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Reviews for Shattered

By : caro8
  • From ANON - Zendura on July 18, 2005
    Hey awsome story keep it coming. BTW cant wait to see how Naruto and Sasuke match up against the Akatsuki.
    Hehehehe. cant wait to see if you as good at writing wedding as you are at everything else.

    P.S. Naruto Hinata FOREVER
    P.P.S. Sakura Lee FOREVER
    P.P.P.S Will Sasuke ever get some loving (he's a basterd but doesn't desurve to die alone::sob::)
    P.P.P.P.S. Does anyone know how many post scripts your allowed to us???
    P.P.P.P.P.S. And yes I AM annoying!!!!!
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  • From ANON - JBrock on July 18, 2005
    Shino & Sasuke? If you're planning on having the two of them get involved with each other...
    They do have a decent amount in common with respect to personality, but...
    They're not going to be the most talkative couple in the world. I wouldn't expect many long talks like Hinata & Naruto.
    I have nothing against gay couples, but PLEASE!! give a warning before a Yaoi scene.

    Temari's in town... is she going to meet up with Shikamaru? I could definitely see the two of them as a couple.
    Or did you have Shikamaru with Ino? I don't remember. (It's 2AM...)

    (This is after I read it twice... on the same night)
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  • From ANON - JBrock on July 18, 2005
    FANTASTIC! You did great with the lemon in the scene. I was right - it didn't seem very forced.
    A little bit more buildup of how Sakura was feeling lonely might have made it flow even better.

    BTW, I watch the series, and only read the manga up to where I am in the series,
    so some of the ideas I think of on my own might actually be in the manga.

    For example, I've been thinking of what happened the first time Naruto summoned Gamabunta, and how he saw Kyuubi in his mind.
    He interacted with Kyuubi, and I've been thinking... what if, every time Naruto unleashed enormous amounts of Kyuubi's chakra, the seal weakens?
    What would happen if it broke completely? Would Kyuubi instantly take over Naruto, or would they battle for dominance, or would they mix together?
    This could make for an interesting premise for another fic.

    Also, I don't know if you've actually thought out this possibility, but... Sakura is a good medical-nin. Tsunade is awesome...
    Kabuto is probably somewhere in between the two of them. Might Kabuto join Akatsuki for this purpose?
    Or maybe Akatsuki will threaten to destroy the Sound if Kabuto doesn't cooperate?

    Keep it up! I hope to see your next chapter soon!!
    (This is after reading it once, in case i R&R again)
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  • From ANON - Saico on July 14, 2005
    Nice chapter. I think you placed Naruto in an Anbu squad totally opposite to his nature and skills.

    About the pairings, so far Naruto and Hinata have had some issues to deal with that normal pairings like Sakura and Lee don't. Maybe that's why they're more difficult for you to write.
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  • From ANON - JBrock on June 23, 2005
    I was just reading it again. (Waiting with baited breath for next chapter). I just wanna say...
    The language you used when talking about Sasuke being irritated at Sakura for finding his ticklish spot...
    Sasuke wants revenge. Again. I don't know if you planned that or not, but either way I think that was pretty ironic.

    Keep it up!

    JBrock
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  • From ANON - JBrock on June 11, 2005
    I just posted my last review, but i forgot to mention:

    I definintely like where you're going with Akatsuki, and I like the idea of a legendary monster from each village.
    If I'm following your thinking correctly, someone is going to be kidnapped, and it ties in to Naruto's fears as they were mentioned while talking to Hiashi.

    As for the death threat...you've had a stay of execution. lol
    Keep up the good work!
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  • From ANON - JBrock on June 11, 2005
    I just posted my last review, but i forgot to mention:

    I definintely like where you're going with Akatsuki, and I like the idea of a legendary monster from each village.
    If I'm following your thinking correctly, someone is going to be kidnapped, and it ties in to Naruto's fears as they were mentioned while talking to Hiashi.

