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Reviews for A Kunoichi's True Nature

By : ShroudedShinobi92
  • From c0p13r on January 28, 2020

    ... ... Ah, fork it.  What the hell...

    '"Would you like to come inside Karin?" Obviously hearing the double meaning in his question the elder female giggled cutely, this made her ample breasts jiggle lightly within her tight fabric confinements which was a violet colored vest that clung tightly to her beautiful body while the male lustfully licked his masculine lips.'

    I'll just do this part; I've recited myself enough on your other repetitive issues.  From Haku's incredibly corny introduction, am I and other readers to assume Karin is futa or transexual in this story?  I ask because a guy asking a girl such a double entendre is ridiculous.  Ah, maybe I'm thinking too obviously.  Maybe you meant her being inside the building or house or whatever - I don't read enough of your story to ever get into details - but I'll just 'Frozen' it.

    Double entendre aside, I think of girls giggling to making their titties bounce - even lightly - and I just can't conjure an image that seems sexy...  It just comes off as awkward or comical, like the woman laughs like a horse or a car engine that chugs but won't turn over, ya know?  Dattebayo...

    And finally!  Of all times for 'masculine lips' to be inappropriate, this would be it: Haku.  He is not masculine in any way.  Now would be the time to use feminine traits to describe the male, or else you lose the character.

    Now... I am off!

    With that, the copycat turns and eludes eyesight into the shrouded mist.  With him and his blue eyes piercing the soul of every butthole he peeks into, he carries an orange book with your story's title... to the toilet... where there is no toilet paper.  And his tone is anything but kind and advising as he screams and curses the jalapeño chicken he ate last night.


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  • From atkbar on January 13, 2020

    Hey there, I just wanna ask if you accept requests?


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  • From DJoko on December 28, 2019

    In all of your stories I see people review about your Dyslexia, so I mean if it's a problem I highly recommend you add 'https://www.grammarly.com/' to your chrome, just so it will highlight the problems in realtime so you can catch them easier. 


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  • From Malfax on December 28, 2019

    Are you maybe dyslexic? Because I still spotted at least 10 mistakes in the first chapter alone where you swap 2 letters randomly in a word. I don't know how else to highlight this so I'll just repost the chapter in this comment with the mistakes underlined. These are exactly the type of mistakes I did until my late teens, being diagnosed with disgraphia. Here's an excerpt from a website:

    Signs of dysgraphia to watch for include:

    • Cramped grip, which may lead to a sore hand.
    • Difficulty spacing things out on paper or within margins (poor spatial planning)
    • Frequent erasing.
    • Inconsistency in letter and word spacing.
    • Poor spelling, including unfinished words or missing words or letters.

    The condition is mostly stress related, nerve and muscle stress, If you know that more of the above points apply to you other than that last bullet point, look into conditioning excercises to try and overcome it. To me personally all 5 of them applied but each to a lesser degree, but I managed to overcome nearly all of them by simply increasing my focus while also watching carefully the keyboard or pen while I type or write. Unfortunately there can be far more serious cases which are nigh untreatable if not spotted in the early childhood years.

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    Author's Note: Hello there everyone I just wanted to welcome you to the sixth story that I've uplaoded, now for those trollish types hear me out. Like I said before there's no plot to this one, so please think before you speak; and secondly I take great care in checking my spelling and grammar throughout all the lines. I'm just getting those fine points otu there, now with all that being said the First Chapter can finally get started. 

    Additional Warnings: This series will contain a lot of smutty material, but for this one only Oral will be added; now with that out of the way the chapter can begin. 

    Chapter One: A Medic's Duty 

    Haruno Sakura was working a late shift in Konohagakrue's Medical Unit; it was tireseome work but she was proud to see it through because it offered her a generous income. Sakura's primary goal was to keep all the paperwork in alphabetical order, which didn't take her long due to her great attneiton to detail that she learned from many years of reading during her kunoichi training. 

    Taking a little break from ehr duties Sakrua rested on one fo the comfortable hospital bed, closing those emerald colored eyes she recalled an old memory that was pleasing to her mind. It was when she was a young female in the Academy training to become a fully fledged Genin; and she had a crush on one Uzumaki Naruto; who couldn't stop staring at her developing body every chance he could get. 

    Mebuki had taught her younger daughter one crucial point regarding her training, and that was how to use her body as a weapon. Sakura was remembering the time she gave Naruto his very first oral exam, at first the sensation felt weird to him but when the pleasure rushed to his loins it was na incredible experience for him; in fact he adored the way Sakrua's tiny mouth was taking his member which was greater than average for his age with ease. 

    There were pleasant groans coming from the man's lips as he rocked her head back and forth along the length after gaining full control, and in perfect tune he was thrusting his hips back and forth making those medium sized pale mounds of breast flesh to jiggle lightly, for her age their growth was on par with her rival's and Naruto loved to watch them bounce while he was doing this. 

    Partially due to the fact that he didn't have much stamina, unlike the vast reserves that his adulthood would bestow upon him Naruto didn't last long, and when Sakrua started to moan around his width it was mroe than he could stand and with one last mighty thrust he poured his very first laod into the female's mouth and throat while she greedily gulped it all down never spilling a single drop. 

    Author's Note: This first chapter might be light on amterial, but if you read between the lines it tells you everything you need to know. I'm a pretty generous person, so that means you're going to get another chapter later my fellow readers; and on that ntoe I'll say goodbye for now."


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  • From Siklos88 on December 21, 2019

    A great scene is performed


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