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Reviews for Naruto: Lemonade Whirlpool

By : TimeShadow300
  • From Storm-Master55 on May 31, 2016
    Feel like this would be better if you added in more description and made it longer.
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  • From ANON - Darrius Mcgavock on April 21, 2015
    Hello my name is Darrius and I want you to please continue updating your story it's getting better and better now that I can't wait till you update your story but yeah Please continue to update your fanfiction it's getting better and better now so please continue to updating please and thank you.
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  • From ANON - Anon on January 28, 2014
    I love this premise. Not many stories like it out there honestly. Like 3 that I know of. I can only hope you'll continue as they have not. I will say though, it is definitely on the short side. Granted it was also the first chapter, that doesn't excuse that we jumped right into the sex with him and Tsunade. Make the sex scenes more descriptive and longer. Add plot if you so desire, or just have him claim whomever with no ooposition, I don't care really just make it worth reading and not just a short little 'Naruto and his bid dick,, fucked the tight cunt, OH God, cum buckets, over' add dialogue but not like 'mmm' cause thats just awkward to read and visualize in my head. Say moans or phrases and describe how they feel to each other and about each other and the like. I don't know the direction you're going to take this story but for me to continue reading it personally, I just ask 2 things, 1.) you update first and foremost and consistenly please, and 2.) Have Sakura in this harem, my God people don't understand that you can't have a Naruto character in a Naruto story and him not have some liking to Sakura. Sorry, that's just adding more OCness to him. Don't make an original character with a no no-nsense or stoic attitude and staple Naruto's name on there with this story. That's not Naruto... At all.
    Anyways before I rant too long please update this!
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  • From ANON - Anon on December 21, 2013
    keep up the good work!
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