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Reviews for Climbing

By : Anra
  • From ANON - SexySiriusBlack on June 03, 2004
    This fic is wonderful. Well...at least the first chapter. I'm so glad those were just alternate endings. That first chapter was just perfect...and then I read the alternate endings...and it just made the first chapter feel cheaper for some reason...like...it wasn't ...what's the word...powerful enough by itself...or you were just writing them to please others... Take it from me...don't write things just to please others...well...you can...but only if you like it, too. I've written things that I thought peopouldould love just to see if I could get a bunch of reviews...and nobody reviewed...except like one person that just complained...so...if you don't want it...then...you know...you don't have to give it to us...cause it's yours. But, you don't have to listen to me...I just thought it was fine the way it was in the first chapter...and much more effective.
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  • From ANON - jazzy on June 02, 2004
    Alternate Ending number 2 works really well for me. No killing the boys off! here me? It's perfectly okay to maim, hurt, or damage critically with very slim chance of survival, but no, absolutely no killing. Lots, and lots of loving sure, kissing hey wonderful. But please no killing Naruto or Sasuke, off. *-*
    Other than that small whining tantrum, I really liked it.
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  • From ANON - Meyme on May 31, 2004
    Thank you so much for reading my critique and NOT biting my head off - I am aware of that my criticism often is expressed a little rashly, and people tend to take it the wrong way more often than not. I suppose the angst-issue is a matter of taste, but as long as you write the kind of stories you want, it should not matter much. Though I fully support the idea of a beta; sometimes people can notice things you never thought of, and I know that from personal experience. I don't really have a permanent e-mail adress, unfortunately, but thank you for taking my comments in consideration. Good luck with your future 'fics.
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  • From Anra on May 31, 2004
    Meyme, I'm not sure if you will read this or nott It I'm writing this anyway. I would have emailed you this instead, but you left no email addy so that's a no go. Thank you muc much for your criticism. I agree that the two endings are much worse than the actual story, and I'm glad for the feedback. I had actually never ended to write those two endings, but when I got so many reviews of ff.net wanting a happy ending,ort ort of got on a review high from getting more reviews in one period of time than I ever have before.s mis might have also been coupled with my romantic nature which almost always wishes for a happy ending. I also have no beta telling me whether this something is good or not. I generally get really mad when multichaptered stories have angst chapter after angst chapter after angst chapter, no matter how much I love the story. I will be writing a prequal to this, but unlike your advice it will be both angsty and fluffy (but not uber fluffy like the endings). There are two reasons for this: 1) For reasons I have already mentioned above, it would most likly pain me to write angst chapter after angst chapter and 2) I already suggest in Climbing that they used to be a happy couple. This story will go from when they were starting to be friends (fluffy) to right before the events in Climbing (angsty). I plan for this story to only be PG or PG-13, so it will only be on ff.net. I would be honored it you critiqued it there.
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  • From ANON - Meyme on May 30, 2004
    I liked your idea. The first part kept me interested. There is basically nothing wrong with your language, and the music fits in quite well. However; both endings don't solve anything and are merely cliché-infested, unoriginal and flatly disintiinting fandreams.
    If you are gonna write angst, do it all the way through, with small bits of sunshine, leaving the reader with enough hope to continue, yet not too much sugar-fluff which WILL cause the reader to puke. It was a good attempt however, which unfortunately turned into yucky g00 of nothingness in the end. You portrayed their feelings so animatedly, it is hard to believe that all it takes is a hug, a kiss and a cheesy line to patch their battered hearts up.
    Keep on writing, I'm looking forward to your future fanfics.
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