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Reviews for One Crazy Night

By : jiraiyamasta
  • From ANON - CrazyRabidBlonde on January 01, 2007
    Uhh... yeah. This is concrit, not a flame. I don't want to barbeque you, just open your eyes to some mistakes. #1) Can you say, 'Paragraph of Doom'? Because in case you didn't notice (maybe in your word processor it had paragraphs, I don't know) but the entire chapter is ONE PARAGRAPH. #2) There are a bunch of little spelling and grammatical errors here and there that could easily be fixed and would up the quality of this fanfic a lot. #3) Some dialogue might be nice. It could be thoughts, actual speech, anything. Stuff like that just makes it more interesting for the reader. You have the makings of a really good fic here, and with minimal effort, you can turn it into something great! :)

    ~CRB (Kelsey)
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  • From Ruri on December 30, 2005
    OMG continue! MUST KNOW WHAT HAPPENS NEXT! Great idea!
    -Ruri
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  • From ANON - sukia on October 22, 2005
    its good, please write more
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  • From ANON - Scar on August 29, 2005
    nice start
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  • From ANON - kit-chan on August 09, 2004
    LOL LOL shikamaru is sucha dumbass! lol I totally love him!

    although i gotta say...doing something while he was drunk..and then ditching ino like that...*glares at shikamaru*
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