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Reviews for Mind (Jutsu) Games

By : CrimsonIris
  • From ANON - passerby on February 01, 2010
    first of all... they're 13!!?! and shika had an 8 inches cock??!? imagine how big he is when he's 18. AHHAhahahha... anyway...

    geez, i thought that they're at least 16. you know, you dun have to rely on chuunin exam to explain everything you know,. there's a lot of make up reason you can come up with, make up some detailed mission as your plot, these guys will grow up at some point. having sex at 13 is only suggestd social degradation of the community itself. not flaming, but it was confusing... at first and quite...scaring. both the characters and the readers.

    overall, the storyline is good, kunoichi worming through their target using sex is a total classic - but it always work. however, i can't help but notice, the first 5 or 6 chapters of this fic is wonderfully written (up until the oral in the wood, and yes, no matter how you much you tried to deny it, oral is considered sex, and kakashi should know better), but it getting sloppy towards the end. more plothole appears and... the ending is totally crappy (sorry!!! had to say this). major inconsistent with the ages... i mean, the sex and interaction during the earlier part of the fic suggested that they're way older and the revelation that shika is actually 13 is like being splashed by a bucket full of ice. no kidding! my first thought was (13!! holy shyt i was reading kiddies porn!!!)

    and ino losing her virginity at 13 is... a tragedy. seriously.

    ah, i did mentioned the plotholes earlier right? noticed that shika's quite serious neck injury magically disappear in the last chapter and ino was hugging him tightly. that must have been freakingly hurts.

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  • From ANON - Brittany on August 15, 2009
    Hey, it's Brittany. I kind of stopped reading Naruto fics for awhile so I wasn't watching to updates on AFF. But I started really liking Naruto fics again and so I came back to finish the fic! I think you did a really good job on the ending. I like how she ended up forgiving him and how they saved her and blahblahblah. I think that there was only one mistake as far as I read, but I'm not too sure where it was. And I can't help but wonder what the 'shadowy' figure was when they were hugging. I think this does leave room for a sequel because of that 'shadowy' figure that you mentioned, but of course, it's up to you whether or not you'd like to write a sequel or not. Great job!
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  • From ANON - ArAshiMitArAshi on August 07, 2009
    The ending was short, but you wrapped it up quite nicely. I'd love if you write more ShikaxIno story because you are good at doing it. So good luck to you!
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  • From ANON - ArAshiMitArAshi on August 07, 2009
    Okay, I just have to review this chapter. Poor Ino! I don't know what I'd do if I was in her place. I understand she thought of Shikamaru raping her because it was just against her will! I hope Kakashi could save her. Btw, your story is fantastic. Cheers~
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  • From ANON - ArAshiMitArAshi on August 06, 2009
    Hey! Glad I found this! I have read almost all ShikaxIno fanfics in fanfiction.net and stumble upon this site ans saw this. This is a very great start.
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  • From ANON - Alicia on July 31, 2009
    I'm following your threesome story with Team 7 but I hadn't read this one till now. Wow. You have a twisted, devious mind and I like it! Hope the sequel happens!
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  • From ANON - ChristalStar on July 18, 2009
    My vote is for the finished story, but I also like the sound of that last one.
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  • From Calcifer on July 16, 2009
    They're headed to the Uchiha district, right? I wonder how Ino will handle actually returning to the place she was raped. That will be interesting to read. I can't wait to see what you've got planned for the final chapters of this fic.

    Keep up the good work!

    ~Angel
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  • From ANON - Sebine on June 11, 2009
    Wow, this chapter needs to be fixed

    Formatted
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  • From ANON - may on April 06, 2009
    man I can't WAIT for another update! Please let it be soon, this story is so good!
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  • From KdaAnimefan on April 06, 2009
    an enjoyable chapter, quite the mind fuck for shikamaru there hehe i look forward to the next chapter
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  • From CurtisZidaneZiraa on March 13, 2009
    Whoot! Go Kurenai. The shit is going to hit the fan. Keep writing!
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  • From Aleya on March 01, 2009
    ^_^ I am quite pleased! It has been a LONG time since i found an amazingly well written fanfic. ^_^ ^_^ ^_^
    I am a HUGE Shikamaru fan! *squee* and i like Ino a lot too.. i believe she's my 2nd fav girl so why not right? Anyway continue the very very good work!
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  • From CurtisZidaneZiraa on December 30, 2008
    Ya! Kick ass Shika! Let's get that back up here! After he defeats them all. They're the back up, in case he needs help. Which he won't after tricking them. Mwahahaha. Poor Ino.
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  • From LaMariposa3795 on September 06, 2008
    I absolutely LOVE this fic...great job!! Shika and Ino are one of my FAVORITE pairings...next to Gaara and Hinata of course.....Shika totally has it figured out...he IS a strategist...it's his nature to figure these kind of things out(stuff out of the norm)....I can't wait to see what the next chapter holds!!! I hope you update VERY soon!!
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