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From ANON - hight2014 on July 07, 2014
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Thomas [Surname Removed]: He sent this to 5 people. Big mistake. The night Thomas was lying in his bed watching T.V. The clock shows '12:01am'. The T.V misteriously flickered off and Thomas's bedroom lamp flashed on and off several times. It went pitch black, Thomas looked to the left of him and there she was, Bloody Mary standing in white rags. Blood everywhere with a knife in her hand then disappeared. The biggest fright of Thomas's life.

Warning... NEVER look in a mirror and repeat -'Bloody Mary.Bloody Mary.' Bloody Mary... I KILLED YOUR SON' Is it the end for you tonight! YOU ARE NOW CURSED

We strongly advise you to send this email on. It is seriously NO JOKE. We don't want to see another life wasted. ITS YOUR CHOICE... WANNA DIE TONIGHT? If you send this email to...

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From ANON - Anon on April 22, 2009
(I review as I read.)

I like the sound of his voice. ____ I like how he describes his feelings when he stands over Itachi. ____ Boy, that sounds dark. That thing about �spreading the last of the clan�s blood over myself� is related to something he�d consider �mercy�. That�s really creepy. (*shivers*) ____ For �analyzation�, you want the word �analysis� instead. ____ �You were nothing to me.� That�s not exactly true. If it had been, Sasuke wouldn�t�ve thought Itachi was worth fighting. ____ Love the anticipation. ____ Very cool use of words like �claim� and �power� and �belonged�. ____ �With both of my small hands . . .� They�re small? They don�t have to be large, but I wouldn�t say they�re �small�. = ____ Heh�nice how Sasuke looses Itachi�s ponytail �gently�. Mixing something nice in there with the torture. Sasuke seems a lot like the Sadist With Soft Hands in this paragraph. I love the part where he focuses on Itachi�s hair and says, �You pretty bastard.� I can just hear him breathe it, and feel his breath on Itachi�s face. Brrrr. . . . ____ �I hated you so much, and let I could not help but feel the strength in my body dissipating . . .� Typo there�the �l� should be a �y�. ____ Heh�I guess it�s true that Sasuke doesn�t really see Itachi as his brother anymore. So perhaps the feeling isn�t incestuous. =) ____ �Our DNA so similar it was difficult to say who�s belonged to whom.� I love that sentence. Very poetic. But you want to use the word �whose� instead. ____ �It seemed to make you look so powerful, so godlike, your feet almost hidden underneath so as to give the allusion you were floating on air.� Cool line. And he�s not totally demeaning Itachi; Sasuke�s still aware of the charm Itachi seems to have. He points it out in a way that�s not entirely hateful or angry. It�s like part of him is still charmed by Itachi, and he�s not angry about it. ____ Yet he is angry at Itachi�s control. Come on, Sasuke, don�t lose your cool. It�s too early for that. ____ Sasuke said he�d thought of a lot of different ways to torture Itachi, yet so far, it seems only like the sexual torture. If he was planning to seduce Itachi over a period of time so that Itachi would fall in love with him, I could see that; it would be torture when Sasuke broke his heart later. Even without the long-term seduction, raping him painfully on the spot could be torture. But . . . it doesn�t seem so much like Sasuke�s trying to cause him pain like he says he is. ____ Heh�I spoke too soon again. ^^; ____ One good chomp on the ear and Itachi�s already pushed to hate? Sounds like a brat. Emotionally hurt, maybe, but I�m not sure he�d reach hate so fast. Sasuke needs to confuse and stretch Itachi�s emotions to the point of exhaustion for hate to come. Like a LOT of the alternating love/torture/love/torture thing Sasuke did�only more extreme. Something to at least get Itachi�s guard down so that he doesn�t expect the sudden pain. The ear thing was a good idea, but put in a lot of things like that until Itachi can�t take it anymore. That�s when he�ll start to hate. ____ The head-slam and then the thing with Itachi�s neck was good. Still, the hate should�ve been a little later. (That�s what I think anyway.) But it doesn�t bother me that much. It makes an interesting effect for the story. ____ (*shiver*) I freakin� LOVE this line: �wanting you to know that you were my property; you belonged to me and no one else, until I was utterly through with you.� ♥ And it�s cool because it�s not a line that�s proven through sex (yet). Sasuke doesn�t have to use sex to drive the point home. =D ____ That�s cool, the part about how Sasuke used to envision Itachi�s defeat and how he suddenly realizes how he�s changed in reality. ____ �The proof that at the age of nine, you had graduated the academy and became a true ninja . . .� I thought it was the age of seven when he graduated. ____ �I decided not to ask that you lift your arms and take off your shirt . . .� He�s a little too lofty there. Why would he ask Itachi in the first place? And why would Itachi do it even if Sasuke had asked? I�m surprised Sasuke even considered asking Itachi to do it. ____ Is Itachi really squirming out of some form of protest? Or is he squirming because he likes it? ____ �. . . but decided I would enjoy your moans much more.� Which is probably true. He means moans of lust, right? Still, I�m surprised Sasuke�s not having too much of a dilemma of Torture vs. Lust. ____ Ah, never mind. I forgot he can satisfy himself by alternating. =) ____ Love how slowly Sasuke�s mind turns more and more towards actual rape. He�s already sure that he�ll do it, but he keeps distracting himself by torturing Itachi in other ways and places. Then he realizes he�s frustrated and moves on to the next step. I like it. At this point, I love the way he turned his attention to Itachi�s legs. I can practically feel him thinking. ____ Alright, I�m a little confused here: �staring at the glorious sight before my unworthy eyes.� I�m not sure what you were trying to say, but �unworthy� feels out-of-place. It completely clashes with Sasuke�s superior attitude all throughout the story. All of a sudden he feels unworthy? ____ Interesting details about how it was strange seeing Itachi�s clothes come off. I�m a little surprised that Itachi�s so turned on that his erection�s straining, though. The torture Sasuke did to Itachi�s chest would�ve killed a lot of it, I thought. Unless Itachi�s a hardcore masochist. ____ Heh��You�re a bad big brother, Itachi . . .