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Reviews for In Your Arms

By : BigE2955
  • From ANON - Alex Wilson on March 23, 2018

    Can't wait for chapter 2!!!


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  • From The_King_in_White on October 07, 2017

    " his hot white cum meeting with her sweet nectar to form a sort of whirlwind inside of her. "

    Good imagery. Little things like this are like super details. It helps readers bring to mind a certain quality of the scene. Sasuke having just cum inside her sister, and it's all a seeping sticky white froth and so on.

    Beyond that, a bit short for a lemon and a bit skimpy on the fetish. Remember to play them up. Sasuke's fucking a cat girl and his own sister. That should make it in during the sex in a very descriptive and important way. Otherwise it feels like a vanilla scene.

    Your worldbuilding is good too. We're told pretty clearly what the hell Hinata is, why she can do what she does, and how it's not unique to her. Sasuke and Itachi are given motivations for why they just pick her up, and she's given motive for why she stays.


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  • From ANON - on September 06, 2017

    Wonderful story. It certainly looks interesting. Im hoping you continue to add more girls.


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  • From ANON - on September 06, 2017

    You want to know what I think well I'll tell you

     

    i think you're a piece of shit writer go choke on a horse cock you faggot 


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