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Reviews for Vanilla

By : Fallentenshi128
  • From ANON - dizzy_otaku on July 26, 2005
    Hey!^^

    I really liked this fanfic. Very hot. And also sweet. I like how Naruto really to charge at first. But he belongs as an uke to me. *nods* Its better that way. Hmm... I already said I liked it... Well, I'm glad you didn't make as many spelling mistakes as other people. It makes it so hard to tell wahts going on when people mispell. I'm glad you weren't one of them. Also it seems that this is the third chapter of this fic. I didn't read the first two so could you give me the wesite where I can read them? On AFF.net it says this is the first chapter so this is getting really confusing... @__@ Please help me! T_T Thanks for your hard work and please get back to me about the other chapters. *bows* Its an interesting plot and I'd love to read all of it. Please?

    ~:.*dizzy_otaku*.:~
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  • From ANON - silverfox on March 27, 2005
    damn good fic really good but qustions where is sasuke's gang how did him and naruto become lovers and what did you mean that they were worried about there lives or heath or something like that???????????

    other than those little complaints it was again a really damn good fic!!

    oh one more thing are you going to explain some,mabe all of those qestions in the next chapters!!!
    sorry if it seems that I'm complaining a lot its just i really don't like being confused i become a real bitch when i dont get something ask my friends hahaha, well anyway this fic seems like it will become more interesting as it gets going and i'll be reading all the while!!! SORRY again if it seems like i'm dissin you or something to that affect i don't mean to really.. you understand right besides some camplaining can always help with your work wether is writing or something else i know it almost always help me to make my work better when my friends complain.

    sorry i guess i got a little off track, anyway cant wait to see what happens in the next chapters so update soon...like NOW!!!

    UNTIL THE NEXT TIME BYE BYE!!!
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  • From ANON - Demon on March 09, 2005
    i love your fic it is so good!!! i was so happy when i read it
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  • From ANON - Wodka on October 11, 2004
    ehm....really cute story, but I don´t see the link between summary and the fanfic itself...where is Sasuke´s gang?
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  • From ANON - Foamy on September 18, 2004
    hehe, okay I liked it...omg...I'm a pervert O___o...bah who cares? Better show it and live with it!!! As long as SasuNaru parings excist I'll be perverted...hehehheheh!!!!!! if you didn't understand what I was trying to say I can be very straigh.UPD.UPDATE DAMNIT!!!!

    Hugs foamy
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  • From ANON - tess on September 16, 2004
    all time favorite part in the story "whatever my baby wants he gets" that quote from sasuke was priceless!!!!!
    i hope one day he actually says that in the anime....*sigh* onw can only dream.
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  • From ANON - Yum on September 16, 2004
    Is it the sequel of "the dream we follow" (I'm unable to remember the whole japanese title sorry)? I was unable to review it in fanfiction.net, but i love it!! You're a Gack fan... I like him too but some time it's a bit...pathetic like "kimi no tame ni dekiru koto" no offence... I love this song... So i think you make a great job just a little weird the part with the cucumber but it was very interesting!!^^
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  • From ANON - Jezibela on September 15, 2004
    Nice situation, with very cute, though very out of character dialouge. I enjoyed it, but I have some mild criticism, so don't take it as a personal attack, it's just some things that a lot of yaoi fanfic writers tend to do often, that can get quite annoying...

    1) The cutesy dialog during an intimate situation: I don't know if it was intentional, which is okay, but I noticed when I started writing that I sometimes put my personality in place with the characters, and I tend to get dialog that sounds odd, within the situation pending. But, your dialog wasn't bad, it's just at some points, it was so out of character, it kind of took away from the moment.

    2) Author notes, in the middle of the story itself: This is something that is one of my pet peeves, but I do it myself a lot in rough drafts, though now I kind of scold myself, and try to put my notes at the end of my stories. Author notes are nice tidbits, but in a yaoi fic, it's like someone running in the room randomly, letting out an extremely loud fart, then making the characters resume their situation. Well, that's the best way I could put it..


    But, I'd like to thank you for one *major* thing on my list: Thank you SO much for putting good formatting in. Too many people overlook putting breaks in their paragraphs, or during dialog, and it crunches it up, making it almost illegable, even if in typing.

    Other than those two things, and some other tiny details that I need to look through a magnifying glass to find again, it was a pretty damn good fic.


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  • From ANON - ponpiki on September 15, 2004
    That was a sexy cucumber. If Sasuke was controling the cucumber, I'd take a cucumber any day. ^_~ Wahahaha... Vegetable-obsessed horny Sasuke..? Yum. A vegian's fantasy? XD And omg Sasuke is so evil with his pretty little finger tips >_> ! Poor Naruto.. ..wait wtf am I saying. Naruto you bastard >o< !
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