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Reviews for Playboy Vs Innocent

By : uzumakigina
  • From sameyler on October 07, 2008
    thats so like naruto.
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  • From ANON - TheDarkSandQueen on December 26, 2006
    i haven't read the story i just want to let you know that theres another place you could post this story try Mediaminer.ore i have an account there since i can't post mine of FF eather mine account is Sessymate13 look at my stories if you want.
    Ja Ne,
    Dark Sand Queen
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  • From ANON - nana-chan on November 02, 2006
    thank you,thank you. once i read you were taking out the itachi/kisami i nearly cried!!!!
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  • From ANON - amber on February 02, 2006
    hurry up and UPDATE
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  • From ANON - dark_tsuzukiasato on January 22, 2006
    OMG!!!!

    BWUAHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAH!!!

    It's filled with a whole bunch of "WTF" moments!!!
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  • From ANON - Perfect Ebony on January 17, 2006
    ^_^ For starters I would like to say that you have a good idea to work with here, no let me correct myself, a GREAT idea. I haven’t read anything like this yet and I think you’re on a good track as far as originality goes but…

    I’m sorry, there is a BUT.

    You really, really have to work on your punctuation and writing a little more. A lot of it seems rushed, I feel that some of it you can really get into and make a little wordier and descriptive rather than using the same words over and over. Perhaps you need a Beta to help you with your writing?

    I don’t want you to get the feeling I’m flaming you or anything because I’m not. I like the story and I want to be able to help make a good story better. After all isn’t that what reviewing is about?

    The meeting between Sasuke and Naruto happened quickly but that is okay not really the problem but taking it slower could have made it better. The love at first sight thing with Sasuke and Naruto was a little cliché and maybe a little cheesy considering Sasuke going "Gaga" for a guy he had never met before seems a little OOC. Quite a handful of the characters seem a little out of character...a lot more than they need to be.

    Other than that I enjoyed it and I would like to see more. ^_^ I hope I wasnt too harsh...
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  • From ANON - jame on December 31, 2005
    interesting
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  • From chinohana on November 22, 2005
    aaaww... this is sooooooooooooooo hilarious! update!
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  • From ANON - kp on April 07, 2005
    I really like the start of the story and I would truly love to find out what will happen next and what the result will be, pleeease? Thank you for what you have done so far.
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  • From ANON - Demon on March 06, 2005
    please please please update soon!!!! i'm a addict to your fic now!!!
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  • From ANON - Black Child on September 02, 2004
    On further inspection I can just add to the forgotten endings of words, it's a remarkable, and incredibly original idea. Keep writing, i'm hooked.
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  • From ANON - Black child on September 02, 2004
    Two thoughts: Funny idea, but christ spell check. it's hao reo read this way.
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  • From ANON - Majo-chan on August 06, 2004
    Hey, you're back. =^^= I was starting to wonder if you would continue this fic, so, I'm glad you did. :3

    "OH MY GOD, Sasuke is crying, someone get me a camera!"
    Omg, that one was absolutely killing me. Way to go, Itachi. xD

    And Squee~! KakaIru! Me wuvs. ^^ I wish there will be KakaIru-lemony at some point of this story. But please, keep writing. It's a wonderful and personal fic, so I'd really like to read a much more of this. ^_^
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  • From ANON - hara on August 06, 2004
    well this fic needs to be beta-ed bad there are so many errors and it seems to be written in broken esh. sh. it think it d bed be a decent fic if the errors were corrected
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  • From ANON - Shez on August 05, 2004
    You have officially made this fanfic mega addictive. Therefore, you need to take responsibilty and write more! xD;;; Jokes, jokes. But great chapter. ^^
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