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Reviews for Education in the Mountains

By : Mirandazoch
  • From SirGeneralSir on December 02, 2015
    first thought is that the first chapter was too short, but also too much like the canon episode,
    some minor changes here and there but nothing really special.

    the story for the most part feels like a typical fan fic romance,
    in that i mean there is no real plot even after the third chapter.

    im reading alot of interesting little things here and there about possible interactions with other characters,
    but it still gives the feeling of get to the point.

    this can be a personal thing, but to me i think you needed to have an actual threat or goal set sooner
    and then have the romance put into it as it goes along.

    take my story for example, its a story that has alot of romance aspects in it, alot of women are after the same guy etc,
    but at the same time its not the full focus of the story. i have a threat, a goal and other things appearing along the side.

    it feels like just another monday in the land of konoha, if your understanding my meaning.

    its not till about chapter 8 to me that things do start to get interesting.

    orcourse this is all just my personal perspective.

    you should join the forums of the site, the people there are really great to talk to
    and you can get alot of feedback from them if you ask, it would also allow people to MP you and the like.
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