� I�m reminded of Drusilla from Buffy the Vampire Slayer. ^^; ____ Whoops: �wanting to memorize all of your skin, his muscles, the way your body was bent at that moment . . .� Wrong tense; you still want to use the word �your� instead of �his�. ____ This just occurred to me: how come Itachi�s so powerless? He has his arms and legs free, why can�t he fight back or run for it? He�s run before when it looks like he might lose in a situation; like when he battled Jiraiya. Or Gai. My question is, how is he powerless? ____ Okay, now this is a MUCH better place for the hate to come in, when Sasuke ties him up. =) ____ �Fighting back was not an option for someone in our higher bloodline and class. You were now obligated to shut up and accept punishment from your better like a man.� Interesting idea, but I�m not sure Itachi would follow that rule, considering that it sounds like a clan belief, and Itachi scorned the clan (apparently). ____ You know, Itachi doesn�t have to be bigger just because he�s older. How old is Sasuke supposed to be in this story? I don�t know about when guys go through puberty, but if Sasuke�s in his 20s, it�s entirely possible he�d be more endowed than Itachi. ____ �You were always the prettiest in the family . . .� That�s a matter of opinion. I personally think Sasuke�s prettier, by just a smidge. They�re both gorgeous in different ways. ____ Heh�Sasuke hasn�t even started to fuck him and he�s already so turned on simply by proving dominance. ____ �You would learn that I had become a man, if I had to prove it to you.� That line should sound corny, but it doesn�t for some reason. It actually works pretty well. And it even sounds a little scary. ____ If Itachi really didn�t want to suck Sasuke off, it would be kind of hard to force him. Itachi could keep his lips and teeth clamped tightly shut. And even if Sasuke managed to pry his mouth open and stick his dick in, Itachi could have given him one hell of a bite. And then Sasuke would be really helpless long enough for Itachi to escape or fight back. Guys� defenses seem to pretty much disappear when they�re genitals are harmed. That�s all it would�ve taken for Itachi to have regained the upper hand. ____ �Gods, what you can�t do with that amazing tongue of yours.� Doesn�t he mean �can�? ____ Also, I thought guys don�t like it when teeth comes in contact with their genitals. ____ Heh�just because Sasuke had a mind-blowing orgasm don�t mean the party�s over. >:-) ____ Ooh, love it when without warning he�s got Itachi completely at his mercy in the most humiliating way possible. I like it because it�s saying, �Here comes the real pain.� And after everything we�ve witnessed so far . . . (*shudders*) ____ Love Sasuke�s dark sadistic pleasure. This is the sort of thing we don�t see often enough when it comes to the two of them together. Far too much has Itachi delivered it to Sasuke. For once it goes the other way. =D ____ That word �virgin� really jumps out. For some reason, it makes these situations so much more intense when it�s mentioned. ____ Whoa, four fingers! O.O That doesn�t happen very often in these fanfics! ____ �Slick?� I haven�t seen any lube. ____ No freakin� way. The whole hand? . . . =O I�m stunned. ____ That�s twice that you�ve mentioned him shoving his thumb in as well to join the rest of his fingers. ____ No, not �small fist.� He can just say �my fist�. ____ �Your voice becoming horse.� Actually, it�s �hoarse.� ____ Love it when Sasuke says �I know.� For some reason, that works too. It�s chilling. ____ �I would prove that I was above you.� He already has. But go ahead. It�s interesting hearing Sasuke talk about himself as a monster. I wonder how he feels about that in other times. Or how he�ll feel later. ____ �Wondering if it would truly fit in such a tight space.� Surely it�s not that tight after being stretched with an entire hand. Or is Sasuke�s penis thicker than his wrist? ____ Interesting. Itachi knew earlier that Sasuke would probably make him do this and apparently resigned himself. But Sasuke has broken through and now Itachi�s dreading it. ____ I like the emphasis on the term �fucking�. ____ Okay, if Sasuke�s scratching at Itachi�s dick, I think there should be more emphasis on Itachi�s pain. Like I said before: that pain should probably dull a bit of what Sasuke�s doing to his ass because guys are EXTREMELY sensitive there. Or so I�ve been told. Any kind of restraint would probably be impossible, and if Itachi didn�t scream then, it would probably be because the pain goes past the limits of his voice. ____ �knowing you were enjoying this, but still hating that I was the one delivering this type of feeling.� By �enjoying,� you mean �sexually stimulated,� right? Because I doubt he would be able to enjoy sexual stimulus at this point. I think anything that can be labeled as �pleasure� or �enjoyment� has disappeared. Unless Itachi is a die-hard masochist of this level�of which I cannot comprehend. ____ No way. An hour? How the hell can he last that long? He must�ve pulled out or did something to turn himself off partway through. ____ �Our bodies were so slicked with sweat and saliva . . .� And blood. ____ Whoa, hell. Itachi still said �no� after all that?! O.O ____ Boy, that hurts. Sasuke did so much to him . . . but nothing hurts like the truth. ____ Still, I feel like Itachi�s words are a little empty. Sasuke knew they were gone, hadn�t been aiming to bring them back. �Restore my clan� or �Resurrect my clan� could mean different things. He could�ve meant the clan�s honor, or he could have had children of his own. And the clan still lives on. Through HIM. He�s still there. So long as he and Itachi are there, the clan is still there. I�m sure Sasuke would�ve known that enough to not give Itachi�s words any merit. Sasuke beat him and defiled him and stripped him of his dignity. What would truly make it painful to Itachi would be if Sasuke made him helpless for the rest of his life. Like without arms, legs, eyes, and voice. Totally dependent on other people. ____ Interesting, though, how Sasuke seems aware in hindsight that he gave Itachi the reaction he wanted. ____ I�ll betcha Itachi feels the worst possible, so he�s trying to bait Sasuke into killing him. Stop, Sasuke, stop. ____ Knew it�he�s dead before Sasuke realized it. (*shiver*) ____ Interesting, the hindsight Sasuke�s feeling right after he killed Itachi. ____ Awwww, that�s so SAD! T_T �It didn�t mean a thing so long as you didn�t approve of me.� ____ Huh. In a weird twist, has Itachi exorcised Sasuke of the demon in him? Deliberately or paradoxically?