    As for the death threat...you've had a stay of execution. lol
    Keep up the good work!
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  • From ANON - JBrock on June 11, 2005
    Awesome chapter, man. Congrats on graduating. /yay for lemons. (I'm a recovering World of Warcraft addict.)

    I'm glad to see that Sasuke is starting to feel the desire for someone. I like that you skipped over the ANBU training. It kind of supports the concept of the secrecy of ANBU. Your talk between Naruto and Hiashi also went very well.

    I was watching a few past episodes, and I saw Sakura's quick flashback to Sasuke admitting that Naruto saved her from Gaara. Wow. That HAD to hurt him. A lot. To have to admit that he was outdone by someone who was making an absolute fool of himself trying to pull off Chidori...

    Anyway, keep it up. Looking forward to the next chapter.
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  • From ANON - Saico on June 06, 2005
    I'm still enjoying this story. I liked that Naruto and Hinata's relationship hit a bump, but it was overcome. It makes it look more real. Real couples do fight everyonce in a while, and plus Hinata is only human, it's only logical that she was lost as to what to do. I'd have liked to know what Kakashi told her.
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  • From ANON - JBrock on May 29, 2005
    Just thinking... commenting on the masks. It seems appropriate for Neji to have the bird mask and Lee to have the bear mask.
    Of course, there's no frog mask, so that option is out for Naruto. What made you think of the dog mask? Only other one you saw?
    or was it something else?

    Sorry I'm reviewing so many times... just waiting with baited breath for your next chapter. Feel like i have to talk about it a little. Hope you update soon!
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  • From ANON - JBrock on May 11, 2005
    Sorry - i thought i reviewed last time.
    My comment last time was regarding Kabuto and how
    he seems to be both similar and different than Orochimaru.
    He cares about the village, but then again,
    any part of his plan that has become useless is discarded.

    This time: I loved the way you got Hinata and Naruto back together.
    It felt right. And I hate you for your cliffhangers. I'd curse you and
    make you suffer in your own personal hell for all eternity, but then
    you wouldn't be able to finish the story. So look foward to hell after
    the story is complete. lol
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  • From ANON - armed and dangerous on May 09, 2005
    Cool. I was wondering when the two lovebirds were gonna work things out. A depressed Naruto makes for a depressing story. Personally, I think that Roiyaru shoulda gotten his ass kicked by both Naruto and Hinata, then by all the others that were present at that meeting when they were done with him. I sure hope the little punk knows his place now. Killing Naruto would've incurred not only Hinata's wrath, but also the wrath of the rookie nine (Sasuke would just torture him until he screamed for bloody death, only to have Sakura heal him to be tortured again), the other's whose lives Naruto touched (including Sabaku no Gaara) like Neji, etc. Geh, now I'm rambling. Anyway, cool chapter, get the next one out soon, and I'll be around until then.
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  • From ANON - JBrock on May 07, 2005
    "Okay so this chapter is kinda short, live with it. Got lots of school and laundry to do?"
    You mean... there's life.... in places other than the computer? 'School'... is that an expansion to World of Warcraft or something?
    haha.

    Great job. I really like the way you're conveying Kabuto. At the same time like Orochimaru and against him.
    Caring for the village instead of his personal goals, but not caring for those who have become useless tools.

    The whole concept of Kyuubi and Naruto becoming closer together intrigues me. I've been thinking about that, too.
    Will using Kyuubi's chakra weaken the seal and let the legendary monster out into the world again? Or will it come to
    a clash of wills for control of Naruto's body?

    Keep it up!
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  • From ANON - JBrock on April 15, 2005
    Awesome story. You've really got talent. One thing that kinda felt off...
    during the Third Exam in the Chuunin exam, you switched to present tense. You might want to watch out tense changing in the future.

    You planning on doing any lemon scenes? The way you write, you could put a few in and make it feel right, not forced like most
    lemon writers do.
    Looking forward to the next chapter!


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  • From ANON - Yami Jay on April 06, 2005
    ARGH! What the heck kabuto is planning! You are making changing side each time. But I like the new chapters!
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