but you truly made me think during this little ficlet ;))

Honestly, I had misgiving's about delving into a story with such a wide range of pairing's but after reading your intro note, you can be assured that I will continue to read through more of your work. I confess, I had only meant to skim through and read the Sasu/Saku pairing, but seeing how well you've done, I'll be sure to check out some of your other pairing's as well... however unconventional they may seem to me.

You know you've done a good job when you convince a reader to go beyond their normal boundaries of conventional pairing's to go and seek out those that wouldn't normally have piqued their interest otherwise.

Excellent work, hope to see more from you...

~Kir
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From ANON - Hiashi-sama on November 04, 2005
Another vote for NejiSaku, Itasaku or SasuSaku ^_^.(my fav. pairs)

Or;

-Odd pair / rare pair-
GenmaSaku
IbikiSaku (I have seen once)
OroSaku (^^" poor sakura.)
KabutoSaku
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From ANON - kitty on October 23, 2005
damn! u got me cheerin for ur story!!! keep this thing goin!! email me if u got more update!! i wanna see more!!!! votin for itachi and saku!!!!!! so far gaara, neji, shika, shino and kaka are excellent!!!!!! hoot hoot!
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From ANON - kitty on October 23, 2005
damn! cant hold it anymore!! it's freakin good!!! so far i've read four so far and couldnt hold my comments any longer!! gaara epi wasnt as high as shika or shino *drool* lol....but gaara was sweet really...kiba....hmm..i'll put him last on the list of the four guys so far lol....continue the good work though i would love to see a kaka and a itachi one too..if u got any more updates plz email me!!! wanna keep on readin ur work!
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From ANON - more NejiSaku on September 08, 2005
If you have plan for next couple I would like to request Nejisaku or SasuSaku (or HinaSaku,incase of yuri) .

Because I always like Sasusaku and I like the idea about SakuNeji and HinaSaku.

No.2 is SakuKakashi, but I could picture them as couple only in vague imagination �cause I don�t know how Kakashi-sensei look like under his masks[^_^]� (yes, he wore more than one layer mask, what a freak!).

I don�t mind SakuX Shino, Kiba,Gaara since I never have seen they had interactive in main storyline before.
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But *I really very dislike NaruSaku*, probably because I felt Sakura look older than Naruto.
(^^� apologize for Sakura�s fan but this is only my opinion.)

Probably because Naruto�s behaviors (and his face) always look like childish when compared with Sakura while Sakura look more mature than him.

Plus she always lectured, berated and hit Naruto (-_-�) like big sister, teacher or even mother!

Which was quite make me felt awkward when I tried to picture them as couple in adult relationship. (Just best friend that enough for their relationship).
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I found that I�m very impress in your SakuNeji probably because I felt their relationship have something more than just het or lust (I�m not sure but I felt hint of angst? romance? restrain love?).

Especially, the ending of NejiSaku chapter, very beautiful. That made this chapter like angst romance story more than ordinary lemon story.

You should write consequent or create another NejiSaku Story [^_~]

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From ANON - relyss on August 20, 2005
Gah @_@ all of these could have sequels... especially the kibasaku and the nejisaku ones... I really liked the shikasaku one. I thought you had a good grasp at how those 2 would interact together. And I DO agree that the Naruto fandom doesn't have a whole lot of variety in the couple section (even though it should!).
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From Jimaine on July 31, 2005
Yo! Heheh i just read Naruto Sakura! I have to admit i usualy don't read Naruto, i like the suporting charicters hehe. ANyways i read yours and it was really really good!!! How do you write so well!!! makes me feel inadiquet *pout* lol anyways you are just amazing and oh my god you just, you nail feelings and emotions soooo well. It makes me soo happy! You need to write more! You really really do!!! Ahh i just GA! I love it! IT's too much to much *head overload head overload* oh and were Naruto says you could have shown up wereing nothing too cute! ANd I like the descreption of his body YUM! And and the apalgy stuff too cute!!! AHh i love you!!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - Shara on July 23, 2005
Hey, I really liked your fics especially the Naruto/sakura and Kakashi/Sakura. I am totally in love with those pairings, but I also liked the first Gaara/Sakura. Your very talented in writing and I enjoy your author notes too.
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From ANON - celestial maiden on June 26, 2005
THIS IS SOOO KOOL!!!!!! Please, please, please, can u do an ItachiSakura fic?! PLEASE, I'M BEGGING U!!!!!!!!
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From ANON - ninjashen on June 22, 2005
oh my freakin God, YOU'RE AngelOfDeath10!! I have you on my freakin watch list on ff.net!! No wonder I like this story so much! Besides the fact that you clearly appreciate a good crack pairing, you also seem to have the same attitude as me, in that drama is fine and all but you just can't write anything without a somewhat comedic attitude, and smut is fun, but if you don't change something a bit each chapter things tend to get a bit repetetive. I'm so glad you avoided that, even with like ten chapters! And it's funny! I actually laughed out loud several times. I love this story. You rekindled by formerly fading love of Gaa/Saku, and changed my mind about Naru/Saku. Before, I didn't care for it as I had read only one story featuring that pairing and they way they portrayed Naruto gave me the impression that when he kissed Sakura, he would taste like ramen. Not very sexy. But I think you did it just right! God damn, colour me impressed. It's so good to find a story on aff.net that not only ISN'T more freakin YAOI, but is ALSO not total garbage! That's so GREAT!
Now do Kankuro. KANKURO! Come on, you did SHINO! as a request from a fan? (I know I'm not the only freak that likes him.)
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From ANON - wheeeee!! on June 09, 2005
Hinata should die.
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From ANON - hiekina on June 07, 2005
hee hee I don't suppose you plan on making sequels to any of these? the firs two are really goodand I enjoy the unusual pairings. though I think hte 2nd one is the one you should really make a sequel for, it has real possiblities.
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From ANON - Kaiya on June 05, 2005
Heya...i just read you coment about Comidic writers not getting respect. Well i would just like to say, as a dramatic writter who tends to make people cry, (yeah i know i suck lol) I highly respect the comidic writer. I can't wright comadxy i would do anything to be able to make people laugh. Making them cry is easy...just kill someone lol. I just wanted you to know that your work is very much apreshiated! BTW I LOVE YOUR STUFF!!!! Shino sakura yeah i need more of those two. I read that first story like 3 or 4 times before i finaly moved on to your other stuff. Admiditly i was a bit hesatent about a Kiba sakura but I thout it was soo cute, same with Shikamaru and Sakura. You have a way of making unlikely couples not only see very cute but odly enough stay in charicter! Well keep up the wrighting, maybe even make sequals for a few of your pairs. Espeshialy Sakura and shino...want to know what happens when she sees his eyes and such. Ohh and you should do one with Lee and Sakura...Lee is my favrit charister, second and third are Shino and Neji...which you have...2 out of 3 aint badc thou. Keep up the good work!
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From ANON - Chelsey on May 14, 2005
It's taken me three day's to read this! I've read all of the stories and I found my favorites were Shino, Shikamaru, and Gaara. They were just so sweet, Please do write more of these! Usually I prefer to do Sakura/Kakashi but this was a nice change in pace to read. I'm currently working on a OC/Sasuke (Rose of Uchiha) it's getting pretty interesting to write, so I hope you read it and let me know what you think. I'll be putting up chapter 3 as soon as I can. Keep up the good writing!

-Chelsey- AKA: HisBeautiful
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