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By : DevilnBlue
  • From anapana83 on October 17, 2008
    So far i've enjoyed reading this. A very interesting take on Naruto and Sasuke.
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  • From ANON - a kitsunes light on October 17, 2008
    Wow! I really liked this chapter! Even more than the first! Because here iachi really seems to be getting more human because of naruto and is also helping him!!!!
    I can't wait to read more! But what would also be really good (but I don't know if that would interfere in the plot you have in mind, sorry) would be if people like itachi's mother at least started seeing naruto as the little child that he is after sometime of seeing him everyday at itachi's side
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  • From serenagold on October 16, 2008
    I'm really impressed by this chapter. ^^ The first chapter Itachi was pretty standard fare, but by chapter two, you've already got humanity dripping out of him as he struggles to understand and take care of the broken child. I really enjoyed this story immensely.

    Keep up the great work. I'm looking forward to future updates.
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  • From LadyVorlana on October 16, 2008
    Oh, and I forgot to mention, I think you have done perfectly in describing a child-Itachi. It truly does seem to fit the way a prodigy such as him would have acted. I just have to wonder how having someone like Naruto around is going to affect him. I think in public we wont see many changes but maybe in private he will be a little warmer.
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  • From LadyVorlana on October 16, 2008
    Ok I really like this one. I do hope to see more of it soon. I read the prologue before and thought it had potential but now I really want to know what happens. This seems to have such a unique storyline and I cant wait to see where it goes in the end.
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  • From on October 13, 2008
    Huuuuhh. *clinks tongue* Interresting I give it a 5.... *pauses* Outta 5!
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  • From BlackSandGara on October 13, 2008
    Best paragraph award goes to:
    “Beautiful…”

    Dark eyes fastened and greedily drank in the damage body in front of him. It was, all of it, beautiful from the cuts and bruises that littered golden brown skin, to the way the body laid as if a marionette doll had suddenly lost its strings.”

    What a fascinating start to your story. I love the detail and the smooth flow of your writing style. Mix that with your vivid imagery, you have a truly great start of a story here. I love the marionette doll part I must of have read it six times before going to the next paragraph.

    It would seem like Itachi is going to start out not really caring for little chibi Naruto but slowly start to care for him. I would love to see how their relationship will grow from here and what they will become.

    I wonder how you are going to do the time line? Is it going to fallow the anime or are you going to make an AU. Kinda like how different everyone in Naruto would be if one thing was changed; if Naruto was found and protected by Itachi and not Iruka. How would that change everything in the Naruto Universe; like a pebble being drop in a lake the shock waves it would cause and the things it would change. Would Itachi still kill the Uchiha or would the council order a kill on Naruto? Would Itachi take out the Uchiha and the Council?

    I would love to see where you go from here. What will happen? Ooh and I love Naruto’s statement of: “Then I am yours. I, Naruto Uzumaki, am Itachi’s pet.” Plus I wonder what the parents are going to say about this. Will they disown him? Make him live on his own what about Sasuke? Maybe he’ll take him with him? And how will Itachi react when he realizes that Naruto needs 24/7 protection from the village. Will Itachi train him? That could make all the difference no one ever trained Naruto when he was younger in school. It was all self taught, self learned. What if someone was there to train him Naruto? To see the power that he has.

    I hope you will continue with this story. You have a great writing style and I would love to just see where you would take this start. I really think it is a great prolong to what can be an amazing story. Will whether you continue or not I’m off to read your other stories.

    ~The Black Sand of Gara

    P.s. If you want e-mail me at Kar.zini@gmail.com

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  • From ultistarmon on July 01, 2008
    Interesting! Alright, you've caught my attention, now do something with it. I hope to see more soon.
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  • From serenagold on July 01, 2008
    I want a cute little Naruto pet for my own too. :(
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  • From ANON - Hitomi No Ryu on June 30, 2008
    Thank you for not beginning with little Naruto being chased by villagers. (It's a over-used start to many Naruto fics and I am SICK AND TIRED OF IT!!)

    Can't wait for the next chapter! UPDATE SOON~~!
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  • From ANON - animelover on June 30, 2008
    interesting idea! i'm curious to see how this evolves; have seen other plots like this but you have a unique spin just waiting to happen. ;-)
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  • From ANON - Anon on June 30, 2008
    interesting
    continue
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  • From ANON - Devious Lil Devil on June 30, 2008
    hooray for ItaNaru!! very very nice introduction. I absolutely love what you've done so far. looking forward to the next update. can't wait to see his parents (andreaction
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  • From ItaNarulover on June 30, 2008
    My ItaNaru-sensess are tingling, is this a ItaNaru fic perhaps?
    I loved it, because someohw it kinda could make sense, because that could really have happened in the "real" naruto-world. Not the pet-part, but Itachi meeting Naruto like that as young.
    And as you can tell, I'm an ItaNaru-lover, so I would be so happy if this would be such a fic.
    And please tell me this aint a oneshot? That would totally suck.
    So take care. Hugs
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  • From LadyVorlana on June 30, 2008
    It has possibilities...I want to see what happens next before I say whether I really like it or not.
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