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Reviews for Ravenous

By : pffernuse19
  • From ANON - Neko-chan on August 11, 2005
    Very good for a first fic. And i like how you captured the characters' ppersonalities too. *nod* It seemed a tad unrealistic in the time it took for Sakurah to recover, but other than that i think you did very well. *nod*
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  • From ANON - Emily Seake on June 24, 2005
    Too Short.....make...longer....X_x
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  • From ANON - Anon on February 20, 2005
    im so confused....
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  • From ANON - blisblop on January 21, 2005
    What is with the ads?You could ad more detail about how they make each other feel phisically.the flow in the story is kind of stop and start.But it is worth pursuing if you can keep the energy/lust up.
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  • From ANON - xxkaskading_darknessxx on June 17, 2004
    Its pretty good for your first fanfic, better than mines at least ^_^; Anyway, I like it alot, but it's way to short for my taste and it went by way too fast. Take time to put in little details and lengthen the story and plot. But all in all I like it, keep it up, you'll get better ^_^
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  • From ANON - Anon on April 30, 2004
    I suggest you check your verb tenses. It is very difficult to continue reading a story when, shortly into the first paragraph, it randomly switches from the past to the present tense.
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  • From ANON - silverfox 19 on April 29, 2004
    interesting
    continue
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  • From ANON - Ookima on April 28, 2004
    nice chapter
    some OCCness but
    still a very good story
    keep it up!
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  • From ANON - TaintedBeauty on April 28, 2004
    Liked your stand and the only thing I see wrong with it besides the spelling would be Sas's mushyness. x_x Also, you seem to switch from present tense to past tense. Present tense works best with POV's >.> Please don't turn this into a POV, anywho try to keep it in past tense thats about the only flaws I saw. You're writing style is good; very eye catching and.. :O Mak Sas Sasuke!! ^_^ Keep up the good work.
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  • From ANON - Vampia Zee on April 27, 2004
    *pokes Naruto* oh, come on Naru-chan! You know you liked the kiss! No need to go..uh...i dunno about it! >D

    Great chappie! At least Sasuke got his feelings across right?...at least...i hope so o.o; More soon please!
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  • From ANON - Shez on April 27, 2004
    Very good for your first fic. ^_^ Continue soon, onegai. Naruto seems a bit OOC, though. *shrugs* But it's fine. ^^
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  • From sourgrape on April 27, 2004
    Not TOO bad, the spelling could use a bit of work, and the title is pretty cool. ow you've go me wondering, though, so keep writing! I know how you feel, first fic stress on your shoulders and all, my story We Love The Ones We Hurt is my first as well. Well, keep going, Id like to see how Naruto reacts as well!
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  • From ANON - Vampia Zee on April 26, 2004
    Hmmm I liked it xDD Grammer could use some more but I still want to know what Naruto's reaction will be to what Sasuke has to say >D

    *gives you pocky* I DEMAND MORE!! *tackles to floor*
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  • From ANON - Ichiban on April 26, 2004
    welp, i thought i did good for a first try, but i should have posted it on fanfiction.net first.... uh oh now i have like really bad regrets, grrrrr o well wats done is done hope yall like if not goodbye all ill be reading.
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