This was so much better than I expected it to be. I read it at the right time, otherwise I would�ve hated it. But you�re right about them having a complicated relationship when you put yaoi in there. Especially to twist it from Itachi/Sasuke to Sasuke/Itachi. Anyways, I enjoyed the story, though the ending broke my heart.
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From Howling on August 05, 2007
To say I was anything less than in love with this story would be lying. Even loving it doesn't seem to fit. I plan on reading many more of your stories in the near and far future and hope to find that your works surpass even this.

--Howling
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From yaoiismyantidrug on February 24, 2007
Yum. Sexy, bloody, violent, hate-filled incest. Gahhhhhh......

LOVED. IT.
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From ANON - Darling_425 on September 09, 2006
The story is veru good and... masochistic, no sadistic. Poor Sasuke! I would love a happy ending, thought *pouts* Like he does find peace- or love.
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From ANON - <> on July 14, 2005
Very good one, very angsty, dark and all. Need I add that I'm also very turned on?
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From ANON - MultifacetedTune on February 28, 2005
Ho-ly SHIT. That was.........so.......just.......wow. Yeah....wow. That works..... ^___~ That was totally amazing! You had everything in there...however did you come up with such a neat idea??? Very kewl, and very well written, too......I even liked the ending, as surprising as it was. ^___~ Keep up the good work!!!
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From ANON - sazuna-teme!? on December 27, 2004
OMG i luv the story but it was so SAD it made me want to cry.. damn Itachi not recongnizing Sasuke.. ah, the pains of a younger sibling.. luckily for me im an only child lol ^^;... tho i wish it had a more happier ending, anything but this.. though i must say it was a great story nothing i had expected.. your a great writter and keep up the great work!

P.S dont u just luv Uchihacest? i do.. so cute, hot, and so goddamned sexy! *glomps them* (gotta luv their mysterious attitudes!)
ciao for now hun!

~~sazuna~> o.0~~!?!
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From ANON - Mece on December 06, 2004
I have the feeling that'll be the way it ends in manga..well, maybe besides Uchihacest!
Realy good fic!
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From ANON - Anku on September 09, 2004
I'm kinda trying not to cry, now...

My god...Kinky as that was, it's kinda a slap in the face, y'know? But...it was still well done. Hey, it's just like an actual Japanese ending! QUITE Bitter...I don't think I'd add the 'sweet' on the end of that. However, the overall story was quite done. Ooooh...I love this pairing....You know? Horny...Hot...Beautiful...Sexy...oh my....! *Nosebleed*

It's still really sad...
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From ANON - none on May 29, 2004
O.O I loved this story!..This is the first ever Sasu / Itachi fic I've ever seen..perhaps there might be more? *hint hint*
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From ANON - Z on May 27, 2004
That was pretty intense. You are mazimazing writer, keep up the good work!
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