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Reviews for Land of perverts:Everyone has Perverseness

By : Narutothedevil.dnd
  • From ANON - hamm-ram of fanfiction on July 31, 2014
    hey, man, nice chapters.
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  • From SirGeneralSir on June 09, 2014
    so thats not a bad story, it shows some promise but i see a few things.

    1: missing words, you are missing alot of words in there or they are organized in the wrong way, simple editing would fix that, but no one is perfect.

    2: the wall of text is a bad thing, you should space out your story a bit, it helps to find where you left off as a reader when you have to scroll the page or even get up to take a piss or something.

    3: i think that you need a little more detail in whats going on, some parts are too vague and open ended.

    4: i think there could have been more with the event with sakura, more needed to happen and turn into more of a semi major thing, i liked it but it was too short, even though some people will not like that you did character bashing as they will call it, it can help a story if you do it right.

    all in all i think thats a good story, just needs some work.
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  • From AgentGv01 on April 29, 2014
    I consider character bashing like in this story one of the lowest forms of fanfic writing. I despite it as there really is no call for it and basically disrespect for the source material and usually makes one or more characters out of character which is also in this story. The first chapter is such a major turn off. The first chapter is such a rushed mess, there is no real detail and a lot of parts seem to be missing. Also like I said I hate character bashing so the crap you did with Sakura (who apparently you can't spell her name correctly once) was the last straw to me. It's not a surprise why you've pissed off so many people with this.
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  • From ANON - BDG on April 28, 2014
    This is quite bad due to huge walls of text and bad grammar. I won't be reading this anymore.
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  • From PyroJohn19 on April 27, 2014
    Why you hatin' Sakura?
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  • From ANON - Anonymoooose on April 27, 2014
    Let give you a bit of advice: Work on your spacing. This is a very difficult story to read with cluttered up words all bunched up together. Fix that and maybe more people will give this story a chance.
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  • From ANON - nari-chan on April 26, 2014
    cute i like it update soon
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 26, 2014
    Absolutely awful.
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  • From ANON - Cross on April 26, 2014
    You have no proper grammar and so far from just seeing your writing style, I have no high expectations from this story
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