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Reviews for Breaking Down Walls

By : Tales-of-the-Wolfblade
  • From SirGeneralSir on May 29, 2016
    Sup, i'm reading CH 13 and I am confused.
    I have seen a few things that appear to "pop" out of thin air.
    the first one, being the information about the setup for kidnapping Hinata, where and when did he get that file? I don't recall you saying where or when, I even went back 2 chapters to find it.
    second, during the start of the attack, you only mentioned Stone and sound ninja in CH 11? then sand ninja started to appear in CH 12 and 13.
    Third, having little notes breaks the flow of the story (flow like a river must be a constant)and its distracting because its making a reader think about what you're describing instead of the story,
    but that could just be me.

    I would ask that you look over your story/s and check to make sure it flows with your idea, and to make a "Map" of your story, mostly just little notes of where you want the story to go, what key events happen, that sort of thing.
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  • From ANON - Robert on March 27, 2016
    Well i can only imagine how much yelling naruto is going to get form his ladies scaring them like that. Loved the fight scene in the jail and now im hating Jiraya for what he did
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  • From ANON - pitbull4567 on March 18, 2016
    great chapter also there should be a sex scene between naruto and tsunade perhaps somthing more
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  • From ANON - naruhinalover20 on March 15, 2016
    Time ti see how naruto's plan works and what will happen when the dust settles
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  • From bchil005 on March 14, 2016
    Your story's been great so far, keep up the good work. I vote for a narTsu pairing, i always like reading those.
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  • From Kenshinryuu on March 14, 2016
    I'm going to vote for Mother/Son relationship, Naruto getting with Tsunade would make things awkward with Shizune, who seems to be interested in Naruto.
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  • From ANON - Anon on March 14, 2016
    I'd also like to see a sex scene and relationship between Naruto and Tsunade. I've always liked that pairing.
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  • From ANON - Guest 42 on February 24, 2016
    No Naruto and Tsunade please have her in a relationship with Jiraiya instead, at best the closest they should be together is a mother and son relationship.
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  • From ANON - John C. on February 22, 2016
    i want a sex scene between Naruto and Tsunade (using her younger visage)
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  • From ANON - Kitsune900 on February 21, 2016
    I think NaruTsu and have it stem from Tsunade going to comfort from Naruto after finding out that Jiraiya doesn't love her for her but her body
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  • From ANON - robert on February 21, 2016
    Nice chapter cant wait to see how the plan goes. i figured hinata wouldnt be the 1st since she is 12-13 atm im thinking hana or yuago might since they are of age but we will see. Also i vote for her with jiraya only if he lives and they are like mother/father figures to naruto if not i say naruto needs to tap that LOL
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  • From ANON - robert on February 14, 2016
    Well the way the elders and the others with naruto went down great. It was thought out and made sense. The lemon was excellent, and here is hoping hinata is pregs. The mission and how naruto told the fox to follow was great, now that he knows they are lying and that they want to kill the next hokage i wonder if naruto will try and turn this in his favor.
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  • From JChittester on January 25, 2016
    I hope Danzo gets what is coming to him. Even if Naruto has to became a Rouge Ninja, he will leave the village with everyone that loves him.
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  • From Kenshinryuu on January 25, 2016
    Danzo is a dick, hopefully Hinata and Haku will express their anger at this accusation of Naruto. I also doubt Han, Roshi, and Fu will take kindly to the elders trying to execute the only reason Konoha wasn't stomped flat by three Biju.
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  • From ANON - robert on January 24, 2016
    Nice chapter though this could be both good and bad with the hokage dead martial law will be declared (strongest ninja would be in charge or highest rank) either danzo or jiraya would be in charge. If they go through naruto's memories they will see yea he did kill them but also that danzo was the 1 that ordered it. I wonder what direction you will take cause just them coming up and saying he killed them with none of the knowing the details of the attack would raise questions either way i can foresee konoha be divide with who is on naruto's side and who is against him.
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